Overall, I liked this book. It was well written and suspenseful, and it was easy to read and pretty engaging.
There were several issues I had with it, however, by the end:
1. It was so hard for me to picture who Syzygy was. The use of the plural “they” was really had for me to get used to, and I didn’t know if it was a boy or a girl (yes, I understand that it’s the point, but it was very hard for me to envision the nonbinary persona). I’ll commend the author for at least trying the pronoun, and after awhile it seemed to be the norm, but more physical description would have helped here.
2. The whole thing with Syzygy (still cannot pronounce it) at the end was bizarre. Where did they come from— out of state? Impersonating a police officer with software that was downloaded? It didn’t make any sense to me whatsoever.
3. Why would Raymond be killing so many people himself? Higher ups get people to do their dirty work for them; they don’t do it themselves.
4. Who was watching Madeline and that friend of Piper’s? That wasn’t followed through on.
5. Alex was really kind of weird with his behavior several
times. He was so weird that I even thought he might be involved in all of this. I mean, passages like “Would Alex really have fallen asleep on the sofa bed right after I texted?” (Paraphrase) literally went nowhere. Why were details like that included?
6. And this thing with the ghost is too unbelievable for me. I still do not get it, despite the lackluster attempt to explain it at the end by it maybe being that murdered woman with the same initials (hello?!? Far fetched?! Plus, she’s a criminal too, apparently). And if it was Angie and Madeline communicating… what?!? Let’s just throw in a Hawking reference and hope that covers it. No.
7. What was that whole interaction with that guy Alex knew on Facebook who Madeline and Alex were using for answers to their search for Angie and Piper? That poor guy. He was being used, and over what? The fact that he used to work at Raymond’s business? It really made them look like jerks. What was the point of that? He never shows up again and it certainly didn’t contribute to character development.
8. Madeline did almost no work for school, called out in her first two weeks, and was always hungover. Her musical ability was another undeveloped plot point. And I’m
still kind of unclear about her whole family situation. It was very odd. She wouldn’t last very long with her work ethic! She is completely alone? It’s a stretch.
9. It seems to me quite dumb that Raymond would rent his personal house to ANYONE, considering there was a body in there. The dude owns a construction company (or at least used to- he’s certainly a powerful man). Why not just bulldoze the whole thing?
10. The biggest hole here is Piper. To end with basically “she was shot in the head and back”- oh well- seems terrible, since she was the catalyst for the plot. She remained terribly undeveloped, including specifically what she was working on.
11. I don’t understand what Angie/ Nat did at the end. She set up video cameras? How? When? The place had no reception, and did she just know that Raymond was going to kidnap Alex and bring him to the abandoned construction site?
12. What exactly has Angie/ Nat been doing for 10 years? I know it said working in coding and keeping her head down, but how many aliases can she have? She’s basically been committing identity theft, but that’s fine?! And her dad has also disappeared, and what’s he been doing? Finally, why all the backstory on Angie’s mom? It’s not important to the plot. Why not say she died and get on with it if the psychological damage part doesn’t play a role and the abandonment issue isn’t explored?
13. There’s no backstory to Raymond. Clearly, the hot button issues (second amendment rights, nonbinary pronouns, corporate corruption) are meant to garner attention, but feel almost forced to me.
14. So Potato (no description again other than a 10 pound dog) finds a hand. (I think we all saw a mile ahead of time that something was buried in that wall). And what do Alex and Madeline do? Think about sex, answer the door for a courier (and how did that courier know she was home? He was so insistent on delivering the cease and desist order… but that was it. Anticlimactic!), put the hand in a paper bag and throw it under the sink, and then decide not to call the (presumably) corrupt police. No, they go back to Alex’s apartment, drink more wine, think about sex again, then don’t have it, then Alex falls asleep for no reason… and Madeline spends the next day reading a book. THERE IS A SKELETON BURIED IN A WALL! You’d think there might be a teeny sense of urgency here, but nope.
15. Why all the backstory to Ralph and Madeline? It wasn’t like it contributed to the plot at all, nor did it serve as a counter to her relationship with Alex in any meaningful way, as they’re barely in a relationship even at the end. If the romance was central to the plot, fine. But it wasn’t, so all the Ralph flashbacks seemed superfluous. I laughed when the author wrote something like “If Madeline had wasted 5 years of her life when she was 40, no big deal, but to do so at 23 was horrible” (again, paraphrased). I mean… the complete opposite is true! When you’re older and single, the stakes are much higher! 23 is a baby. Sheesh.
Reading this book, I actually liked it a lot. But then the end felt so rushed, and it was a whole lot of explaining rather than being in the moment. And all of the loopholes noted above made it too silly for me. I’m glad I read it, but I know I’ll be just another forgettable novel.
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