Okay, so, wow.
On one hand, it’s an easy read. Fairly short, I finished it in less than a day. It was mildly entertaining (I mean, I finished reading it!). That’s about it for the compliments, actually.
On the other (critical) hand, this book is poorly written. I was getting “middle school fanfiction” vibes the whole time. There were multiple places I highlighted and just wrote, “what?” The writing was not good.
For example, on page 27:
“Hernando had the gallant manners of his Spanish heritage, and his eyes lit up when he smiled.”
And then less than a full page later! Literally 2-3 paragraphs:
“When he smiled, his dark eyes sparkled.”
Constance, girl, you just said that! You don’t need to repeat something you just said on the same page.
The writing is sometimes so unbearable and makes absolutely no sense. Another example - “Shadowhawk’s words didn’t penetrate Shiloh’s consciousness because she was overcome with tender feelings for him”. What?!?! He is speaking to her face and she is so emotionally tender that she goes temporarily deaf?
There was one page where almost EVERY PARAGRAPH ended with the word “meat”. There was no campfire, couldn’t have roasted meat. Then Shiloh is forlorn and eats her dried meat. Then she lays down and thinks about stew with savory meat. Omg. Constance - please. I don’t care this much about the meat.
Other examples of this being like a young girl writing a fanfic:
“With a strangled groan, Shadowhawk pressed his mouth against hers” (198). A strangled groan?! Is he being stabbed on the battlefield or trying to have sex? Come on now.
“His hands moved over her body, his mouth plundered hers” (198). Let’s leave out the pirate language when talking about kissing.
“Tears gathered in her eyes as he gently caressed between her thighs” (199). Honestly I have no words for this one. Just…. why? The crying during sex for no reason reappears on page 207: “Tears were streaming down her face and he kissed them away”. Why does Shiloh keep randomly crying during sex?! Because she is so emotionally tender? Ladies, can anyone relate? I sure couldn’t!!!
Constance’s odd attitude towards sex rears itself yet again on page 209: “Shiloh was allowing a man’s body to conquer her…”. Sex is not being conquered! Maybe this is nit picky but I really did not like this.
On page 233, almost at the end, I wrote “I feel no tension from the conflicts in this book”. It took me a moment to discover why because the plot seems to be okay, there is conflict that makes sense, there are grievances that fall upon Shiloh and her brother. I think, however, since everything always turns out okay for Shiloh and she gets whatever she wants, I just felt 0 tension. The dad character being killed off so early made it so that seemingly tragic event didn’t actually elicit any emotional response from me as the reader. It was a good plot point to drive the story, but it did not serve the purpose of creating tension.
The characters were FLAT and so static it was crazy. Did not connect to any of them. MAYBE Shiloh a tiny little bit but Shadowhawk was like a total nothingburger. Luke could’ve been cut from the story and I probably wouldn’t have noticed. Stale, boring.
Another thing to note - this book is probably about as stereotypical and borderline racist (if not outright) you can get when writing a romance involving a Native American male lead. There was little if no research done into tribespeople, the portrayal of Shadowhawk and his people is like picture perfect stereotype. That was a huge turn off for me! Nothing like Ellen O’Connel’s “Dancing on Coals”, which I did actually enjoy as the characters were well rounded, had conflicts that weren’t immediately resolved, had motivations and desires outside of driving the main plot, and the native characters were not so dramatized that it was offensive.
Oh also, just for fun, I’ll point out that every single Native character who interacted with Shiloh at length can speak English. Shadowhawk, his mom, his sister, they’re all fluent. This is explained in the book but it threw me for a loop at first. There’s a scene where Shadowhawk is like “yes I speak broken English but it’ll take a little for it all to come back to me” and then like two pages later he’s speaking English like it’s been his first language his whole life. Again to compare to Ellen O’Connel’s “Dancing on Coals”, the main female lead actually learned the language of the tribe she was staying with instead of the native characters just magically knowing English. Again this is probably nit picky but it threw me off!
Overall I would NOT recommend this read unless you’re looking for something so bad that it’s mildly entertaining. This book would be great for getting drunk with friends and reading it out loud to make fun of it. Or play a drinking game, take a shot every time a character is reduced to a stereotype (ex Shiloh being ~oh so tender~ woman) or every time the writing makes you cringe! Although maybe I wouldn’t survive that game very long….