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418 pages, Kindle Edition
First published January 27, 2012
"Can I do some normal work, at least?" [Gabi] demanded. "I do need to make a living somehow."And this ...
Ian and Kyle both snorted at her last comment. She knew it was because she was independently wealthy enough to never have to work another day in her life.
Byron was used to being the most mature person in the organisation he'd helped to found, being almost venerated for his wisdom and experience, and he'd just had to think about the fact that Julius was more than four times as old as he was...You don't tell readers what a character 'just had to think about'. You convey it through an expression on their face or have them stutter a few words or whatever. And Gabi thinking on what 'she knew' about her wealth. Stop 'telling' me what characters are thinking or feeling. Show me!