Not Enough
This read was just blah! I stumbled through it because I don’t believe in starting and not finishing. As someone who’s in publishing, I feel the book was underdeveloped. A no no is, writing about sex and not developing the scene. If your trying to build suspense, talk about touching, or feelings, but not going all the way. When you get to that moment when they do go there, the reader will be more in tuned and reluctant to pull away from the book and the extra hot steamy moment. If your not comfortable writing about those scenes leave them out completely and insinuate to the reader that it happened by saying it happened.
Also, there was No chemistry between the characters until the end. These two people were disjointed until the end of the book. There was no passion of any kind. Just less than stellar sex. There was no sensual touching, passionate kissing, deep conversations. All surface. I usually go through an author’s catalog, but I’m not going to do that with you. Don’t want to give myself another headache or leave a less than stellar review.
I applaud you on your Indie writing journey! However, I need you to do more research as you would do for anything else. That means read for knowledge. Gather those number 1’s and read. Not to copy their style, but to gather ideas of how to develop a love story with or without steamy sex or a happy ending.
I gave you 2 stars, because your editing was on point and I didn’t have to restructure sentences and leave notes as I read on grammar and punctuation. Your book can’t just be words on a page and paid/family reviews. People will find your work and read it for themselves.