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An Unexpected Inheritance: A Pride and Prejudice Vagary
Not much in Fitzwilliam Darcy’s life has been unexpected. Until now.
As an officer in His Majesty’s service, Darcy’s life is completely mapped out before a letter from home sets him on a new path. He has inherited his family’s fortune, but as the former master’s great-nephew, he is not certain why.
With his cousin Richard Fitzwilliam in tow, Darcy visits his former commanding officer to learn what it takes to run an estate. He is quickly captivated by one of Bennet’s many daughters, but he fights the attraction. His new duties require his full attention.
Elizabeth Bennet has grown up as a general’s daughter, not a pampered country miss. Though her family has lived as gentry for several years, a part of her still longs for the freedoms her former life afforded.
Despite his insulting speech and gruff manners, Elizabeth suspects that the clever, handsome Mr. Darcy is as anxious to find his place in the world as she. Yet she must be reasonable. With his wealth and family connections to the peerage, Mr. Darcy would never consider her.
When trouble comes to Longbourn, can Darcy and Elizabeth conquer their reservations and fight this battle--together?
As an officer in His Majesty’s service, Darcy’s life is completely mapped out before a letter from home sets him on a new path. He has inherited his family’s fortune, but as the former master’s great-nephew, he is not certain why.
With his cousin Richard Fitzwilliam in tow, Darcy visits his former commanding officer to learn what it takes to run an estate. He is quickly captivated by one of Bennet’s many daughters, but he fights the attraction. His new duties require his full attention.
Elizabeth Bennet has grown up as a general’s daughter, not a pampered country miss. Though her family has lived as gentry for several years, a part of her still longs for the freedoms her former life afforded.
Despite his insulting speech and gruff manners, Elizabeth suspects that the clever, handsome Mr. Darcy is as anxious to find his place in the world as she. Yet she must be reasonable. With his wealth and family connections to the peerage, Mr. Darcy would never consider her.
When trouble comes to Longbourn, can Darcy and Elizabeth conquer their reservations and fight this battle--together?
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May 12, 2022
Having been teased by the various excerpts and comments during the blog tour I could not wait to read this story, even though it was not available from KU.
As the story begins, we are reading about Darcy and his cousin, Richard, in their roles under the command of General Bennet. Pay attention to the incident described as it has significance as the story plays out. The General is wounded. Darcy gets a letter from his uncle, Lord Matlock, that he has inherited Pemberley. This is a surprise as his great uncle, who owned Pemberly, has a brother whom all expected to inherit. Why the change in his will?
Darcy, instead of departing for Pemberley (having been reared by his father a barrister) contacts Bennet, asking for some guidance, an education (if you will) in how to manage an estate. He takes Richard with him as he plans to share Pemberley with him. Richard does have an older brother who will inherit. However, that brother's character leaves doubts that he will be around long or that he will ever produce an heir. So, Richard might come into estate ownership on his own.
So, we have these two men living at Longbourn. The sisters have been reared with more attention to their education and manners. They do NOT come out early. Plus, although she died before her husband retired, Mrs. Bennet had different behaviors. She took care of the troops under her husband's command; not only feeding them on occasion but also tending to their wounds, their wives and children, etc. (If, like the Bennets, the whole family "followed the drum".)
So, we read two different threads in this story: one is of romance (...not only Darcy and Elizabeth) and the other is a mystery as to who and why it seems General Bennet is the target of several attempts at murder. Elizabeth has taken on the chore of helping a large and clumsy Darcy learn some social graces, i.e., dancing. This was amusing.
There is an accident with a carriage. Jane was in grave danger with that event and Elizabeth also puts herself at high risk as she seeks to extricate her sister from the carriage. Then as things develop there are questions as to whether it was at all an accident.
Bingley does rent Netherfield but is a new acquaintance to Darcy, as well as the Bennets. Wickham shows up and his interaction with Elizabeth plays out differently. Colonel Forster's reaction as he is informed about this troop member's history is a surprise.
Collins shows up: uninvited and unwanted. The handling of that event was highly interesting. Things for him play out a little differently, also.
The danger deepens and help is recruited from London - men who were known to the General when he served.
At the end, the author then gives us a link to Love, Thomas An Unexpected Inheritance Bonus Epilogue. I have that on my plate to read next, so I don't forget all the details herein while I open that story. (I cannot find this book listed anywhere to give a review...just know that it has to do with Mr. Bennet deciding to look at marrying again, especially in light of how awful Collins is.)
I highly recommend this story. It was well written.
As the story begins, we are reading about Darcy and his cousin, Richard, in their roles under the command of General Bennet. Pay attention to the incident described as it has significance as the story plays out. The General is wounded. Darcy gets a letter from his uncle, Lord Matlock, that he has inherited Pemberley. This is a surprise as his great uncle, who owned Pemberly, has a brother whom all expected to inherit. Why the change in his will?
Darcy, instead of departing for Pemberley (having been reared by his father a barrister) contacts Bennet, asking for some guidance, an education (if you will) in how to manage an estate. He takes Richard with him as he plans to share Pemberley with him. Richard does have an older brother who will inherit. However, that brother's character leaves doubts that he will be around long or that he will ever produce an heir. So, Richard might come into estate ownership on his own.
So, we have these two men living at Longbourn. The sisters have been reared with more attention to their education and manners. They do NOT come out early. Plus, although she died before her husband retired, Mrs. Bennet had different behaviors. She took care of the troops under her husband's command; not only feeding them on occasion but also tending to their wounds, their wives and children, etc. (If, like the Bennets, the whole family "followed the drum".)
So, we read two different threads in this story: one is of romance (...not only Darcy and Elizabeth) and the other is a mystery as to who and why it seems General Bennet is the target of several attempts at murder. Elizabeth has taken on the chore of helping a large and clumsy Darcy learn some social graces, i.e., dancing. This was amusing.
There is an accident with a carriage. Jane was in grave danger with that event and Elizabeth also puts herself at high risk as she seeks to extricate her sister from the carriage. Then as things develop there are questions as to whether it was at all an accident.
Bingley does rent Netherfield but is a new acquaintance to Darcy, as well as the Bennets. Wickham shows up and his interaction with Elizabeth plays out differently. Colonel Forster's reaction as he is informed about this troop member's history is a surprise.
Collins shows up: uninvited and unwanted. The handling of that event was highly interesting. Things for him play out a little differently, also.
The danger deepens and help is recruited from London - men who were known to the General when he served.
At the end, the author then gives us a link to Love, Thomas An Unexpected Inheritance Bonus Epilogue. I have that on my plate to read next, so I don't forget all the details herein while I open that story. (I cannot find this book listed anywhere to give a review...just know that it has to do with Mr. Bennet deciding to look at marrying again, especially in light of how awful Collins is.)
I highly recommend this story. It was well written.
February 17, 2023
An Unexpected Inheritance
In 1808, Major Fitzwilliam Darcy and Lieutenant Colonel Richard Fitzwilliam are in Vimeiro, Portugal. During a break from battle, Darcy is reading a letter from his Great Uncle Darcy with whom he corresponds regularly and who is also the current Master of Pemberley. Darcy’s parents are already deceased—his father having been a barrister. The two officers are under the command of Lieutenant General Bennet. When Bennet is accidentally shot by a private, his injury will force his return to England and to Longbourn.
Three years later, Darcy and Richard are still on the continent and battle weary when Lord Matlock writes to inform Darcy that his great-uncle Darcy has died. He has unexpectedly inherited his uncle’s fortune, including Pemberley. What a reversal of circumstance! Instead of going directly to Pemberley, however, Richard convinces him to go to General Bennet at Longbourn and learn how to run an estate first. A loyal friend and cousin, Darcy refuses to leave Spain without Richard. So begins a visit to Longbourn of several months where they will learn the makings of an estate and ultimately find love.
This unique premise provides the reader with quite a different look at the Darcy we’ve always known as a Cambridge-educated gentleman of the ton, already ensconced as Master of Pemberley. Here we have a Darcy who never even learned to dance—made all the more difficult with his towering height! Referring to Charlotte after she partook in a bit of deliberate mischief, we read this highly diverting exchange:
… “She stepped on my feet repeatedly. I thought perhaps I was setting my feet wrong, but I was not. I believe she did it on purpose!” …
“Come, Darcy,” Fitzwilliam said with a grin, “I do not believe for one moment that she injured you.” “Do be serious,” Darcy shot back. “I could barely feel her. But twice, the dance required that I move the foot she was standing on. I did not wish to launch the young lady across the room!”—quote from book
While this Darcy is still awkward in social settings and still stares at Elizabeth, he isn’t overly full of pride and, this Elizabeth, while still impertinent, isn’t annoyingly so. Darcy is very intelligent with an interest in engineering. Elizabeth is happy to know a man willing to discuss such things with her. I truly enjoyed their portrayals and how their relationship began and grew—Elizabeth first teaching her father’s friend to dance and over the months finding love as they come to truly know one another. This Darcy also has a good sense of humour, as does Richard and Elizabeth who all display it with teasing banter.
In this vagary, Mrs. Bennet and her daughters had followed the drum until she caught an illness and died shortly after General Bennet was wounded, so it’s a widowed Master of Longbourn who returned there. He is also a very responsible father, engaging a governess for the younger girls and a companion for the older. The general’s girls are not weaklings and are intelligent. While Jane is still demure, she has a backbone and will display it before the Bingley sisters. Lydia is still outspoken and immature at times, but she is also restrained and disciplined. Bennet has wisely invested to provide dowries for their future.
A young but smart and strong Bingley leases Netherfield. Wickham makes an appearance—here the author provides a nuanced but solid twist. Mr. Collins also appears and comes under “the command” of the general. Well played, Bennet.
To make things even more interesting, within this backdrop the author also provides an intriguing subplot—is someone trying to kill Bennet?
I loved and was thoroughly delighted with this well-written original story. Pleasing and refreshing portrayals, good dialogue along with a measure of good humour, and that touch of mystery and intrigue made this a very satisfying page turner for me. Melanie Rachel is one of my favourite JAFF authors whose books have never disappointed me. Highly recommend.
I received a free ARC of this book from the author and am voluntarily providing a review. I also purchased the published version for my Kindle library.
I keep hoping for an audio version of this unique P&P storyline.
In 1808, Major Fitzwilliam Darcy and Lieutenant Colonel Richard Fitzwilliam are in Vimeiro, Portugal. During a break from battle, Darcy is reading a letter from his Great Uncle Darcy with whom he corresponds regularly and who is also the current Master of Pemberley. Darcy’s parents are already deceased—his father having been a barrister. The two officers are under the command of Lieutenant General Bennet. When Bennet is accidentally shot by a private, his injury will force his return to England and to Longbourn.
Three years later, Darcy and Richard are still on the continent and battle weary when Lord Matlock writes to inform Darcy that his great-uncle Darcy has died. He has unexpectedly inherited his uncle’s fortune, including Pemberley. What a reversal of circumstance! Instead of going directly to Pemberley, however, Richard convinces him to go to General Bennet at Longbourn and learn how to run an estate first. A loyal friend and cousin, Darcy refuses to leave Spain without Richard. So begins a visit to Longbourn of several months where they will learn the makings of an estate and ultimately find love.
This unique premise provides the reader with quite a different look at the Darcy we’ve always known as a Cambridge-educated gentleman of the ton, already ensconced as Master of Pemberley. Here we have a Darcy who never even learned to dance—made all the more difficult with his towering height! Referring to Charlotte after she partook in a bit of deliberate mischief, we read this highly diverting exchange:
… “She stepped on my feet repeatedly. I thought perhaps I was setting my feet wrong, but I was not. I believe she did it on purpose!” …
“Come, Darcy,” Fitzwilliam said with a grin, “I do not believe for one moment that she injured you.” “Do be serious,” Darcy shot back. “I could barely feel her. But twice, the dance required that I move the foot she was standing on. I did not wish to launch the young lady across the room!”—quote from book
While this Darcy is still awkward in social settings and still stares at Elizabeth, he isn’t overly full of pride and, this Elizabeth, while still impertinent, isn’t annoyingly so. Darcy is very intelligent with an interest in engineering. Elizabeth is happy to know a man willing to discuss such things with her. I truly enjoyed their portrayals and how their relationship began and grew—Elizabeth first teaching her father’s friend to dance and over the months finding love as they come to truly know one another. This Darcy also has a good sense of humour, as does Richard and Elizabeth who all display it with teasing banter.
In this vagary, Mrs. Bennet and her daughters had followed the drum until she caught an illness and died shortly after General Bennet was wounded, so it’s a widowed Master of Longbourn who returned there. He is also a very responsible father, engaging a governess for the younger girls and a companion for the older. The general’s girls are not weaklings and are intelligent. While Jane is still demure, she has a backbone and will display it before the Bingley sisters. Lydia is still outspoken and immature at times, but she is also restrained and disciplined. Bennet has wisely invested to provide dowries for their future.
A young but smart and strong Bingley leases Netherfield. Wickham makes an appearance—here the author provides a nuanced but solid twist. Mr. Collins also appears and comes under “the command” of the general. Well played, Bennet.
To make things even more interesting, within this backdrop the author also provides an intriguing subplot—is someone trying to kill Bennet?
I loved and was thoroughly delighted with this well-written original story. Pleasing and refreshing portrayals, good dialogue along with a measure of good humour, and that touch of mystery and intrigue made this a very satisfying page turner for me. Melanie Rachel is one of my favourite JAFF authors whose books have never disappointed me. Highly recommend.
I received a free ARC of this book from the author and am voluntarily providing a review. I also purchased the published version for my Kindle library.
I keep hoping for an audio version of this unique P&P storyline.
May 6, 2022
5+ stars!
May 27, 2022
5+* Across the board!
An alternate universe P&P, in which Bennet is a General and Col. F and Darcy are officers in his army unit fighting overseas. Col F is the second son of the Earl, but Darcy is the son of a barrister, cousin/nephew to Darcy's of Pemberley.
Bennet inherits Longbourn, but before he and his daughters could settle there, he is injured and Mrs. Bennet passes. Bennet and 5 daughters are there several years, when Darcy learns he has inherited. Making a plan, D and Col F sell their commissions and arrive to learn estate running from Bennet for several months.
While there, romance and intrigue abound. Someone wants Bennet dead, or do they have another target?
The writing was so enjoyable to read. The author creates a solid new universe, believable and entertaining. Each character added much to make up the full picture of this story.
Very strong Bromance camaraderie interaction, which was fun.
My only caveat was the sharing of Pemberley, because my mind couldn't help thinking how sticky that could get with future son inheritors.
An alternate universe P&P, in which Bennet is a General and Col. F and Darcy are officers in his army unit fighting overseas. Col F is the second son of the Earl, but Darcy is the son of a barrister, cousin/nephew to Darcy's of Pemberley.
Bennet inherits Longbourn, but before he and his daughters could settle there, he is injured and Mrs. Bennet passes. Bennet and 5 daughters are there several years, when Darcy learns he has inherited. Making a plan, D and Col F sell their commissions and arrive to learn estate running from Bennet for several months.
While there, romance and intrigue abound. Someone wants Bennet dead, or do they have another target?
The writing was so enjoyable to read. The author creates a solid new universe, believable and entertaining. Each character added much to make up the full picture of this story.
Very strong Bromance camaraderie interaction, which was fun.
My only caveat was the sharing of Pemberley, because my mind couldn't help thinking how sticky that could get with future son inheritors.
May 9, 2022
what if Darcy was a soldier
What if Darcy was a army officer
What if his father was a solicitor and his uncle was Darcy of Pemberley
What if Mr. Bennet was General Bennet
The changes in the characters were not so big that they were now not like their Pride and Prejudice selves. This alternate world characters still have problems we can appreciate. The HEA still needs angst to become believable.
Darcy has never been a part of the ton and he doesn’t see a good reason to change who he is. What does that mean for everyone around him. It means a great story is well told for we readers.
What if Darcy was a army officer
What if his father was a solicitor and his uncle was Darcy of Pemberley
What if Mr. Bennet was General Bennet
The changes in the characters were not so big that they were now not like their Pride and Prejudice selves. This alternate world characters still have problems we can appreciate. The HEA still needs angst to become believable.
Darcy has never been a part of the ton and he doesn’t see a good reason to change who he is. What does that mean for everyone around him. It means a great story is well told for we readers.
June 16, 2022
"It felt as though something very significant had shifted, and it had thrown him entirely off balance." (quote from the book)
I am never disappointed in Ms. Rachel's novels. They are always unique and well written and this one is no different with an 'outside-the-box' premise...Mr. Darcy is a Major in his Majesty's Army, his cousin, Richard Fitzwilliam is a Lieutenant Colonel, and his General is Thomas Bennet! There is also a bit of mystery in this one that slowly builds throughout.
"I am not leaving Spain without you." (quote from the book)
When Major Darcy receives a letter from his Uncle Matlock saying he has inherited the Darcy holdings from his Great-Uncle, Darcy is shocked...it was totally unexpected. He resigns his commission and insists that his cousin does likewise. They have been as close as brothers all their lives. Knowing nothing of estate management, they request help from General Bennet who has retired. So begins their education and Mr. Darcy's dancing lessons.
"Elizabeth would be a suitable partner for you, Darcy...Her feet are as quick as her tongue, and she will not be cowed by you." (quote from the book)
For me, this was a gentle, lighter read with moments of intensity. The family dynamics of the Bennet family were different and believable because of it. I quite liked the change. Mr. Wickham's role had a very interesting twist and Mr. Bingley's character was a very pleasant surprise. But Mr. Collins comeuppance was well played. It would have to be, since Thomas Bennet was a retired General!
I highly recommend this latest novel from Ms. Rachel. I certainly look forward to her next book!
I am never disappointed in Ms. Rachel's novels. They are always unique and well written and this one is no different with an 'outside-the-box' premise...Mr. Darcy is a Major in his Majesty's Army, his cousin, Richard Fitzwilliam is a Lieutenant Colonel, and his General is Thomas Bennet! There is also a bit of mystery in this one that slowly builds throughout.
"I am not leaving Spain without you." (quote from the book)
When Major Darcy receives a letter from his Uncle Matlock saying he has inherited the Darcy holdings from his Great-Uncle, Darcy is shocked...it was totally unexpected. He resigns his commission and insists that his cousin does likewise. They have been as close as brothers all their lives. Knowing nothing of estate management, they request help from General Bennet who has retired. So begins their education and Mr. Darcy's dancing lessons.
"Elizabeth would be a suitable partner for you, Darcy...Her feet are as quick as her tongue, and she will not be cowed by you." (quote from the book)
For me, this was a gentle, lighter read with moments of intensity. The family dynamics of the Bennet family were different and believable because of it. I quite liked the change. Mr. Wickham's role had a very interesting twist and Mr. Bingley's character was a very pleasant surprise. But Mr. Collins comeuppance was well played. It would have to be, since Thomas Bennet was a retired General!
I highly recommend this latest novel from Ms. Rachel. I certainly look forward to her next book!
May 11, 2022
I liked the characters' background stories, the military environment and how it changed their character and actions. I liked Darcy's size and the way he was portrayed.
I didn't like this Elizabeth, there is such a thing as being too perfect.
Overall I didn't feel any connection with ODC, I needed more inner conflict, more flaws, Elizabeth's only flaws were being too witty, inteligent and courageous for a woman of her time.
I can't say I enjoyed it very much.
I didn't like this Elizabeth, there is such a thing as being too perfect.
Overall I didn't feel any connection with ODC, I needed more inner conflict, more flaws, Elizabeth's only flaws were being too witty, inteligent and courageous for a woman of her time.
I can't say I enjoyed it very much.
May 17, 2022
Three or three point five stars? Three point five means four, and I feel that's a lot for this book, which was slow and didn't know if it was a boring romance or a boring thriller. On Goodreads, three means I liked it--weeeell it was meh. So I really should have left it at three. But as another author, I hate to give less than four stars because I know how it feels. No one likes three. Thus, my three point five star review.
I write a technical review, which means there won't be too much that's subjective in my comments. Mostly, I'll try to comment on those items which niggle at the reader and cause stars to drop.
There was more than one plot. The story arc was complete and a new plot was started, with a sort of dragged out ending for the initial plot carrying over in parallel, although I will admit seeds were planted early. But the tie-ins were weak around the main story arc. New characters were brought in late in the book specifically for this second story--too late. Essentially, the author saw a squirrel and ran after it. She should have left well enough alone and done a better job of making the main story interesting. Okay, it was a good idea, but it ended up like spaghetti with no sauce.
Flow was linear, so the book should have been easy to follow. However, pace was slow. The romance in the main story dragged, and the second story, which was a quasi-thriller, dragged as well. It was as if there were pages and pages of inactivity going on before we grabbed onto something we could see as a key point that meant movement in the plot. I believe that a lot of that inactivity came from redundant narrative.
Language was simple enough that any JAFF reader would find it comfortable to read, that is, it had a good Regency feel but no big words to look up. The author used "one another" for "each other." Americanisms were “I will” instead of “I shall” and “write” for “write to.” Non-Regency words or phrases included “wax poetic,” “wax eloquently,” head/headed, staff, sharing, snort/snorted, chuckle, and traffic. This is a normal number of non-Regency words for a book of this length in JAFF, and these are common enough mistakes in JAFF. The word "pinked" was repeatedly used to mean "to turn pink" where it means "cut with a scalloped or zig-zag edge." "Stable" should be "stables" in its use here.
Formatting was well done, with nice graphics used for scene breaks.
Scene setting was on-again-off-again, with some good descriptions of some items, such as carriages and and the repair shop, yet some action scenes were hard to follow. It was not 100% clear as to what was going on in the carriage accident and some of the recovery of the carriage, among others. This led to multiple re-reads to try to figure it out. The last thing an author wants is to slow the reader down by asking them to re-read a scene.
Some technical issues were well handled, such as the carriage description and how it came apart for the accident. I just took a course on carriages, and the author used good research and details where she could have verbally flitted past the material.
The author can be commended for taking on a story with twisted mystery elements within. This should have resulted in a lot of angst. With the exception of the carriage accident, the first story was quite low in dramatic tension, which would be part of the reason it had such a slow pace. Since the carriage accident was early in the story, that was a lot of story that had minimal drama. Even the scenes that were intended to raise our eyebrows didn't help, as they were drawn out and leisurely for conflict scenes. It was as if the author was telling a story with a dull voice and long explanations. Even the thriller/mystery story that hijacks the novel near the end was slow as it vied for superiority with the romance thus had breaks in its action scenes.
Two period correctness issues were noted: the steward was advising on game; that would be the gameskeeper's job. Darcy had stables, therefore he wouldn't have had a back garden to look over. It was one or the other in the Regency town house.
The development of the romance itself had low credibility as it didn't feel loving or passionate. There should have been some drama in the feelings of the protagonists as well, but it was lacking. In fact, the romance can often help to up the angst. A chance was lost here.
Characterization was consistent with fanon and worked well for this story. Some key characters who are not as visible in canon, Mr. Bennet and Colonel Fitzwilliam, were well drawn out and well utilized in this book. Some readers will whine about no Wickham and Lydia drama. Well, let them whine. That one's overdone IMHO.
The cover makes me want to have a paperback copy, it's so hot. I mean lovely. Well, it's mostly because of the hot, um, lovely man that's on it. I usually make fun of covers with blow-dried men on them, but this guy has good hair and has it going on! Almost too much to be Darcy. In addition, the fonts and balance of the cover scream professional. I believe that readers will grab this one over other JAFF books lined up beside it in a heartbeat. Great job, cover designer. But where's the passion of this guy inside?
Overall, the book could have benefited from clearer descriptions in action scenes, less long and repetitive narrative sections between scenes where action took place, and more clear heightened conflict to erase some of the dead boring sections in what should have been excitement, and more passion in the romance. It's a good idea with too many words in the wrong places. I really wanted to like it more, as I like this author, but sometimes one has to learn from experience.
Disclaimer: I'm a JAFF author, and some might suggest that this review is a conflict of interest. However, I was a reader first, and my reviews are honest and impartial. I write them for the reader and the author.
I write a technical review, which means there won't be too much that's subjective in my comments. Mostly, I'll try to comment on those items which niggle at the reader and cause stars to drop.
There was more than one plot. The story arc was complete and a new plot was started, with a sort of dragged out ending for the initial plot carrying over in parallel, although I will admit seeds were planted early. But the tie-ins were weak around the main story arc. New characters were brought in late in the book specifically for this second story--too late. Essentially, the author saw a squirrel and ran after it. She should have left well enough alone and done a better job of making the main story interesting. Okay, it was a good idea, but it ended up like spaghetti with no sauce.
Flow was linear, so the book should have been easy to follow. However, pace was slow. The romance in the main story dragged, and the second story, which was a quasi-thriller, dragged as well. It was as if there were pages and pages of inactivity going on before we grabbed onto something we could see as a key point that meant movement in the plot. I believe that a lot of that inactivity came from redundant narrative.
Language was simple enough that any JAFF reader would find it comfortable to read, that is, it had a good Regency feel but no big words to look up. The author used "one another" for "each other." Americanisms were “I will” instead of “I shall” and “write” for “write to.” Non-Regency words or phrases included “wax poetic,” “wax eloquently,” head/headed, staff, sharing, snort/snorted, chuckle, and traffic. This is a normal number of non-Regency words for a book of this length in JAFF, and these are common enough mistakes in JAFF. The word "pinked" was repeatedly used to mean "to turn pink" where it means "cut with a scalloped or zig-zag edge." "Stable" should be "stables" in its use here.
Formatting was well done, with nice graphics used for scene breaks.
Scene setting was on-again-off-again, with some good descriptions of some items, such as carriages and and the repair shop, yet some action scenes were hard to follow. It was not 100% clear as to what was going on in the carriage accident and some of the recovery of the carriage, among others. This led to multiple re-reads to try to figure it out. The last thing an author wants is to slow the reader down by asking them to re-read a scene.
Some technical issues were well handled, such as the carriage description and how it came apart for the accident. I just took a course on carriages, and the author used good research and details where she could have verbally flitted past the material.
The author can be commended for taking on a story with twisted mystery elements within. This should have resulted in a lot of angst. With the exception of the carriage accident, the first story was quite low in dramatic tension, which would be part of the reason it had such a slow pace. Since the carriage accident was early in the story, that was a lot of story that had minimal drama. Even the scenes that were intended to raise our eyebrows didn't help, as they were drawn out and leisurely for conflict scenes. It was as if the author was telling a story with a dull voice and long explanations. Even the thriller/mystery story that hijacks the novel near the end was slow as it vied for superiority with the romance thus had breaks in its action scenes.
Two period correctness issues were noted: the steward was advising on game; that would be the gameskeeper's job. Darcy had stables, therefore he wouldn't have had a back garden to look over. It was one or the other in the Regency town house.
The development of the romance itself had low credibility as it didn't feel loving or passionate. There should have been some drama in the feelings of the protagonists as well, but it was lacking. In fact, the romance can often help to up the angst. A chance was lost here.
Characterization was consistent with fanon and worked well for this story. Some key characters who are not as visible in canon, Mr. Bennet and Colonel Fitzwilliam, were well drawn out and well utilized in this book. Some readers will whine about no Wickham and Lydia drama. Well, let them whine. That one's overdone IMHO.
The cover makes me want to have a paperback copy, it's so hot. I mean lovely. Well, it's mostly because of the hot, um, lovely man that's on it. I usually make fun of covers with blow-dried men on them, but this guy has good hair and has it going on! Almost too much to be Darcy. In addition, the fonts and balance of the cover scream professional. I believe that readers will grab this one over other JAFF books lined up beside it in a heartbeat. Great job, cover designer. But where's the passion of this guy inside?
Overall, the book could have benefited from clearer descriptions in action scenes, less long and repetitive narrative sections between scenes where action took place, and more clear heightened conflict to erase some of the dead boring sections in what should have been excitement, and more passion in the romance. It's a good idea with too many words in the wrong places. I really wanted to like it more, as I like this author, but sometimes one has to learn from experience.
Disclaimer: I'm a JAFF author, and some might suggest that this review is a conflict of interest. However, I was a reader first, and my reviews are honest and impartial. I write them for the reader and the author.
May 7, 2022
Unexpected Journey
Well written, entirely original story and quite wonderful. The whole gang and a few originals carry us through a year of change with a recognizable but improved Bennet family; a bit of a mystery and a subtle but engaging romance, in fact a few of them. Didn't put it down.
Well written, entirely original story and quite wonderful. The whole gang and a few originals carry us through a year of change with a recognizable but improved Bennet family; a bit of a mystery and a subtle but engaging romance, in fact a few of them. Didn't put it down.
January 11, 2023
Loved it!
May 5, 2022
Interesting premise and an enjoyable story
This was an interesting premise and an absolutely delightful and enjoyable variation inspired by Jane Austen’s classic novel Pride and Prejudice by the ever so talented Melanie Rachel. Her books are always so good that honestly I don’t even check the blurb before buying it because I know it’s going to be a great read. I loved the quirks of these incarnations of our favorite characters and watching their story play out was an interesting ride.
This was an interesting premise and an absolutely delightful and enjoyable variation inspired by Jane Austen’s classic novel Pride and Prejudice by the ever so talented Melanie Rachel. Her books are always so good that honestly I don’t even check the blurb before buying it because I know it’s going to be a great read. I loved the quirks of these incarnations of our favorite characters and watching their story play out was an interesting ride.
May 9, 2022
A different Darcy and a wonderful tale!
This gave us a very different Darcy fresh from soldiering and with a previous relationship with Bennet. I loved the way these characters were so altered from other variations. I loved the camaraderie with Fitzwilliam, General Bennet and Mr Bingley too, made a great team of gentlemen! This was a story with beautiful friendships, exiting suspense and a very lovely developing romance between Elizabeth and Darcy. One of my favourite reads of the year!
This gave us a very different Darcy fresh from soldiering and with a previous relationship with Bennet. I loved the way these characters were so altered from other variations. I loved the camaraderie with Fitzwilliam, General Bennet and Mr Bingley too, made a great team of gentlemen! This was a story with beautiful friendships, exiting suspense and a very lovely developing romance between Elizabeth and Darcy. One of my favourite reads of the year!
November 28, 2022
Wonderful plot!
A really worthwhile and entertaining story where the circumstances change but the characters do not. Well, except Charlotte Lucas and Mr. Bennet (the General). Definitively a must read!
A really worthwhile and entertaining story where the circumstances change but the characters do not. Well, except Charlotte Lucas and Mr. Bennet (the General). Definitively a must read!
June 7, 2022
I like Melanie Rachel as a writer but this book had so many changes to the characters (background, family, motivations, hobbies, even physical description) that it just seemed like an original work with some reused names. If I went into this with the mindset of original characters instead of Jane Austen fanfic, I would have been much happier but I didn't so I wasn't. Maybe I'll revisit it when I feel less stubborn about needing some JAFF fluff.
January 8, 2023
Nature versus Nurture
Very interesting story. There is adventure, romance and mystery. Our favorite characters are mostly all here but their personalities are somewhat different. Their essential goodness, reticence, exuberance etc are all as in cannon but the circumstances of their lives have changed them. Darcy is not raised as the heir and went to war and mingled with people from all classes, so the haughtiness is not there. Mrs Bennet follows the drum with General Bennet and importance to her husband and his men brings out her better qualities. She never expected to be the mistress of an estate and didn’t worry as much about the entail. Since Darcy and Georgiana were not raised at Pemberly they didn’t know Whickham. Really it raises the question of how much influence nature and nurture have on who we become.
Really enjoyable story, highly recommended.
Very interesting story. There is adventure, romance and mystery. Our favorite characters are mostly all here but their personalities are somewhat different. Their essential goodness, reticence, exuberance etc are all as in cannon but the circumstances of their lives have changed them. Darcy is not raised as the heir and went to war and mingled with people from all classes, so the haughtiness is not there. Mrs Bennet follows the drum with General Bennet and importance to her husband and his men brings out her better qualities. She never expected to be the mistress of an estate and didn’t worry as much about the entail. Since Darcy and Georgiana were not raised at Pemberly they didn’t know Whickham. Really it raises the question of how much influence nature and nurture have on who we become.
Really enjoyable story, highly recommended.
December 25, 2022
I've loved every one of the stories I've read by this author. This story is no exception. It had so many of my favourite elements like a strong and involved Bennet, better behaving Bennet girls, friendship between Bennet, Darcy and Fitzwilliam, Bingley with backbone, Jane with a bite when provoked, brainy Elizabeth, chemistry between Darcy and Elizabeth and a minor mystery to top it all. What more can you ask for?
May 8, 2022
Just lovely. Really interesting twist to ODC story.
Loved it.
Loved it.
September 24, 2022
I really really really loved this one!!! The idea that Darcy wasn't brought up to be master of Pemberley and instead was a soldier with Fitzwilliam and Mr. Bennet adds a different and delightful layer of complexity to his character, and the uncertainty he feels in his new role is SO endearing and makes his reactions and love for Elizabeth even cuter. This did feel more action-y than romance-y, especially toward the end, but we love a happy ending (AND A DETERMINED BINGLEY!!!!)
May 22, 2022
Recommended
Very off-canon but delightfully so. The dialogue is witty and humorous. Loved the dynamic of Darcy and Fitzwilliam being soldiers in arms under the command of the Master of Longbourn (General Bennet). Very enjoyable to have Col. Fitzwilliam with Darcy and the Bennets throughout the entire story.
Would have been five stars except Elizabeth is kind of a Mary Sue and the romance with Darcy is only lukewarm. The main plot of the backstory of Darcy’s inheritance is a bit thin also. Yet, the easy and clever repartee between the four principles is worth the read.
Very off-canon but delightfully so. The dialogue is witty and humorous. Loved the dynamic of Darcy and Fitzwilliam being soldiers in arms under the command of the Master of Longbourn (General Bennet). Very enjoyable to have Col. Fitzwilliam with Darcy and the Bennets throughout the entire story.
Would have been five stars except Elizabeth is kind of a Mary Sue and the romance with Darcy is only lukewarm. The main plot of the backstory of Darcy’s inheritance is a bit thin also. Yet, the easy and clever repartee between the four principles is worth the read.
December 4, 2022
matrimony and mayhem
Rachel offers an original variation. Mostly populated with characters from the canon, yet these characters have significantly different backstories. The dialogue is well written, the mystery is puzzling, and the romances sweet.
Rachel offers an original variation. Mostly populated with characters from the canon, yet these characters have significantly different backstories. The dialogue is well written, the mystery is puzzling, and the romances sweet.
August 20, 2025
Content:
Profanity: Mild. Three uses of D***
Violence: Mild. War is talked about, including deaths of friends/comrades, and near misses with death. Near trampling, grazed by bullets, broken/bruised ribs etc. There is mostly peril and threat of death in this, but all deaths talked about happen off-screen. One death from sickness, another is a purported to be a murder, but also off-screen. One body is seen on-screen, but not described other than that he's dead without a heartbeat. A carriage accident happens that results in broken bones and bruises.
Sexual: Mild. Hand-holding, assisting from almost falling (holding close), chaste kisses, all G-rated touches.
Really a touch over 4 stars, but not a 5 star.
I haven't enjoyed a Pride and Prejudice variation this much in ages. Most of them wander into over-dramatized realms by vilifying either Caroline Bingley (making her ridiculous/cruel) or Wickham into a truly heinous sociopath. I was glad to see that this one kept a line that worked. It had drama without being overly dramatic, and mystery without being ridiculous. Everything was steady and interestingly told, rather than wild and bordering on unbelievable.
The most fun for me in this was seeing a Mr. Bennet who was a loyal, dedicated, and protective man and father. He's so passive usually, even neglectful. It was so refreshing to see him as a man who was safe and trustworthy, as well as a role model for the men around him. Making him a General in the army, and the Bennet women grow up following their father around was such a fun twist. The way the author made that inform the characters of them all was both believable and relieving. Mrs. Bennet is still rather crude and overbearing, but also a force to be reckoned with, as she's got a whole camp full of soldier-sons to take care of; it gives her purpose. The girls are more grounded and capable as a result as well.
Darcy being the son of a barrister rather than the heir of Pemberley changed him in interesting ways too. He's much more humble, and much more blunt. Which is funny and endearing. I enjoyed seeing him and Bennet and Fitzwilliam interact together as former soldiers who knew and fought together.
The story itself is paced well (which being a longer book I was a tad worried it would drag) with both the romances and the incredibly interesting side story/mystery happening around the Bennet family. All I'll say is, clever author tricked me and I relished in it. Yay!
That mystery aspect is what hooked me, it was well delivered and plotted. I'm excited to grab more of Melanie Rachel's books now, this was the first one I'd read. I cannot say enough how much I appreciated her not going into the dramatics or stereotyping characters to provide tension devices. Caroline and Mrs. Hurst were snotty and arrogant, but not insidious. Thank heaven there was nothing at all about compromises. I'm heartily tired of that plot device.
A breath of fresh air, that's what this variation was for me. I enjoy reading JAFF when my brain is fuzzy, or I just need to be entertained. This one delivered more than that, and hit all the right spots so I didn't ever roll my eyes or sigh heavily at the antics going into the realms of stupidity. Lovely moments of character building, banter, and romance that isn't steamy or too fast to be believable, I'd happily recommend this to anyone, not just people who read JAFF.
Profanity: Mild. Three uses of D***
Violence: Mild. War is talked about, including deaths of friends/comrades, and near misses with death. Near trampling, grazed by bullets, broken/bruised ribs etc. There is mostly peril and threat of death in this, but all deaths talked about happen off-screen. One death from sickness, another is a purported to be a murder, but also off-screen. One body is seen on-screen, but not described other than that he's dead without a heartbeat. A carriage accident happens that results in broken bones and bruises.
Sexual: Mild. Hand-holding, assisting from almost falling (holding close), chaste kisses, all G-rated touches.
Really a touch over 4 stars, but not a 5 star.
I haven't enjoyed a Pride and Prejudice variation this much in ages. Most of them wander into over-dramatized realms by vilifying either Caroline Bingley (making her ridiculous/cruel) or Wickham into a truly heinous sociopath. I was glad to see that this one kept a line that worked. It had drama without being overly dramatic, and mystery without being ridiculous. Everything was steady and interestingly told, rather than wild and bordering on unbelievable.
The most fun for me in this was seeing a Mr. Bennet who was a loyal, dedicated, and protective man and father. He's so passive usually, even neglectful. It was so refreshing to see him as a man who was safe and trustworthy, as well as a role model for the men around him. Making him a General in the army, and the Bennet women grow up following their father around was such a fun twist. The way the author made that inform the characters of them all was both believable and relieving. Mrs. Bennet is still rather crude and overbearing, but also a force to be reckoned with, as she's got a whole camp full of soldier-sons to take care of; it gives her purpose. The girls are more grounded and capable as a result as well.
Darcy being the son of a barrister rather than the heir of Pemberley changed him in interesting ways too. He's much more humble, and much more blunt. Which is funny and endearing. I enjoyed seeing him and Bennet and Fitzwilliam interact together as former soldiers who knew and fought together.
The story itself is paced well (which being a longer book I was a tad worried it would drag) with both the romances and the incredibly interesting side story/mystery happening around the Bennet family. All I'll say is, clever author tricked me and I relished in it. Yay!
That mystery aspect is what hooked me, it was well delivered and plotted. I'm excited to grab more of Melanie Rachel's books now, this was the first one I'd read. I cannot say enough how much I appreciated her not going into the dramatics or stereotyping characters to provide tension devices. Caroline and Mrs. Hurst were snotty and arrogant, but not insidious. Thank heaven there was nothing at all about compromises. I'm heartily tired of that plot device.
A breath of fresh air, that's what this variation was for me. I enjoy reading JAFF when my brain is fuzzy, or I just need to be entertained. This one delivered more than that, and hit all the right spots so I didn't ever roll my eyes or sigh heavily at the antics going into the realms of stupidity. Lovely moments of character building, banter, and romance that isn't steamy or too fast to be believable, I'd happily recommend this to anyone, not just people who read JAFF.
May 19, 2022
3.5 rounded up. This book was well written and pleasant. The story is original and gives both the Darcys and the Bennets different backgrounds and circumstances.
Melanie Rachel is a great writer and I’m never disappointed with the quality of her books, but if I’m honest, this was not one of my favorites from this author. I liked the different circumstances with Darcy coming from more humble beginnings, but because of those humble beginnings, Darcy didn't have the pride and hauteur that drives the conflict and necessitates the significant changes he went through in the original. The same is true of the Bennet family. The different upbringing of the girls, no vulgar and embarrassing Mrs. Bennet and a much more involved and disciplined Mr. Bennet has the same effect on the opposite side of the equation, removing most of the defects of the Bennet family. Once you remove those relevant pieces of the plot, something else needs to fill that void that creates interest and drives the story. While there was a mystery unfolding, it was very slow moving and left too much of the book to the day to day, somewhat mundane, activities and interactions IMO. Those interactions included the development of D&E’s romance, which was lovely and sweet, but again, with the pride and prejudice factors removed from these characters due to the changed circumstances, we had two very different people falling in love, two people who seemed almost flawless which can get a little boring in large doses. I did enjoy a lot the dialogue, and there were some sweet scenes, I just longed for something more compelling. The book did get better as the mystery picked up later in the book, but when things finally played out, it felt a little anticlimactic.
Overall, I liked this book, but didn’t love it like I thought I would. There was many things to like and I will continue to read this author as she is a very talented writer that brings great stories to life.
Melanie Rachel is a great writer and I’m never disappointed with the quality of her books, but if I’m honest, this was not one of my favorites from this author. I liked the different circumstances with Darcy coming from more humble beginnings, but because of those humble beginnings, Darcy didn't have the pride and hauteur that drives the conflict and necessitates the significant changes he went through in the original. The same is true of the Bennet family. The different upbringing of the girls, no vulgar and embarrassing Mrs. Bennet and a much more involved and disciplined Mr. Bennet has the same effect on the opposite side of the equation, removing most of the defects of the Bennet family. Once you remove those relevant pieces of the plot, something else needs to fill that void that creates interest and drives the story. While there was a mystery unfolding, it was very slow moving and left too much of the book to the day to day, somewhat mundane, activities and interactions IMO. Those interactions included the development of D&E’s romance, which was lovely and sweet, but again, with the pride and prejudice factors removed from these characters due to the changed circumstances, we had two very different people falling in love, two people who seemed almost flawless which can get a little boring in large doses. I did enjoy a lot the dialogue, and there were some sweet scenes, I just longed for something more compelling. The book did get better as the mystery picked up later in the book, but when things finally played out, it felt a little anticlimactic.
Overall, I liked this book, but didn’t love it like I thought I would. There was many things to like and I will continue to read this author as she is a very talented writer that brings great stories to life.
September 12, 2024
I loved it!
It was so enticing that I couldn’t put it down, this book grabbed my interest from the very first page. I couldn’t put it down, I had to know what happened next. The story is well written with a very good storyline. You will see the most beloved characters in a whole new way. This is a Jane Austen's Pride and Prejudice variation. This is book two of seven in the Darcy and Elizabeth’s Happily Ever Afters series. Not much in Fitzwilliam Darcy’s life has been unexpected, until now. As an officer in His Majesty’s service, Darcy’s life is completely mapped out before a letter from home sets him on a new path. He has inherited his family’s fortune, but as the former master’s great-nephew, he is not certain why. With his cousin Richard Fitzwilliam in tow, Darcy visits his former commanding officer to learn what it takes to run an estate. He is quickly captivated by one of Bennet’s many daughters, but he fights the attraction for his new duties require his full attention. Elizabeth Bennet has grown up as a general’s daughter, not a pampered country miss. Though her family has lived as gentry for several years, a part of her still longs for the freedoms her former life afforded. Despite his insulting speech and gruff manners, Elizabeth suspects that the clever, handsome Mr. Darcy is as anxious to find his place in the world as she is. Yet, she must be reasonable, with his wealth and family connections to the peerage, Mr. Darcy would never consider her. When trouble comes to Longbourn, can Darcy and Elizabeth conquer their reservations and fight this battle, together? So with all that and more this story pulls you in and holds you tight. I highly recommend to everyone.
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It was so enticing that I couldn’t put it down, this book grabbed my interest from the very first page. I couldn’t put it down, I had to know what happened next. The story is well written with a very good storyline. You will see the most beloved characters in a whole new way. This is a Jane Austen's Pride and Prejudice variation. This is book two of seven in the Darcy and Elizabeth’s Happily Ever Afters series. Not much in Fitzwilliam Darcy’s life has been unexpected, until now. As an officer in His Majesty’s service, Darcy’s life is completely mapped out before a letter from home sets him on a new path. He has inherited his family’s fortune, but as the former master’s great-nephew, he is not certain why. With his cousin Richard Fitzwilliam in tow, Darcy visits his former commanding officer to learn what it takes to run an estate. He is quickly captivated by one of Bennet’s many daughters, but he fights the attraction for his new duties require his full attention. Elizabeth Bennet has grown up as a general’s daughter, not a pampered country miss. Though her family has lived as gentry for several years, a part of her still longs for the freedoms her former life afforded. Despite his insulting speech and gruff manners, Elizabeth suspects that the clever, handsome Mr. Darcy is as anxious to find his place in the world as she is. Yet, she must be reasonable, with his wealth and family connections to the peerage, Mr. Darcy would never consider her. When trouble comes to Longbourn, can Darcy and Elizabeth conquer their reservations and fight this battle, together? So with all that and more this story pulls you in and holds you tight. I highly recommend to everyone.
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May 12, 2022
Wonderful
This is one of those variations wherein the names and locations are borrowed from the original P&P, but pretty much everything else is new. Mr Bennett is General Bennett, Mrs Bennett has died, leaving him with five daughters to raise with the help of a governess and a companion. Darcy and Fitzwilliam are officers in General Bennett's troops. The Bennett family "follow the drum" until General Bennett is wounded and inherits Longbourn. Darcy leaves the army when his great uncle Darcy dies, and unexpectedly leaves him Pemberly and all of his fortune and properties. Darcy insists that Fitzwilliam leave the army with him, and share in his inheritance. Darcy and Fitzwilliam visit General Bennett at Longbourn in order to learn estate management.
This is a very pleasant storyline because it's missing many of the main sources of acrimony from the original P&P. Since Mrs Bennett is gone, the daughters are all under good regulation. Darcy is much more humble, and knows almost immediately that he wants Elizabeth. Since Darcy is an ex-soldier, Caroline Bingley has no interest in him, and for the same reason Lady Catherine has no interest in him. Wickham doesn't know Darcy directly, and only tries unsuccessfully to extort money from him as a godson of Darcy's great uncle. However, the author creates many new and exciting situations that make the story compelling. There's mystery afoot, with lots of nice suspense.
As always with this author, the book is very well written and well edited. The romance is lovely. The characters, although much different than Jane Austen's creations, are wonderful. I recommend this book highly.
This is one of those variations wherein the names and locations are borrowed from the original P&P, but pretty much everything else is new. Mr Bennett is General Bennett, Mrs Bennett has died, leaving him with five daughters to raise with the help of a governess and a companion. Darcy and Fitzwilliam are officers in General Bennett's troops. The Bennett family "follow the drum" until General Bennett is wounded and inherits Longbourn. Darcy leaves the army when his great uncle Darcy dies, and unexpectedly leaves him Pemberly and all of his fortune and properties. Darcy insists that Fitzwilliam leave the army with him, and share in his inheritance. Darcy and Fitzwilliam visit General Bennett at Longbourn in order to learn estate management.
This is a very pleasant storyline because it's missing many of the main sources of acrimony from the original P&P. Since Mrs Bennett is gone, the daughters are all under good regulation. Darcy is much more humble, and knows almost immediately that he wants Elizabeth. Since Darcy is an ex-soldier, Caroline Bingley has no interest in him, and for the same reason Lady Catherine has no interest in him. Wickham doesn't know Darcy directly, and only tries unsuccessfully to extort money from him as a godson of Darcy's great uncle. However, the author creates many new and exciting situations that make the story compelling. There's mystery afoot, with lots of nice suspense.
As always with this author, the book is very well written and well edited. The romance is lovely. The characters, although much different than Jane Austen's creations, are wonderful. I recommend this book highly.
February 26, 2023
A Wonderful Treat 4.5⭐
I put off reading this story for so long. I thought it would be full of Elizabeth despising and misunderstanding Darcy for the first 85% of the book. I couldn't be more wrong. There was not one eye roll, nor was I disappointed.
What I loved:
- Darcy's character. Yes, he's proper, and no nonsense, but he has a dry humor as well.
- Elizabeth's character because she isn't hard on Darcy. She also comes across how I would imagine Elizabeth Bennet would be as a general's daughter.
- Darcy and Fitzwilliam bond felt real, not just words. Maybe it had something to do with being in battle together.
- Darcy and Elizabeth's growing relationship.
What I liked:
- Mr. Bennet.
- Mr. Bingley. He had a small role, but he made the best of it.
- Really I liked with the author did with all the characters.
- Very little Collins, Wickham, and Caroline. Lady Catherine is mentioned.
Charlotte has her HEA, but I have to admit, I was rooting for Mr. Bennet. I usually do when Mr. Bennet is a widower. Maybe because, after all these years and variations, I can never picture Charlotte as anything but practical and a minor side character, like Mrs. Hurst or Lady Lucas in my mind, so a her marrying Fitzwilliam is always hard for me to believe. I guess I had one eye roll after all 😄.
I put off reading this story for so long. I thought it would be full of Elizabeth despising and misunderstanding Darcy for the first 85% of the book. I couldn't be more wrong. There was not one eye roll, nor was I disappointed.
What I loved:
- Darcy's character. Yes, he's proper, and no nonsense, but he has a dry humor as well.
- Elizabeth's character because she isn't hard on Darcy. She also comes across how I would imagine Elizabeth Bennet would be as a general's daughter.
- Darcy and Fitzwilliam bond felt real, not just words. Maybe it had something to do with being in battle together.
- Darcy and Elizabeth's growing relationship.
What I liked:
- Mr. Bennet.
- Mr. Bingley. He had a small role, but he made the best of it.
- Really I liked with the author did with all the characters.
- Very little Collins, Wickham, and Caroline. Lady Catherine is mentioned.
Charlotte has her HEA, but I have to admit, I was rooting for Mr. Bennet. I usually do when Mr. Bennet is a widower. Maybe because, after all these years and variations, I can never picture Charlotte as anything but practical and a minor side character, like Mrs. Hurst or Lady Lucas in my mind, so a her marrying Fitzwilliam is always hard for me to believe. I guess I had one eye roll after all 😄.
June 16, 2022
Fun to read. I liked this version of Darcy--strategic, direct, but not so prideful--and his interactions with Elizabeth. Being a general's daughter channel's her spunk and determination. I also like that this Mr. Bennet is sensible about saving and providing for his daughters and this Mr. Bingley uses the façade of naivete to cover some shrewd thinking. The younger Bennet girls are more sensible. And Charlotte gets a happy ending! I really like what Rachel did with the characters.
But the plot lacked tension for a lot of the story. Darcy and Elizabeth fell in love gradually and easily, but nothing ever stood in the way of them getting together. No misunderstandings, no station, no other people getting in the way. Nor were there external threats until about 2/3 of the way through the book. Sure, the murder plot was supposed to be going since the very beginning, but that was only seen in retrospect.
I so enjoyed A Gentleman's Honor, and I think that book handled tension better. But still, Unexpected Inheritance was still fun to read and I stayed up too late more than once to keep reading it.
But the plot lacked tension for a lot of the story. Darcy and Elizabeth fell in love gradually and easily, but nothing ever stood in the way of them getting together. No misunderstandings, no station, no other people getting in the way. Nor were there external threats until about 2/3 of the way through the book. Sure, the murder plot was supposed to be going since the very beginning, but that was only seen in retrospect.
I so enjoyed A Gentleman's Honor, and I think that book handled tension better. But still, Unexpected Inheritance was still fun to read and I stayed up too late more than once to keep reading it.
September 2, 2023
3.5/5
I enjoyed this version which tackles the question--what if Mr Bennet, and Mr Darcy were both officers in the army?
I have to say that, at first, I struggled with this story quite a lot, as it seemed completely different to Pride and Prejudice (aside from the names of the characters and their relatives), but that settled down once the characters got to Longbourn. There was a version of the Meryton Assembly, and the Netherfield ball. Mr Collins still came on his unexpected visit, sent by Lady Catherine to find a wife. Mr Wickham was still a cad trying to sell stories of how he was mistreated by the Darcys of Pemberley. Colonel Fitzwilliam and Darcy were still close friends.
I thought this was an interesting variation, although I think perhaps it could have been shorter, and included more stakes. The murder plot picked up the pace towards the end of the novel, but. in the romantic relationships there weren't a huge amount of impediments.
This was an enjoyable story, and if you are looking for a book that isn't high in emotional angst, you might enjoy it too.
I enjoyed this version which tackles the question--what if Mr Bennet, and Mr Darcy were both officers in the army?
I have to say that, at first, I struggled with this story quite a lot, as it seemed completely different to Pride and Prejudice (aside from the names of the characters and their relatives), but that settled down once the characters got to Longbourn. There was a version of the Meryton Assembly, and the Netherfield ball. Mr Collins still came on his unexpected visit, sent by Lady Catherine to find a wife. Mr Wickham was still a cad trying to sell stories of how he was mistreated by the Darcys of Pemberley. Colonel Fitzwilliam and Darcy were still close friends.
I thought this was an interesting variation, although I think perhaps it could have been shorter, and included more stakes. The murder plot picked up the pace towards the end of the novel, but. in the romantic relationships there weren't a huge amount of impediments.
This was an enjoyable story, and if you are looking for a book that isn't high in emotional angst, you might enjoy it too.
May 6, 2022
Definitely an alternate universe with plenty of entertainment! We find Darcy and his cousin Fitzwilliam as brothers of the heart serving in the Army and surprisingly coming into riches. A very decisive Mr. Bennet is their General in this alternate P&P world. With Mr. Bennet as an involved parent, there are lots of witty and humorous exchanges, with hilarious discussions of propriety, regency etiquette, and table manners. Fun tidbits of knowledge on everything from bridges to still rooms to carriage building. Without giving away any spoilers, you can look for wonderful set-downs of Wickham, daring rescues, adventure, danger, romance and mystery. This is a strong Lizzy and a Darcy who is less arrogant than usual, but still hesitant. Thoroughly entertaining story.
I received an ARC copy of this book with no obligation but an honest opinion.
I received an ARC copy of this book with no obligation but an honest opinion.
August 6, 2022
Avid Reader
Excellent book! I didn't expect it to be a mystery though! I enjoyed the interaction between Darcy and Elizabeth. Mrs. Bennet had been a beloved matriarch who had passed away by the time Lydia was 12. Darcy received an inheritance that he shared with Richard. Darcy was the son of a barrister. His mother was a Fitzwilliam, the seventh daughter of an earl, but Darcy simply wasn't comfortable around the aristocracy. Elizabeth taught him to dance. Wickham and Collins made their appearances and caused trouble but in a different way, since Darcy, Richard, and Wickham weren't boyhood friends. Jane and Bingley met and fell in love, but each had a backbone that Caroline and Louisa didn't expect. By the time Caroline decided to show her interest in Darcy, it was too late!
Excellent book! I didn't expect it to be a mystery though! I enjoyed the interaction between Darcy and Elizabeth. Mrs. Bennet had been a beloved matriarch who had passed away by the time Lydia was 12. Darcy received an inheritance that he shared with Richard. Darcy was the son of a barrister. His mother was a Fitzwilliam, the seventh daughter of an earl, but Darcy simply wasn't comfortable around the aristocracy. Elizabeth taught him to dance. Wickham and Collins made their appearances and caused trouble but in a different way, since Darcy, Richard, and Wickham weren't boyhood friends. Jane and Bingley met and fell in love, but each had a backbone that Caroline and Louisa didn't expect. By the time Caroline decided to show her interest in Darcy, it was too late!
February 18, 2023
Darcy received an unexpected inheritance. He's unwilling to return home without his cousin.
If all these cousins face is a need to learn how to manage an estate , all would be simple. They appeal to their former General, Thomas Bennet, who issues an invitation to Longborn. There, the gentlemen receive the needed instructions, meet a few new acquaintances, and find there is someone out there who is determined to see Mr. Bennet or one of the cousins dead. Why is anyone's guess . I'm sure you'll enjoy this wonderful story as relationships develop and while unraveling this mystery .
If all these cousins face is a need to learn how to manage an estate , all would be simple. They appeal to their former General, Thomas Bennet, who issues an invitation to Longborn. There, the gentlemen receive the needed instructions, meet a few new acquaintances, and find there is someone out there who is determined to see Mr. Bennet or one of the cousins dead. Why is anyone's guess . I'm sure you'll enjoy this wonderful story as relationships develop and while unraveling this mystery .
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