This is the kind of story I aspire to write.
In the hands of another author, indeed an author I fear more people would be interested in, this story would perhaps have barely made a single novel's worth of material. In McNeill's hands however, every aspect is given due attention, and what is ultimately one story among countless trillions in the Imperium's long history is lent all the gravitas it requires to truly absorb the reader into the minds of its many, many characters. My praises to McNeill, as despite the tremendous detail going into this story (the Expedition has only just left Imperial space come the end of the first novel), not once did I feel lost or confused, save for when the characters were also. When they despaired, I despaired. When they found hope again, I was cheering with them. I could taste the on-ship recycled water, noticed my heart race when danger loomed, and felt as if I was right there alongside the characters as they celebrated their final victory.
Narratively, I can find no fault in this story. Nor do I have any complaints in terms of character development arcs, pacing, environmental descriptions, expositional sequences, dialogue, action scenes, or general writing style. But, if I must find one single fault in this story, it would be its female characters.
I will preface this by saying that my knowledge of the Warhammer 40,000 universe is not as extensive as I sometimes wish it was, and for all I know, there may indeed be a disparity in how males and females are treated and represented in the Imperium. However, as an empire of 10,000 years and counting, and having spent practically all of that time at war with someone or another, I would be willing to hazard that its gender divide would have faded, if not disappeared completely, in the face of such pressing concerns. So I would like to wish, anyway.
It is therefore with some disappointment that I notice that not only is there a significantly greater number of males than females in this story, but - hiding names to prevent spoilers - the few females that are around are always described as being physically beautiful, or otherwise in no bad shape (one such character emerging from a wrecked APC is a noteworthy memory of this). Perhaps most offensive of all is the techpriestess who, hailing from an order that is repeatedly stated to have no sense of aesthetics beyond utilitarianism, has gone out of her way to make her mandatory machine-parts (replacing her birth-flesh) as close to her original form as possible, something that is unheard of, as far as my knowledge goes.
Now, that is not to say that these female characters are there merely to look pretty. Quite the opposite. The aforementioned techpriestess is arguably one of the most important characters in the narrative, and the APC-crasher, with some brief words and a choice shot to the chest of an uncooperative menial, is able to affect a change in circumstances that no doubt wins that particular day. However, in a story filled with characters riddled with physical imperfections and some typically repulsive general design, the females all stand out. Another techpriestess is even described having not gone down the path of the one described above, opting for utilitarian implants while working in a dark, filthy area of the ship, and yet even she is described as good-looking, having had not enough implants yet to remove her natural beauty (which has somehow survived her hard work in a dark, sooty forge).
In a story filled with characters of clanking, oily machinery, or otherwise decidedly human physical failings, it stands out if one but looks. I said I aspire to write a story such as this, but I extend that statement here by saying that I would at least try to do the female characters a little more evenly with the male ones. McNeill clearly has no issue with creating the grotesque, so I don't see why he abandoned it, in such a consistently good story no less, when it came to his females.
Gender inequalities aside however (and, to be fair, this is about as far away from social justice fiction as you can get without specifically warring against it), this is a fantastic read. I heartily recommend it to anyone and everyone, 40k fan or not, though I understand if the descriptions and level of detailing are not for everyone. For me, personally, it all adds to the world the story is set in, and so enriches it, but I have read enough, and spoken to enough people, to know that this sentiment is not universal. Also, if you don't like sci-fi, seriously, keep away. All others, flock this way, and read until you are full, for there will be more left over afterwards.
Still wondering what happened to [DATA EXPUNGED] though.