While I had fun with the first book, I had a really rough time with the second one. I think the only part of it I actually enjoyed was Merrick, just cause he's hot and suffers silently for love.
I had two big issues: the one had to do with the plot and the second with the writing.
Plot
The first book covered a king of 'tournament arc', a set of trials to decide who the next regent of a city would be. Therefore, it made sense that it would have a relatively small cast of relatively fleshed out characters and a setting/scope that wasn't too big. There were hints of bigger things to come, but only by the end do we start getting more info on that.
The stakes of this second book, as the story's scope expands, are meant to be much, much higher. Like, 'ruination and thousands of dead' high. But at no point was I convinced of this, because... almost nothing happens. And anything that does happen, only affects the main and main secondary characters. We are meant to fear the new Fae, the rebels, the king that kept Lessia under his control; yet for the vast majority of this book we are stuck with Lessia, Merrick and their pals, with the later addition of Loche.
On top of that, the worldbuilding isn't nearly fleshed out enough for me to care about all these people that are supposed to be threatened. I barely care about the MCs as it is. Nothing in this, or the first, book supports the scale of the threat, no true buildup to anything, no true sense of dread. On top of that, most of the book's plot is people trying to convince each other that they must do something, but nothing much is ever done. On top of that, the discussions that happen, on strategy, politics, etc. feel extremely surface level.
Writing
The problem with the plot is, to some extent, also the result of the writing itself, in particular one specific choice that the author has made: everything. is. dramatic. all. the. time. Because of this, half the time I feel that the emotions and reactions on page make no sense, and when they do they've lost the ability to make me feel something.
Lessia is a big problem. One, because we are meant to see her as this amazingly good person, always thinking of others, but we haven't seen nearly enough proof of this for it to feel true. Just a lot of telling, not showing. And two, because all her reactions are over the top, before the halfway point she's already screamed at the ocean twice and hasn't had a normal reaction to any revelation of any kind. I expect there to be growling when you have hunky shadow-daddy Fae, but the amount of growls that Lessia alone has produced (or had building inside of her) could fuel a drinking game where everyone would be drunk within the first quarter of the book.
There's actually no normal sounds being made, people don't talk or say things; they snarl, growl, lash out, etc. Also, people don't frown, their brows crash or snap. People don't look at each other, their eyes collide. all. the. damn. time. When Lessia goes up the stairs, her hair "slams" against her back, like the door to a miffed teenager's room. I could go on, but the bottom line is that much editing was needed to tone it all down so that only the right moments were like this.
Another example of the over the top-ness of the book is the constant use of a specific structure:
This one.
The one sentence per line.
Or one word.
Dramatic.
So very dramatic.
This way of writing can be really impactful, especially when used at the end of a chapter where smth big is revealed. But here it is used all the time. Sometimes there's multiple instances on a single page. It's no longer impactful, it's too much and too little at the same time.
It's a shame because the story has a lot of potential, and the characters and magic system are actually pretty cool. The writing itself also has a lot of potential but is dragged down by these few, major issues.