Anne, Ben, Anne, Ben, Anne, Ben.... GIVE IT A REST WOULD YOU?
I cannot stand reading a book when the author hasn't re-read it themselves. "It's fine BEN" "ANNE, you just said you wanted to kayak" "I don't want to impose on BEN'S time" "That's quite alright ANNE" "BEN, would you like to go kayaking?" blah blah blah
When was the last time you used someones name in a conversation, other than mockingly, or to call out to them? It just doesn't happen, I assume that the author is a regular human, therefore she should be able to pick up on this ANNOYING, repetitive crap when reading it herself.
The worst part is, it could potentially be a good story-line. I am only on chapter five, but felt so compelled to stop and write this review. That is not the sign of a good read.
There is also a whole lot of unnecessary drivel, - Anne had to get sunscreen, Anne poured herself a coffee, Anne picked up her salad - It's a case of redundant writing to fill the pages. My strong belief is - If it has no relevance and does not add to the story - DON"T WRITE IT!!!
Finally, my little rant on the popularity of ebooks - GET SOMEONE, WHO KNOWS THEIR GRAMMAR AND KNOWS WHAT HUMANS TALK LIKE TO READ YOUR BOOK.
I get that it's a self publishing world now, with Amazon and ebooks, but that doesn't mean that every Mary and Martha SHOULD write a book. JUST READ IT TO YOURSELF FIRST PLEASE.