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Haiku
Jessica, this is a great idea! I love writing haiku, but I’m not very good at it.I like to wrap up
in a suave, blanket statement
when things get chilly.
Thanks! I'm glad you like my idea. Your haiku is wonderful--it's very clever.Wraps all in quiet,
Knitted fingers gently warmed,
indebted silence.
What suave, smooth haiku! Guy, that’s now one of my favorites.She haunts the soundbox
of a melon-backed guitar
now white with years’ dust.
Thanks M & Al - Jessica, this is an excellent 'game'! Al what a curiously goth haiku following M's somber one.The strand of her hair
was coiled stark red in the dawn's
new bar of white soap.
Thanks, Guy! I'm glad you all are taking to it. :)Cleanse this parted soul
Of its regretted children
Born yesterday's spoils
YW, Jessica. I've been writing haiku off and on for 30 years or so.When I left childhood
I parted my hair sideways
to wash out regrets.
Thank you, Guy and Alex. Nice work, Kat and Alex!Damn the nicotine!
Full speed ahead! Ah, I see
Mossers, Iz, and Red.
*I added more XDThanks M :) I like yours
Blood red seeping out
Congealing on my white skin
Beautiful contrast
The sharp, loving knife
Pierces skin so tenderly
Creating contrast
Between scars and skin
Or life and lingering death
Beautiful contrast
Yummy Hershey's barGummi bears and sour worms
Imma be fat, yup.
(Explanation: I used to go to baseballs games a lot which meant I ate way to much candy!)
I sat, my elbowson the slate. The barkeep growled,
“You’re out awful late!”
I downed the shot and
mentioned a name: a doe-eyed,
tall, two-timing dame.
He filled the shot glass
and set the bottle before
me on the old bar.
She was a model,
I told him, under her long
hair an ugly scar.
M here's my pale imitation to your interleaved rhyming Haiku.I was on the ball
Is what he thought when the tree
Struck him in the face.
What? Where is this place?
His brained thoughts bounced in their fall
Towards mystery.
Who am I to be?
The tree stood as quiet as grace
One hundred feet tall.
Your poems and stories often have a philosophical dimension. This one has an enticing element of ambiguity, which gives it a surreal cast. I especially like the lines “The tree stood as quiet as grace / One hundred feet tall.”
M, I seem to be unable to write without some kind of philosophical element creeping in. As long as they are still entertaining to some extent. This rhyming haiku thing is a curious format - I had fun getting this to go.
*Wow, thats a lot of haiku's about trees XDScritch, scratch on the win-
-dow, something is trying to
invade your own mind
M, lol - I'm still smiling :-)She looked at my sides
And off the top of her head
said "You have big ears."
She dissolved to tears,giggling about my ears,
scissors waving past.
She snipped lightning fast.
“Watch it with the thinning shears!”
I exclaimed at last.
Salem judges asked,“Consortest thou with demons?”
The witch was aghast.
“Would I judge a man
by his horns and his forked tail?
He shops at Neiman’s.”
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writer'spoet's block.Basically, write a standard haiku that somehow relates to the previous haiku. You can be as literal or as interpretive as you want--by all means, go off on tangents, but try not to stray too far into unrecognizable randomness.