Had I finished this book I would've rated it 2 stars for it's current state, but since I DNF'd it and only got to page 61 of 272, 23% of the book, I must give it 0 stars. It has potential though. I saw glimpses of an amazing story through the issues and if the author hired a professional developmental editor and line editor to help clean up the story and dialogue this book would be a gem.
Here's just a few examples:
Developmentally this story jumped quite a bit between the MC doing one thing and then suddenly the reader is in another scene or reading about someone else. Time passes as well in some cases, though it feels like it's all happening at once in various locations or within a few days, but apparently it's been years. So it makes it hard to track what's going on when. Like on page 8, we had just been learning about the MC and what he'd been doing to make this AI vision come to life, then it jumps without warning to a new paragraph a few days in the future and another character that has nothing to do with what was just written. In another instance, page 40, a meeting was to be had in 3 hrs, then after a quick call and another short conversation the meeting was already ready to go in 10 minutes time. That wasn't 3 hours worth of stuff and there was no indication in some other manner of time passing yet again.
Under the same umbrella, the readers has other issues like on page 6 where the MC has entered his room that brings him solace, but then literally the next two sentences say that the door is devoid of a doorknob, secured with a plastic square on the adjacent wall and he places his hand on the panel, unlocking the door and receiving a rush of cool air as he enters his room...even though he had already entered the room a couple sentences ago. On page 54 the MC is in an unorganized meeting, he looks at the person with him and it says that the others in the meeting didn't grasp what the MC's AI had done, nor understood what the AI could do. But, on page 51 a character clearly states that is not the case and on page 55 the MC is told he wouldn't be prosecuted for what occurred. So, clearly the others know something. Also, if the MC was worried about reverse engineering why wasn't that put in the contract terms, when we see in another scene that strict terms are put on someone else, and the reader never found out if the individual doing the reverse engineering was one of the people who was given the item to begin with or not. Then there was another instance where the MC randomly walks out a window, and based on the scene seems like suicide, but he's actually fine and he had just used the window as a door for some reason and another character does the same when they follow him. It didn't make any sense whatsoever.
Dialogue wise, which falls under line editing, there were a lot of responses that didn't make sense.
Like on page 5, a character tells the MC that he's "just a loser living off his parents." The MC from what I'd read was still in school, 18, and hadn't graduated yet, so I don't understand how's he's a loser. On page 26, the MC calls someone, who is also interested in computers, excitedly tells her some news but for some reason she's confused and concerned then says, "Are you okay, Nikola? Tell me where you are. I'm going to come over." She could have just asked him to slow down and tell her again and she should already know where he is based on what he was saying and what she knows of him. If the author had wanted/needed this character to come over, a different response to the MC's call would have worked better and overall made more sense.
On a different note, for readers with a preference, there is strong language and a passing implication of "swinging" occurring between some characters in the first few pages of the book.
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