1.25/5 stars
“Show don’t tell” is not always the best advice, but fucking hell, these authors could have used it. I got the impression we were supposed to think our assassin elf boi was smart with how he kept knowing things, but like. It was more “the author says there is this thing here conveniently, and thus it is here conveniently.” Maybe they were trying to match some Witcher vibes (I’d put money on it), but they failed masterfully. Every time I wanted to give the benefit of the doubt, I’d be let down. I didn’t care about Gilmir. The plot lacked a decent structure beyond a very basic idea of “Step One. Step Two. Step Three. Step Four,” and so on. And on top of all this, it was poorly edited, both on a line-editing sphere and on a developmental sphere. Yikkeeee. I make a point of judging self-published books the same as tradpubbed books, and it’s books like these that make me second-guess myself and forget that there are plenty of self-pubbed books at the quality of (or even better than) tradpubs.
I believe this book was also trying to make some general commentary on solving current global issues (namely in the discussions of nature), but this is handled clumsily. Dialogue was stilted and forced, and even though this book is incredibly short already, every scene could have been sharpened. It was also wild that I’m supposed to be surprised about Gilmir’s fate--as if the build-up didn’t already make it feel like he was shitty at his job.
I almost bumped up to two stars at the end because it really did get dark and depressing, and while it still wasn’t great, it was still effective. But then I read the last page and had to change my mind. I would have rathered ending on the strongest element of the piece. Imo, lean more into that strong internalization. It was fun while it lasted (I loved the bit about the nursery rhyme)!