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A Pemberley Bride
When Miss Elizabeth Bennet falls at Pemberley, Mr Darcy insists she remains at Pemberley until her ankle has recovered. As Elizabeth and Mr Darcy fall in love, Miss Bingley is determined to part them.
This novella takes place when Elizabeth tours Pemberley with her aunt and uncle. It is an alternate version to the original events.
This novella takes place when Elizabeth tours Pemberley with her aunt and uncle. It is an alternate version to the original events.
80 pages, Kindle Edition
First published February 10, 2016
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April 13, 2017
This was a short novella so it was easy to complete it in a few hours. However the language got in the way of pulling me completely into the story. It was contrived and/or awkward at times.
Elizabeth, while touring Pemberley with the Gardiners, runs ahead and with gravity helping to propel her down a hillside path, her foot catches under a root and her ankle sustains a sprain. Darcy, returning a day earlier than his house party, hears her cries and goes to investigate. He carries her into the manor and sends for the doctor. Then, he is delighted to have a second chance with her under his roof as she cannot be moved until healed.
Elizabeth takes the opportunity to confront Bingley, as he is part of the visitors, and he decides he will travel directly to Netherfield after the house party is over. He has not forgotten Jane. However, meanwhile, catty Caroline makes plans to disgrace Elizabeth in the eyes of the entire company and when the first plan fails, she adopts a second more cruel scheme. She is sure Darcy will not marry a woman thus shamed.
My problem with how this works out is, "But disguise of every sort is my abhorrence." While the story line has to use the ploy of a lie for the story to work out, it does not seem like it is in character for Darcy. So the reader must go with it.
Like some other reviews, I was left with the sense that this story could have been better developed at the end. Oh, Darcy says he is going to do as in canon and the HEA for our couple seems guaranteed but it is all in the future. One other quibble: the title had me thinking that the bride would for some reason be married from Pemberley.
Elizabeth, while touring Pemberley with the Gardiners, runs ahead and with gravity helping to propel her down a hillside path, her foot catches under a root and her ankle sustains a sprain. Darcy, returning a day earlier than his house party, hears her cries and goes to investigate. He carries her into the manor and sends for the doctor. Then, he is delighted to have a second chance with her under his roof as she cannot be moved until healed.
Elizabeth takes the opportunity to confront Bingley, as he is part of the visitors, and he decides he will travel directly to Netherfield after the house party is over. He has not forgotten Jane. However, meanwhile, catty Caroline makes plans to disgrace Elizabeth in the eyes of the entire company and when the first plan fails, she adopts a second more cruel scheme. She is sure Darcy will not marry a woman thus shamed.
My problem with how this works out is, "But disguise of every sort is my abhorrence." While the story line has to use the ploy of a lie for the story to work out, it does not seem like it is in character for Darcy. So the reader must go with it.
Like some other reviews, I was left with the sense that this story could have been better developed at the end. Oh, Darcy says he is going to do as in canon and the HEA for our couple seems guaranteed but it is all in the future. One other quibble: the title had me thinking that the bride would for some reason be married from Pemberley.
February 18, 2016
This has a fresh new angle on events while Elizabeth and the Gardiners tour Pemberley. The novella begins as they are walking the grounds before going into the home itself, and therefore Elizabeth hasn't heard Mrs. Reynold's praise for Mr. Darcy or seen the portrait that starts to stir feelings in her for him in the original Pride and Prejudice.
Lizzy is so delighted with the property that she unwisely sprints down a hill. She gets caught by a tree root and sprawls onto the ground. Darcy, on his way home earlier than expected, hears her cry of pain and finds her with a severe ankle sprain. He is delighted to have the opportunity to change her opinion of him when the doctor he calls suggests that Elizabeth should not be moved from Pemberley. She and the Gardiners therefore become part of the house party that includes Mr. Bingley, his sisters and Mr. Hurst as well as, of course, Georgiana. This is a huge blow to Caroline, who had counted on having Darcy to herself without competition, so she plots to disgrace Elizabeth.
Most of the events are reported in a straightforward manner. While I was pleased with the absence of any grammar or spelling errors, the writing just didn't seem to flow smoothly. The story kept my interest, especially because it's not overly long, but it never engaged my feelings.
More significantly, I was disappointed with the ending and didn't find it credible. Everyone acts as though the threat of scandal has been resolved and they can relax and enjoy the rest of the evening, It's true that Darcy is remaining steadfastly loyal to Elizabeth and her family and he has vowed to make things right. Unfortunately, there's no guarantee that it will be possible, and I can't believe either Elizabeth or her aunt and uncle would be able to dismiss their anxiety so easily despite Darcy's assurances.
I did like the basic plot and would rate it higher with a more satisfactory ending.
Lizzy is so delighted with the property that she unwisely sprints down a hill. She gets caught by a tree root and sprawls onto the ground. Darcy, on his way home earlier than expected, hears her cry of pain and finds her with a severe ankle sprain. He is delighted to have the opportunity to change her opinion of him when the doctor he calls suggests that Elizabeth should not be moved from Pemberley. She and the Gardiners therefore become part of the house party that includes Mr. Bingley, his sisters and Mr. Hurst as well as, of course, Georgiana. This is a huge blow to Caroline, who had counted on having Darcy to herself without competition, so she plots to disgrace Elizabeth.
Most of the events are reported in a straightforward manner. While I was pleased with the absence of any grammar or spelling errors, the writing just didn't seem to flow smoothly. The story kept my interest, especially because it's not overly long, but it never engaged my feelings.
More significantly, I was disappointed with the ending and didn't find it credible. Everyone acts as though the threat of scandal has been resolved and they can relax and enjoy the rest of the evening, It's true that Darcy is remaining steadfastly loyal to Elizabeth and her family and he has vowed to make things right. Unfortunately, there's no guarantee that it will be possible, and I can't believe either Elizabeth or her aunt and uncle would be able to dismiss their anxiety so easily despite Darcy's assurances.
I did like the basic plot and would rate it higher with a more satisfactory ending.
November 22, 2018
So this is a piece of P&P re-imagined. When the Gardiner's arrive at Pemberley they are encouraged to tour the grounds first and Lizzy [trope] sprains her ankle. And she can't walk, can't ride, must be carried and the Gardiners end up joining Mr. Darcy's house party. Caroline is super vile and cruel and repeatedly gets her comeuppance.
The short tale is really rather far fetched and angsty with Darcy expecting an visit from the PM and planning a ball. Lizzy recovering from her immobility to slipping on heels to wear a borrowed dress to the ball.And implausible story about the Inn only forwarding the mail once per week. This seemed really lazy to me. Letters were the email and text app of the day, if you can't go an hour without your phone then Regency folks couldn't go a week without letters. There are plenty of easy ways to delay the arrival of Jane's letter re Lydia. I am sure Pemberley has staff going to Lambton daily so retrieving their mail should have been easy. And lastly as a guest of Mr. Darcy the Inn would have made taking care of the Gardiners a priority. Okay enough... Miss Bingley feels the pain of her plot and the story ends...
The short tale is really rather far fetched and angsty with Darcy expecting an visit from the PM and planning a ball. Lizzy recovering from her immobility to slipping on heels to wear a borrowed dress to the ball.And implausible story about the Inn only forwarding the mail once per week. This seemed really lazy to me. Letters were the email and text app of the day, if you can't go an hour without your phone then Regency folks couldn't go a week without letters. There are plenty of easy ways to delay the arrival of Jane's letter re Lydia. I am sure Pemberley has staff going to Lambton daily so retrieving their mail should have been easy. And lastly as a guest of Mr. Darcy the Inn would have made taking care of the Gardiners a priority. Okay enough... Miss Bingley feels the pain of her plot and the story ends...
April 14, 2017
I will not cover the plot as Sheila does that beautifully. This was a sweet short story that begins when Elizabeth is touring Pemberley with her aunt and uncle. She is injured and of course, Darcy finds her. Romance ensues which is very sweet to witness. I enjoyed this aspect of the book. There is a bit of controversy at the end when the Caroline attempts to hurt Elizabeth's reputation. The ending was very exciting but not totally believable. But, suspending belief, I enjoyed this sweet short story as I'm a sucker for stories that focus on Darcy trying to woo Elizabeth. a sweet short read with a little excitement at the end. I wish this was a bit longer but I was happy.
March 21, 2018
Un what if plutôt sympathique qui a le mérite d'utiliser le bon vieux ressort de la chute... Loin de se jeter dans les bras l'un de l'autre à la première occasion Darcy et Lizzy apprennent à se connaitre (un bon point pour l'auteure). Le gros obstacle est Caroline Bingley, toujours machiavélique et du coup carrément méchante dans cette version ( je trouve celà dommage car le personnage en devient caricatural). L'auteure réussit toutefois à rejoindre la trame originelle avec la fugue amoureuse de Lydia même si cette dernière n'a finalement que peu d'impact. Au final, un bon moment mais certes pas inoubliable
Ce que j'aime : le fait de voir Lizzy et Darcy apprendre à se connaitre
Ce que j'aime moins : Caroline qui en devient caricaturale
En bref : Un what if plutot bien mené et plaisant à lire mais pas inoubliable
Ma note
6/10
Ce que j'aime : le fait de voir Lizzy et Darcy apprendre à se connaitre
Ce que j'aime moins : Caroline qui en devient caricaturale
En bref : Un what if plutot bien mené et plaisant à lire mais pas inoubliable
Ma note
6/10
February 27, 2016
Sophomoric fare
This was a sophomoric story that frequently repeated itself. There were no new plot twists. The writing was very amateurish. There were several points that were simply implausible. Really implausible. I wouldn't recommend paying for this story when there is much better free fan fiction. At least it was short.
This was a sophomoric story that frequently repeated itself. There were no new plot twists. The writing was very amateurish. There were several points that were simply implausible. Really implausible. I wouldn't recommend paying for this story when there is much better free fan fiction. At least it was short.
February 23, 2016
Short and sweet - definitely showing the evil side of Miss Bingley!
March 19, 2016
Cute story..wishing it had been longer so we could read about the progression of Elizabeth's feelings.
January 16, 2020
This was a good story with an interesting story premise. The characters were also well written. Caroline tried to plot against Lizzy and it was fun to see how spectacularly it back fired on her.
November 22, 2023
Cute
This is a cute story but in horrible need of editing. Miss Bingley's comeuppance wasn't nearly severe enough.
Edit. Edit. Edit.
This is a cute story but in horrible need of editing. Miss Bingley's comeuppance wasn't nearly severe enough.
Edit. Edit. Edit.
July 21, 2024
Superficial
While I applaud the author’s efforts, this book was pretty juvenile. Rather than say mean things, I’ll just say it was very superficial with no depth at all.
While I applaud the author’s efforts, this book was pretty juvenile. Rather than say mean things, I’ll just say it was very superficial with no depth at all.
March 6, 2016
A Pemberley Bri
This was a happy, but not uneventful,story. Unfortunately, there was the infamous proposal at Hunsford. After much soul searching, Darcy was no longer are Elizabeth's refusal because as he reflected on every conversation and the proposal, he realized that she was correct in her angry rebuttal. The Gardiners and Elizabeth are at Pemberley taking in the gardens. Elizabeth was way out ahead of Aunt and Uncle Gardiner. She had walked up the incline to look back to view the house, thinking to herself that it would have been an honour to be Mistress of Pemberley. But no, it was not meant to be. Coming back down the hill was easy, but dangerous because in her running momentum hurried her too fast down the hill. As she tripped over an exposed root she fell hard to the ground twisting her ankle. In her pain, she cried out for help. Hearing someone on horseback, she realized someone had found her embarrassed as she was. When she looks up, a pair of Hessian boots, followed by cream colored breeches filled out nicely by first fight muscles, an elegant black coat, and a white intricate tied cravat, looking up to....."Mr. Darcy!" Could her embarrassment get any more horrifying as he saw her sprawling on the ground with her ankle showing? Surely not, well maybe so given their last meeting. With arguments, naturally because they seem to brave this tendency when meeting, she finally lets him carry her down the hill into the house. Of course she had to argue about this, too. Commands started flying - one footman to get the doctor, another to get her Aunt and Uncle, a third to get his horse, and last but not least, Mrs. Reynolds to fix the blue room for her should they stay at Pemberley. She hardly recognized this Darcy who was gentle, kind, and likeable. The doctor arrives and examines her ankle telling Darcy and her family that she shouldn't be moved for weeks if even then. Darcy is happy since now he'll be able to visit with her more to show her that he's changed. Tomorrow however, the Bingleys arrive and Caroline is her usual hateful self. More so, because she is a threat to her plans for becoming Mrs. Darcy. All of her evil plans come to naught. At dinner, Caroline's plan to humiliate Elizabeth backfires, and Caroline is humiliated herself. Caroline steals letters meant for Elizabeth, and plans her final attack. At the ball, Darcy realizes what has happened when Elizabeth is cut by one of his guests and his sister brings the letter left in the women's room, and circulates that the letter is a forgery. He tells Caroline that she will be leaving in the morning and never will be allowed to visit any of their homes again. Her big dreams fell right under her feet and came back around to slap her in her face. When she starts her whining, Darcy tells her to stop or he will have her thrown out of Pemberley immediately in front of all these people. Before the night ends, Darcy announces that he and Elizabeth are betrothed. Not only is Caroline humiliated, but Mr. Beeston, who cut Elizabeth, is not only humiliated but shamed by what he had done based on rumors circulating the ball. Bingley is off to Netherfield and Jane, more apt Jane and then Netherfield, Darcy is off to catch Wickham, and then they can plan their wedding that could not come soon enough as far as they were both concerned. I cannot leave my review without saying, " Lydia is the dumbest girl that lives in England, and George Wickham is a slimy snake without morals. In their stupidity, they deserve one another to be unhappy for the rest of their lives."
This was a happy, but not uneventful,story. Unfortunately, there was the infamous proposal at Hunsford. After much soul searching, Darcy was no longer are Elizabeth's refusal because as he reflected on every conversation and the proposal, he realized that she was correct in her angry rebuttal. The Gardiners and Elizabeth are at Pemberley taking in the gardens. Elizabeth was way out ahead of Aunt and Uncle Gardiner. She had walked up the incline to look back to view the house, thinking to herself that it would have been an honour to be Mistress of Pemberley. But no, it was not meant to be. Coming back down the hill was easy, but dangerous because in her running momentum hurried her too fast down the hill. As she tripped over an exposed root she fell hard to the ground twisting her ankle. In her pain, she cried out for help. Hearing someone on horseback, she realized someone had found her embarrassed as she was. When she looks up, a pair of Hessian boots, followed by cream colored breeches filled out nicely by first fight muscles, an elegant black coat, and a white intricate tied cravat, looking up to....."Mr. Darcy!" Could her embarrassment get any more horrifying as he saw her sprawling on the ground with her ankle showing? Surely not, well maybe so given their last meeting. With arguments, naturally because they seem to brave this tendency when meeting, she finally lets him carry her down the hill into the house. Of course she had to argue about this, too. Commands started flying - one footman to get the doctor, another to get her Aunt and Uncle, a third to get his horse, and last but not least, Mrs. Reynolds to fix the blue room for her should they stay at Pemberley. She hardly recognized this Darcy who was gentle, kind, and likeable. The doctor arrives and examines her ankle telling Darcy and her family that she shouldn't be moved for weeks if even then. Darcy is happy since now he'll be able to visit with her more to show her that he's changed. Tomorrow however, the Bingleys arrive and Caroline is her usual hateful self. More so, because she is a threat to her plans for becoming Mrs. Darcy. All of her evil plans come to naught. At dinner, Caroline's plan to humiliate Elizabeth backfires, and Caroline is humiliated herself. Caroline steals letters meant for Elizabeth, and plans her final attack. At the ball, Darcy realizes what has happened when Elizabeth is cut by one of his guests and his sister brings the letter left in the women's room, and circulates that the letter is a forgery. He tells Caroline that she will be leaving in the morning and never will be allowed to visit any of their homes again. Her big dreams fell right under her feet and came back around to slap her in her face. When she starts her whining, Darcy tells her to stop or he will have her thrown out of Pemberley immediately in front of all these people. Before the night ends, Darcy announces that he and Elizabeth are betrothed. Not only is Caroline humiliated, but Mr. Beeston, who cut Elizabeth, is not only humiliated but shamed by what he had done based on rumors circulating the ball. Bingley is off to Netherfield and Jane, more apt Jane and then Netherfield, Darcy is off to catch Wickham, and then they can plan their wedding that could not come soon enough as far as they were both concerned. I cannot leave my review without saying, " Lydia is the dumbest girl that lives in England, and George Wickham is a slimy snake without morals. In their stupidity, they deserve one another to be unhappy for the rest of their lives."
June 19, 2016
Short story packed with drama as ODC fights for their HEA
WOW!!! This may have been a short story; however, it lacked nothing as it was packed with drama and suspense as our star-crossed lovers struggled to find their HEA.
Read the reviews, there are excellent comments that I don’t need to repeat here. In fact I read this short story because of those reviews and my curiosity at wanting to see what happened to Caroline Bingley. She certainly was a piece of work. How she could possibly be related to Charles Bingley is a mystery.
This was a quick read, approximately two hours, give or take. I enjoyed it simply to see someone take Caroline in hand. The only person able to do that was Mr. Darcy. Oh he was magnificent when in his element. Oh man, it makes me swoon just thinking about it. He was awesome.
Problems: there were minimal editing problems. There were also little things that might make you cringe slightly such as language that seemed contrived, example: Mr. Darcy and Elizabeth speaking dialogue that just didn’t quite fit them. Propriety was stretched to the limits in character actions and mannerisms.
The ballroom gossip mill swung back and forth like the pendulum in a grandfather clock. Usually when a crowd smells blood in the water they go into a killing frenzy. I have a feeling Mr. Beeston will feel the effects of his actions toward Elizabeth in the near future. You don’t publicly cut the future mistress of Pemberley and get away with it. I've also read that gentlemen never cut women. So I guess that says a lot about him.
WOW!!! This may have been a short story; however, it lacked nothing as it was packed with drama and suspense as our star-crossed lovers struggled to find their HEA.
Read the reviews, there are excellent comments that I don’t need to repeat here. In fact I read this short story because of those reviews and my curiosity at wanting to see what happened to Caroline Bingley. She certainly was a piece of work. How she could possibly be related to Charles Bingley is a mystery.
This was a quick read, approximately two hours, give or take. I enjoyed it simply to see someone take Caroline in hand. The only person able to do that was Mr. Darcy. Oh he was magnificent when in his element. Oh man, it makes me swoon just thinking about it. He was awesome.
Problems: there were minimal editing problems. There were also little things that might make you cringe slightly such as language that seemed contrived, example: Mr. Darcy and Elizabeth speaking dialogue that just didn’t quite fit them. Propriety was stretched to the limits in character actions and mannerisms.
The ballroom gossip mill swung back and forth like the pendulum in a grandfather clock. Usually when a crowd smells blood in the water they go into a killing frenzy. I have a feeling Mr. Beeston will feel the effects of his actions toward Elizabeth in the near future. You don’t publicly cut the future mistress of Pemberley and get away with it. I've also read that gentlemen never cut women. So I guess that says a lot about him.
April 10, 2016
A cute direction leading to an earlier understanding.
Elizabeth and the Gardiners are touring Pemberley, and since there is a storm coming them start with touring the grounds. Elizabeth is so enjoying herself that she starts skipping and running further ahead, never realizing how far ahead of the rest she was. After looking at the beautiful vista, she started to run down the hilly path, again never realizing how far ahead she still was. Unfortunately her momentum causes her to trip over a root and she falls forward with her foot stuck in a weird position. She tried calling out for her aunt when a very unexpected savior arrives.
At this point, though she has better thoughts on Mr Darcy in regards to Mr Wickham, she still can not forgive him on his duplicitous behavior with Jane and Mr Bingley. Because the doctor has pronounced that she is not to be moved, Mr Darcy invites her and the Gardiners to stay there since he is expecting a large party the next day.
Mr Darcy has changed and still feels the pull she has on him, but he feels that she still hates him. So with his decision made he sets out to woo her, while under his roof. That is until the diabolical and delusional Miss Bingley arrives. She will try anything to discredit Elizabeth in Mr Darcy's eyes.
I thought this was a cute, yet short novella. I would recommend this novella to all my JAFFer friends as a respite from longer novels.
Elizabeth and the Gardiners are touring Pemberley, and since there is a storm coming them start with touring the grounds. Elizabeth is so enjoying herself that she starts skipping and running further ahead, never realizing how far ahead of the rest she was. After looking at the beautiful vista, she started to run down the hilly path, again never realizing how far ahead she still was. Unfortunately her momentum causes her to trip over a root and she falls forward with her foot stuck in a weird position. She tried calling out for her aunt when a very unexpected savior arrives.
At this point, though she has better thoughts on Mr Darcy in regards to Mr Wickham, she still can not forgive him on his duplicitous behavior with Jane and Mr Bingley. Because the doctor has pronounced that she is not to be moved, Mr Darcy invites her and the Gardiners to stay there since he is expecting a large party the next day.
Mr Darcy has changed and still feels the pull she has on him, but he feels that she still hates him. So with his decision made he sets out to woo her, while under his roof. That is until the diabolical and delusional Miss Bingley arrives. She will try anything to discredit Elizabeth in Mr Darcy's eyes.
I thought this was a cute, yet short novella. I would recommend this novella to all my JAFFer friends as a respite from longer novels.
May 4, 2016
What started as a promising idea soon became painful to read. The execution of this plot was not the best, with glaring errors, awkward dialogue and poor characterisation.
My main issues were the lack of consistency with Elizabeth's injury, the rude breaches of propriety Elizabeth makes in her conversations with others, the rushed development of the relationship between Lizzie and Darcy and the pantomime villainy of Miss Bingley. The elopement was not treated as seriously and Elizabeth was not portrayed as concerned for her sisters or even her relationship with Darcy.
It's such a shame as the idea was excellent.
My main issues were the lack of consistency with Elizabeth's injury, the rude breaches of propriety Elizabeth makes in her conversations with others, the rushed development of the relationship between Lizzie and Darcy and the pantomime villainy of Miss Bingley. The elopement was not treated as seriously and Elizabeth was not portrayed as concerned for her sisters or even her relationship with Darcy.
It's such a shame as the idea was excellent.
April 9, 2016
A sprained ankle bring Elizabeth together at Pemberley. A cute quick read.
February 26, 2016
This was sometimes overly fluffy and often felt rushed, but it was cute nonetheless. Caroline Bingley is always enjoyable as the main antagonist, even if she was a bit over the top.
February 22, 2016
Delightful
I really enjoyed this story and wished it had been longer, as it ended just when I was hoping for more.
I really enjoyed this story and wished it had been longer, as it ended just when I was hoping for more.
February 27, 2016
A nice story
It was a nice little story but it was very short. I would have liked for the story to continue a bit more.
It was a nice little story but it was very short. I would have liked for the story to continue a bit more.
October 27, 2016
Good read.
This author has a future and I am looking forward Moore of her books. Love darcy and liaise. Miss Brinkley is a bad person but got her just deserts.
This author has a future and I am looking forward Moore of her books. Love darcy and liaise. Miss Brinkley is a bad person but got her just deserts.
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