Omega - Part One: Owned

Evan's Alphas #1

by D.J. Heart

Evan is being delivered to his new alphas, and he's terrified. He puts on a brave face though, knowing that there is nothing he can do but face his situation head on. He'll need to keep his wits about him, and he is determined that he won't give in to his body's natural reaction to meeting an eligible alpha mate.

The minute Evan lays eyes on Chad he knows that he's fucked. The alpha smells delicious, and just seconds after he's opened the door all Evan wants to do is bury his face in the cleft of the supernaturally good looking alpha's pecs.

Chad and Peter couldn't be happier with their new omega. They have no intention of treating him poorly, but they know that nothing but time and patience will soothe his fears...

(This is a 14,500 word story about two sweet alphas with bodies to die for and their lucky new omega. They are dominant and demanding, but never cruel, and Evan will soon come to realize that all his worry was for naught...)

Genres: M M Romance, BDSM, Omegaverse, M M M, Menage, Romance, Paranormal

51 pages, Kindle Edition

First published March 15, 2015

About the author

Hello, my name is D.J. Heart. I write erotic gay fiction, usually with a bdsm twist, featuring dominant gay men and the twinks who love them. I hope you all enjoy my stories!

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Reviews

[Tanu Gill · Rating 2 out of 5]

It was weird, in the sense that Evan wanted the reassurance that he would be treated as a human being, and when he was immediately latched on (regardless of the heat factor, 'cause the scent neutralizer was there for a purpose), instead of feeling sad about that, he felt calm? That he had gotten into a good place? Huh! What?

[Jo * Smut-Dickted * · Rating 5 out of 5]

This just worked for me. The men and their issues. How omegas are treated. I found myself indignant and disturbed but I could not stop reading.

[Eve]

3.5 stars.

I expected this to be sheer unabashed smut and I wasn't disappointed. The sex is plentiful, described in detail and pretty hot, and while the author overuses some descriptions and some words like 'adorable' there is a definite sense of fun and engagement in the characters. The writing style is not great, but it didn't bother me.

This is an alpha-beta-omega story set in a world where omegas are basically sex slaves and are patronized and owned by alphas. Evan is an omega bought by two alphas who are already in a relationship. Peter, the dominant alpha, basically buys Evan so that Chad, the more subordinate alpha, would have someone to boss around. This actually works very well as Evan loves having two alphas, and both Peter and Chad become attached to him - hence the hot sex scenes.

Where this story fails for me is whenever it tries to broaden its scope to social awareness and examination of slavery - the reflections on these issues are really shallow and actually make the characters appear unsympathetic. Instead of allowing the reader to ignore the MC's character flaws, the author's portrayal of the characters' thinking processes forces the reader to confront the fact that the MCs are idiots with very little conscience.

So if you can overlook that the alphas are not good people, this is a pretty fun smutty read.

[Boyslove · Rating 1 out of 5]

DNF at 37%.

The only reason I couldn't continue this book is because Peter (one of the alphas) was just too dominant to the point of unhealthy, stupid, selfish, uncaring...I could go on, but I won't.

I like dominant/submissive relationships in books, but to me this was just cold. One minute it seems like peter cares about his mates, next minute he's a complete dickhead...I was just mad at how selfish Peter was, how uncaring he was to his mates, mates that he is supposed to protect in all ways cause he's the most dominant alpha right? But no..

Dunno why this book has such high ratings. Maybe I'm just not used to this level or something.

Anyways, I can't recommend anyone spend money on this book, but if you have kindle unlimited, give it s go and see what you think, maybe you'll like it.

[~nikki the recovering book addict · Rating 4 out of 5]

2nd read

My first time reading this, I rated it a 3 star. No review. So I honestly don’t know what went through my mind.

And this time rereading it, I can honestly say nothing jogged my memory of ever reading this story. So really, I don’t know if I can truly say I read it the first time around. Lol!

Anyways, this second read through has me really enjoying the story! It has lots of sex but it also has a pretty good story line and really good writing. I liked that it’s two alphas together. It’s not often you find alphas mated to alphas although there’s a rise in such stories lately. The omega in this story was initially...acquired...for the lack of a better term because it was a business transaction, for the one alpha who was more submissive. But the fact that it’s become a truly three way mated pair was lovely to see.

I really liked the author’s writing style. I need to get into more of this author’s books!

[Prentice · Rating 2 out of 5]

In many ways, ‘Omega – Part One: Owned’ had all the makings of a five-star start to a fabulous three-part serial. It had an interesting premise, a promising synopsis, and cover art that made me want to look inside. Unfortunately, it didn’t live up to its potential.

Beginning with ‘Evan’, a sheltered Omega who has apparently spent the majority of his life in some sort of Center, being ‘delivered’ to his new Alphas’ home, this story started off fairly well even in spite of the typo in the third paragraph. Understandably apprehensive but determined to be brave in the face of the unknown, I was really rooting for Evan. Despite his age and general naiveté, he didn’t necessarily seem to pushover even with his Omega nature working against him.

Which it did, almost immediately, upon seeing one of his two new Alphas, Chad. Excitable and eager, Chad didn’t automatically endear himself to me. Neither, for that matter, did the other Alpha, Peter, who was Chad’s opposite and the “dominate” Alpha of the relationship. Here’s why: almost from the start, we’re told that Peter procured Evan to please Chad – okay, that went along with the storyline, but the author could really make it work. Only, Heart didn’t.

Instead, I felt like Evan was just an extra hole for the Alphas to use because, as we’re told, Chad wasn’t built to take a knot like Evan. This didn’t improve once Peter was introduced to the mix because all his interactions seem geared towards Chad alone, never mind that Evan was there as well. Then there’s Evan, who far from living up to his non-pushover status, basically just rolls over for them both.

Normally, I wouldn’t take exception to the last part; it’s fairly obvious that Evan’s Omega side overwhelmed him and being this was his first interaction with Alphas, that could explain it. Only, it never improved – it might in the next part (I’ll let you know) – but because he had great sex, everything was excused.

I – okay, you know what, I’m all for short stories that focus solely on the sex, which I’ll admit was fairly well done here (better in some ways than I expected but also really lacking thanks to the lack of emotion behind it) but with the synopsis I really thought we were getting a little bit of plot. Just a smidgen, a small taste the could carry us over to the next part. Also, character development, which would have been nice but wasn’t really present yet.

Before I am lambasted for only pointing out the negative – I’m really not trying to hate; I loved the premise – I did enjoy bits of it. Typo aside, the first few pages were promising. The writing was fairly solid. Evan seemed sweet, Chad seemed eager, and Peter was the kind of dominant Alpha male I love reading about.

Unfortunately, whether due to time constraints, over eagerness, or the simple appeal of quick-money made from serials, the author didn’t give the story or characters time to develop. At least not in this first part and while I’ll continue reading just to see if it improves, I think it’s really a shame. I wanted to love this, honestly, and while I did enjoy parts of it, it wasn’t at all what I was hoping it would be and for the price point alone that's disappointing.

That having been said, if you’re looking for a no-frills steamy read with a heavy focus on the steamy, this could be exactly what you’re looking for.

[Sheena ☆ Book Sheenanigans · Rating 2 out of 5]

[Katrina Passick Lumsden · Rating 2 out of 5]

The emotional poignancy the author was attempting in this tale fell short of the mark. Nothing ever really felt like it was resolved, and I couldn't respect the characters because none of them acted like responsible adults when it came to conflict resolution. Or hell, even when it came to basic communication. An alpha personality who wishes to care for those under his power is supposed to be attuned to their needs, and those within his power are supposed to facilitate that harmony by being honest and open with their alpha. The power dynamic in this series was completely unbalanced and, as a result, it left me feeling unbalanced. The premise is interesting and the story does have potential, but it failed to live up to expectations. If Heart had invested a little more time developing the relationship between the three MC's instead of sacrificing that space to copious amounts of redundant sex, this could have been an awesome read.

[Melissa · Rating 5 out of 5]

This is a very long but very good book. If you like omega/alpha/beta stories, you'll like this one. Peter annoyed me for most of the book with his alpha male attitude but he turned out good in the end.

[Ed Davis · Rating 4 out of 5]

This was a very enjoyable read. I’m sure at some point I will want to read book 2.

[Kerry · Rating 5 out of 5]

4.5 stars

I really enjoyed the dynamic between these three men. I love when two Alphas get together. Peter was the uber-Alpha and Chad was the alpha who happily submitted to him. Together they took care of Evan, their omega. Evan was 'acquired' by Peter, but he really came to love his two alphas. Of course there was plenty of sex, especially when Evan was in heat. I look forward to reading more about these three, but first I'm going to read Claimed, the prequel to this story. I wish I had read it first. I'm dying to know how Peter and Chad met, fell in love and became mates.

[Sarah · Rating 1 out of 5]

Nope.

[Leigh Gaskill · Rating 1 out of 5]

Catfished by this book

I read the reviews prior to reading this book, but decided to give it a try. I was confused, and for sure thought this book was edited, as most people hated Peter and how he only cared for Chad, because he showed a lot of attention and caring to both partners. At about 50% I was like ‘there it is’. Honestly, prior to the interaction that solidified my decision to DNF this book, there are lots of other things that are cringey and gross, and I’ve read ALOT of thing that border the line of sane and ‘normal’. I also looked at the authors other works and realized I read another book in the past and hated it, swore I wouldn’t read another, and forgot the authors name until now, so that’s on me. If size differences are your kink (without them being extreme) then this is likely for you. But if dominant partners being assholes, disregarding their partners in uncomfortable situations, then berating and calling their most submissive partners cruel names and locking them in a room with no food/water and questionable access to bathroom facilities overnight as a punishment is not your thing, probably best to steer clear. I usually don’t write a review for a DNF book, I don’t really think it’s fair, but JFC I don’t know how this book has so many good reviews.

[Jo * Smut-Dickted * · Rating 4 out of 5]

This review is for the entire serial - though each book gets it own rating.

Initially this did not push any buttons. I dislike books where a character (or two) is advertised one way and ends up another. Evan was a pushover, Peter was a big dick (literally and figuratively), and Chad was just too conflicted to be anything but confused about his identity. All three make a great story - but not the one I was expecting.

However, as the serial continues it gets better and better and by the last one I am at a solid 4 stars - do not want to put it down too much - and enjoying the characters sort of growing up into themselves. I still don't like Peter - but I love Chad. Chad finally does come to a place of acceptance and understanding. Evan is true to his nature but has enough spunk (no pun) to be an individual. I am eagerly going on to the next book in the series.

[Morgan · Rating 4 out of 5]

I actually really really really liked this book- I bought the next book already (and started it tho I may need to put it down for a bit to read my other Scavenger Hunt books). I also kinda feel bad about liking the book because I agree with a lot of some other reviewers. A lot of this book is non con or dubious con and I just took it with a grain of salt. Like if I saw this happening in real life I would be calling the cops- and the author shows that there will hopefully be some progress in the future.

I normally don't like the traditional alpha/omega books but ...I may have changed my mind because of this book. Like damn. This universe. Like DJ Heart paints a horrific scene of how omegas are treated/potentially treated, and the character development was on point. You see that the alphas don't really care about omegas until they get Evan and even then it takes a while and you see that Peter, the uberalpha (that only really got Evan (and by got I mean bought) for his alpha mate, Chad, is slower on the uptake. Even towards the end he still is not up to par, neither of them really are, but there is room for improvement that will most likely happen next book (or books).

The only thing that I really really didn't like was later in the book when Chad goes home because he's pissed off at Peter. Peter is a dick to Evan and then Evan goes into heat and then Peter is a dick to Evan.... and then Chad gets sooooo interested in helping Evan with his heat (aka he got horny) that he never really defended Evan/got mad at Peter. Evan got home and everything was better. Like fuck, I really didn't like Peter... he needs a serious upgrade.

But yeah really enjoyed.

[jaxnsmom · Rating 4 out of 5]

3.5 stars

[SilverGirl2323 · Rating 4 out of 5]

HEA MxMxM

I don't know if I fully enjoyed this one
The evil in the book was over the top

The spice was a solid 4
The kinks were great
The dom sub aspects were perfect

[Prentice · Rating 2 out of 5]

This review actually will be succinct (unlike my previous one) since I only have a few things to say. First of all, I didn’t realize this was an ongoing series; I thought it was only a three part serial so forgive my previous misunderstanding. The second thing I have to say?

I don’t like Peter. I don’t like him at all. Thus far he’s not only shown himself to be an asshole but a poor Alpha to both Chad and Evan.

Perhaps that’s the authors point and later in the series he’ll redeem himself – a glimmer of a plot, maybe? – but right now I just feel irritated by him. Due to that irritation, none of the steamy scenes with him was enjoyable for me. Which sucked.

Chad wasn’t much better in this, though to be fair he did have a realization that what he did was wrong. Unfortunately, that moment was swept away because Evan went into heat and that excuses everything (/sarcasm). And, okay, I get that I’m taking this whole series way too seriously because at this point it’s obvious it was just written for the smexy times and apparently I have trouble shutting off my brain and enjoying that but – c’mon.

Peter needs to buy a fucking clue – he’s a shitty Alpha. Chad needs to grow up a little – his Omega isn’t a toy. Evan needs – I have no idea, maybe two new Alphas.

Anyway, overall, I’m not sure how I feel about this series. On the one hand, I really liked the idea when I first stumbled upon it and Heart did a good job at laying down some basics for an interesting universe. On the other hand, there’s little to no emotion behind anything (writing sex for sex’s sake is fine but you can elevate a mediocre sex scene to an incredible one by adding a smidgen of real emotion to it) and I’m frustrated by the lack of character depth.

I’ll very likely continue reading this – frustrated curiosity is a horrible thing – but I really hope the author has some sort of game plan to redeem this serial into a five-star read. Or a three-star read, at the very least.

[Shelley Chastagner · Rating 4 out of 5]

I found the premise of this book interesting enough that I was actually willing to purchase the rest of the serial. The author now has the complete seven part set available for a better price. There are elements of the story that are familiar, but it is it's own world. The population is made up of Alphas, Betas and Omegas. The anatomy of men is a bit different. The author does a fantastic job of keeping the story line moving and the characters grow from their experiences. I really enjoyed getting to know Peter, Chad and Evan. Each contributed something crucial to the story. Peter's evolution from his own self importance to really listening to Chad and Evan, placing their needs above his own or his company's need was great. I would've liked to have seen his bullying dealt with a bit more distinctly, but I was mostly satisfied with him by the conclusion. I liked Chad from the beginning and didn't understand his willingness to put up with Peter's brutish behavior. I loved it when he finally takes a stand. Evan is sweet and caring. His enthusiasm for his new life is wonderful. I would love to see these three again in the future.
I would encourage the author to go through and re-edit. Along with usual word errors and spelling mistakes, the voice tenses change throughout the book and it kept dragging me out of the story. Very annoying.
Adult read

[MSI_SBM · Rating 2 out of 5]

Ok. Are they shifters or not? That's the thing that never gets explained.
They have alphas, betas and omegas. They go into heat. They knot. But they don't shift, or change, so it's a bit weird.
Still, that's unique, so I gotta hand it to them.
Also the world building is interesting. Sex is really on spot. Plot is non existent.
For what it is, it does well.

[Janet (iamltr) · Rating 3 out of 5]

Oh my

I'm not going to lie, I hated Peter. Why not make this a romance between Chad and Evan? Why make it a menage when its technically a triangle? There were no feelings between Peter and Evan.

The editing in this one was bad. But I did laugh when the alpha names got mixed up in the same paragraph and it looked like one person was talking to himself.

[Lila Hunter · Rating 4 out of 5]

3.5 out of 5

An interesting start to a series.

As many Alpha & Omega story the explanation behind their relationship is minimal, but their interactions compensated for it. It has smexy times, plus a side of D/s in a menage relationship.

Looking forward to the next book in the series.

[Trisha · Rating 4 out of 5]

Very interesting story

Have enjoyed learning about Evan and his hot alphas Peter and Chad. Peter is the top alpha with Chad being the excited younger version. Looking forward to more of their story.

[suzy · Rating 3 out of 5]

This was an okay read. The story was good, but I found myself not really long Peter, he was a bit of a bully towards Chad and Evan, I really wanted him to rip Aidan apart seeings as he was an Uber Alpha, but it was a disappointing outcome. Not sure I will read book 2.

[Carlos · Rating 2 out of 5]

Well written but....

Well it's well written, very descriptive but barely a story on it. If you like smoking sex scenes you'll enjoy this...

[Tanu Gill · Rating 1 out of 5]

I was sooo creeped out by Peter. God save Evan and Chad from the brutal beast, animal!!!!

[Tanu Gill · Rating 1 out of 5]

Weird world, with human omegas. Poor Evan.

[Samantha]

DNF. I need to stop trying this author.

[Milo Jane · Rating 5 out of 5]

When I started reading this the first time (yes, I've read it several times now), I almost didn't get very far--it's written in the present tense, and I haaate that. Luckily I kept going though and this is now a fave.

I'll tell ya now, there's a LOT of sex (really, really hot sex... just sayin'), so if that annoys you, you've been warned. This isn't PWP though; these characters are actually well thought out and consistently portrayed, and there is a very engaging storyline that kept me completely hooked.

What really gets me about this book is that all three characters surprised me. Evan wasn't simply "the sweet little omega who must be protected"; he was a very young and sheltered man trying to find his way in his new surroundings and struggling to be able to express himself against the constraints of his world.

Chad seemed like he was maybe going to be a "jock" type, but I loved how his feelings towards omegas -- and towards himself for his past behavior and opinions -- changed as a result of knowing Evan. And much like Evan, he struggled to figure out his role as his relationships were changing.

And then there's Peter. Oh, Peter. He's not a nice man, and he does bad things. And insofar as he might apologize for anything, it's really more along the lines of "I'm sorry you don't agree with me doing that." His unwillingness to consider that he might be wrong is a driving force in the story, and yet there's no doubt that he loves Chad and Evan in his way and I really enjoyed how it all played out.

[Lolly's Library · Rating 4 out of 5]

I think an important conversation was skipped over...

In reviewing this book, I'm really struggling between a 3- and 4-star rating. On the one hand, I love the interplay between Chad and Peter (especially having read the two prequels detailing how they got together), how they make room for Evan, and of course the man-on-man (and then on-man) action is just as scorching, heat-inducing, panty-melting... ahem, you get the idea, as a reader could desire. And the awakening of our two alphas to the rights of omegas is very uplifting, even if the road to such enlightenment is quite bumpy. (I mean, like, seriously, potholed-to-Hades-and-back bumpy.)

That said... *spoiler alert* Why the hell does Chad never bring up the fact that Peter locked Evan - an actual, thinking, reasoning human being - in his room for daring to disagree with him? And even called him a "stupid omega" just for that added touch of humiliation! Granted, Peter took a bit longer to alter his alpha perception of omegas as opposed to Chad, but that almost makes the omission of calling Peter out on his behavior even worse. And, yes, I know, there's that whole dynamic of Peter as uber-alpha and unwilling to be challenged, but Chad never has a problem letting his own alpha out as needed, either. It was a frustrating... oversight.

So that's why I'm wavering. As to the rest of the book? Bring on the sequel!