Review Copy – This book was sent to me by Tales and Teacups. All thoughts and opinions are my own.
oh boy, where on earth do i even start?
i really hated it. i didn’t want to – the premise sounded so good. but honestly it was just so dull and poorly written and frustrating that i kept going just to see how bad it could get.
i’ll start with the characters. neither elgin nor lucy have anything going for them outside of this game. they appear to have no lives, friends, family, or personalities – nothing. everything – even their romance (if you can call it that) revolves around this game. they are dull as ditchwater, almost indiscernible from each other. they go from barely dating to phone sex within a matter of pages. they have no chemistry. there is nothing interesting about them – as individuals or as a couple.
i can’t really speak to the gaming aspects – i’m not an expert, so i have no idea if anything is accurate or not. but the entire book revolved around this game called The Veil, and i read it through to the end, and i still don’t think i understand entirely what the plot of this game is. there’s a supposedly really emotional scene where we get all these big reveals about the game and all the characters are awed and tearful.
i felt nothing. i have no stakes in this game. i have no context for these reveals. i think perhaps it would’ve been better if the game had only just been released because the characters kept going on about the ‘lore’ but as readers who have been dropped in when an expansion pack is being released, it means nothing.
worldbuilding – more like what worldbuilding. most of the action takes place in the game. there were two settings outside the game – lucy’s apartment and elgin’s office. i have no idea as to what either of these places looked like. there’s barely any description, and most of that description is used on the game settings.
honestly, everything in this book is bizarre. the studio that elgin runs with his friends (are they even friends – he knows nothing about them?) was taken over by a bigger company even though they don’t like the bigger company or any of its decisions. and this tiny studio is getting a convention just for one game? and apparently it’s hugely popular?? and in the end the company decides not to go with the wildly popular expansion pack that they’ve spent all of their money making because it’s too popular and they think it won’t make enough money??? and they want to start over with something entirely different because it will make them money????
and you’re telling me that this game is insanely popular, but that these people running the studio have never considered sponsored content or using influencers before? and the only person who did, quit and told them over a post it note.
and we don’t even have any real context for this evil company because all we get are three random chapters where three people interact over a teams chat type thing.
like what even is happening??
look, if i’m having a good time reading a book, i’ll excuse anything. but i wasn’t having a good time, so i’m picking at everything.
there’s a scene where elgin gets to work and finds out that one of his employees has been working ‘around the clock’ on the expansion because it was decided they had unlimited overtime. i’m sorry, but your characters are incompetent and they run a poor ship – no wonder they got taken over by a bigger company, they clearly have no idea what they’re doing. i should think the studio’s employees were thrilled when elgin and crew all walked because finally they could have some semblance of a normal work-life balance.
the writing was shockingly poor and repetitive. a very similar sentence structure and style was used over and over again throughout the book. here are some examples so you can see what i mean:
1. “Back then, we weren’t just making a game. We were making magic.” – pg. 7
2. “But for the first time in weeks, I felt like a developer again.” – pg. 46
3. “And for the first time in weeks, I felt something I hadn’t in a while – hope.” – pg. 57
4. “And for the first time in a long time, I felt like I wasn’t just playing a game – I was part of something real.” – pg. 80
5. “This wasn’t just a game anymore. It was a world. A community. A family. And we were just getting started.” – pg. 95
6. “The stars shifted above us again, but for the first time, I didn’t mind.”
7. “And just like that, I felt a little closer to finding it. My sparkle.” – pg. 122
8. “And for the first time all day, I felt steady. Maybe, just maybe, we were going to be okay.” – pg. 129.
it does carry on throughout the book, but i feel like that’s enough to give you an idea. there was also frequent use of internet or gen-z slang throughout the book, which i think will age the book poorly and feels unprofessional. i personally was cringing constantly. here are some examples so you can see what i mean:
1. “Okay, boomer.” – pg. 14
2. “Are you having a menty b?” – pg. 30
3. “Namedrop” – pg. 41
i want to be clear, i’m not saying it was ai, or that the author used ai to generate the story / edit the writing. i’m not making accusations. but the repetitiveness of the writing did make me feel like it could’ve been written by ai, and i wouldn’t be surprised if it was.
i’m afraid this has turned into a bit of a rant review, but honestly i felt it needed to be said.