Reborn on Gryndor with the mythical trait [Divine Witness], Ajax swears to live a life of no regrets. This time, he will seize every opportunity, fight every monster, and plunder every treasure as he enjoys life to the fullest.
If only it were that easy. Humans are considered one of the weakest sentient races, confined to their patch of land but that hasn't changed their nature as they fight amongst themselves forced to split their sources of power instead of unite for the greater whole. In order to see the entire vast richness of the world, Ajax must battle for his life and respect, gaining levels and forcing the other races to acknowledge his and humanities worth.
Ajax’s Ascension to the top won’t be quick or easy.
It is very Marty Stu-ish and if you cannot deal with a protagonist who is just better by accident and/or plot design, then this story might not be for you.
It is not great literature, but it is a great fluff story to kill time with.
Also put out by a great Publisher who picked up indie authors and offers fair contracts, which for me is another reason to support this series.
(Spoilers) I dropped this book around the time the dragon mother decided the terms of her debt with the protagonist
The narrative establishes the protagonist has a unique ability. This ability stays with the protagonist after his reincarnation but is subsequently removed by the system. Which rendered such a plot device obsolete. This confused me. Since it followed him after his rebirth the ability is clearly connected to his soul. This suggests the system either permanently altered his soul or suppressed the ability. If its the latter option, then removing such a plot device would make a little more sense because the ability will likely reappear in the future. If its the former option then this is just bad writing. Why introduce it in the first place if its never going to be brought up ever again? Its a complete waste of time.
What makes a protagonist interesting? Simple, we are witnessing the journey of someone extraordinary. No one wants to read about the life of an ordinary farmer. But what if the farmer in question was a retired lich king? Now you have an interesting premise. Why am I bringing this up. Well, I like protagonists who min-max. If your going to engage with a magic system, its more fulfilling if the protagonist is striving to be at the very top. Anything less would be disappointing. Which brings me to a few complaints. Why introduce a plot point in the form of a growth opportunity. Then subsequently deny that opportunity to the protagonist? This was a very disappointing development. The protagonist permanently lost out on upgrading his temporary trait which required leveling 1 of his skills to 50 before his child prodigy trait expired. Which the protagonist fails to achieve because the author wrote the character into a corner. This is also assuming there are no other criteria the protagonist is unaware of that would upgrade the trait further. Does this sound like the story of some legendary adventurer ascending to godhood? Which I assume is the end goal given his removed trait and new permanent trait both have divine implications.
The narrative introduces a notable historical figure, the most powerful human to ever exist. This individual lived for over 10,000 years before passing away. Supposedly reaching the very limits of what is considered possible. I find it difficult to believe the protagonist would ever reach such heights especially since he is failing to reach those same growth milestones this other individual achieved. Which means this story is essentially about a very powerful adventurer who is secretly a reincarnator. But that premise feels lackluster when you take this historical figure into account. You essentially showed the reader what may possibly be the end of the path but denied the protagonist the means to reach that end. If you intend for the protagonist to surpass this historical figure, you need to leverage the protagonists unique advantages while also meeting those same growth milestones and even surpassing them in some areas. Making choices that this Grim character would have never considered. Like making a familiar contract with a baby dragon or unlocking the potential of chantless magic. Using extreme life threatening methods to raise ones base stats to their very limits without using points. If you can't do this, then this story is not worth the time investment.
This story fundamentally lacks a rising action. The rising action is the gradual rise in narrative tension that culminates into the stories climax. The story introduces an overall problem the protagonist needs to solve. This usually involves the protagonist facing off again a significant threat. But as far as I can tell, there is no foreshadowing of any kind. No Demon Lord, Lich King or Evil Gods working towards ending the world. In fact you did the opposite by establishing a covenant that prevented all the civilization destroying races from interfering with humanity. You also decreased humanities overall power scaling when comparing them to these monsters or this Grim figure.
You did introduce a vampire, but there wasn't enough buildup. People disappearing, a rising panic amongst the cities population. Maybe bodies begin appearing after a certain date post kidnapping, establishing a deadline. Then the sister gets kidnapped which raises the stakes and the protagonist is forced to find the vampire before that deadline. The interaction with the vampire felt very abrupt and it wasn't even a fight but more of a desperate struggle to survive which relied upon the actions of others. Essentially the protagonist was the one who needed saving. But at least there were permanent consequences via the death of a side character. It was more of a villain of the week type scenario. The author also purposefully introduced lore details that made high level vampires weaker than other monsters of the same level. I amused the author did this so the protagonist had a fighting chance at beating the thing in combat. But as you know, this didn't happen.
I acknowledge this review is flawed because I didn't finish the book. If I did I would likely amend some of my statements or write down more criticisms.
The story itself was good but I would’ve enjoyed it more without all the errors. In the beginning it was ok, but as the book progressed the author seemed to give up even trying to reduce errors. For example , sentence would start out in first person and switch to third person and go back to first person. Not to mention losing an entire section from his status later in the book and constantly switching the sex of the spirit beast. Maybe consider having the book edited and releasing it again to keep people from being turned off of the series.
A slow burn throughout that feels more like a slice-of-life book. Overall, it was really fun but with a jarring ending. I didn't care for it, but it wasn't bad enough to knock off too many points. Hopefully, the next one can have an actual ending rather than an abrupt cut-off. The mock war also was rather boring, wasn't really political or strategic. It felt tacked on.
Alright so this book is pretty unique. Never have I read a book that was simultaneously so compelling and grammatically nauseating. I've set books down in the past because of a spelling error in the first chapter, but this book is much worse.
Here's what I mean: The story, character development, and world building are high quality. I, personally, also like a humble MC who doesn't have everyone trying to convince him the sun shines out of his bum.
At the same time, in the early chapters the author vacillates between 1st person present tense and 1st person past tense. At first, I thought maybe this was being leveraged as some kind of artsy tool, but I was wrong. It's just random and jarring. Additionally, around the 65% mark, the author begins slipping into 3rd person past tense as well. Like, it'll randomly start referring to the MC by his name and calling him "he" in a sentence that also has the MC narrating what's happening and referring to himself as "I." The three tenses for the last third of the book are constantly in flux and always very jarring. This of course is accompanied by the standard spelling errors I've come to expect from the genre. That's no big deal, simply the price you pay for admission.
I say all that to say this: I finished the book, enjoyed it a lot, and look forward to the next one.
We also just need to make a coalition of volunteer editors.
Great story, some editing issues and on audible, the stat sheets are taking almost 2 minutes to talk through them all. Not a huge issue if they were used more sparingly.
This could be an a light and entertaining popcorn ready of yet another formulaic creamy littpg. However, the botched third person to the first person narration change likely made just before publication and a multitude of other spelling issues has turned the book into a jarring and unpleasant read.
Cringy dialog, interminable stats, errors, jarring and unnecessary changes in pov characters and the most robotic human narration I've came across to in a long while. (Ally Frey, ma'am, just why?)
I honestly can't stand the conceit of the main character harboring a dangerous secret but repeatedly outing himself for no reason at all. I'm also over other characters just blurting secret information whenever anyone asks. I know some people like that, but most people will just shut up or say none of your business. They certainly don't volunteer secrets and background info at the least prompt.
One other pet peeve is the moronic political system. It's just unnatural. It's either a feudal system, an enlightened autocracy, a power oligarchy, a cast system or a populist aristocracy .. It simply can't be all the above.
The one thing I learned from reading this is to never trust Goodreads ratings. This book is honestly just horrible. I can’t figure out if it was fully written by chatGPT, or if it was only mostly written by it. I’m very relaxed when it comes to grammar and issues of writing structure, but this has so many problems it is almost unreadable. It switches between first person, third person, and I think even a little bit of second person randomly, and none of it makes any sense. I can’t say anything about the plot, because there is no plot. Nothing in the story has any stakes or threat, so nothing really matters. It is a jumbled together mess that left me wondering what on earth I just read. There are way too many flaws in the story to list, and every one of them made me stop reading, and left me wondering how on earth this has the review it does on this site. I have no idea how this even got published, but I suppose that means there is hope for everyone else. On top of everything else the narration in the audio book is jarring and poorly done. The story is mostly read by one male reader, but every female line is read by a female narrator, but not the speech tags or anything else. When we randomly go into a female character’s first person point of view she reads it too, then we go back to the guy. This constant reader switching made it even more difficult to get into a book that was already poorly written.
This was actually quite an enjoyable read, although I do find it interesting how quickly Ajax quit thinking about his old life. His past life on Earth is more of a side note in this story than anything.
The story is written well enough, the world is vividly described as are its characters. But while they are vivid, they are not characters with a lot of depth. The book basically has kind of one level of storytelling. There are no great climaxes, there are no slow moments. It all just moves at one pace. But at least the pace is good.
The one downside is that there are a number of misspellings, missing words entirely, And places where you could see that the author was typing and their fingers were not on the home row. So the keys were all shifted one row to the right.
Basically it just needs a couple good reads by editors and it should be perfect. Even with all of this said, I am looking forward to the sequel whenever it arrives.
The synopsis makes it sound like he’s entering some epic conflict. Maybe he’ll do that in the second book. In this book he pootles about gaining skills and that’s about it. He’s never in any jeopardy, because everything works out every single time, so it feels like you’re going through the motions by the end. A fair number of typos and mis-spellings. The most glaring problem is the perspective switches between first- and third-person almost at random, in a way that’s obviously a mistake. Like they’ll say “I took his armour out of his backpack,” when it’s obviously his own stuff he means and it should be ‘my’. Actually gets worse as the book goes on. My guess is it was written in third, they did a find and replace to make the whole book first, got partway through manually checking the replace and gave up. I can’t help feeling I’d have liked it a lot more without the frustrating grammar problems spoiling suspension of disbelief. You can never really get absorbed when you’re constantly thinking, “hold on, do they mean he or me?”
Ok, for grammar and pronoun fanatics, beware. While I think this might be a translated, or English as not a first language, it is still an enjoyable read. Just a global replacement of himself to myself and his to my would help those suffering from above mentioned fanaticism. I have always wondered why people judge stories on arbitrary rules and typos instead of imaginative and entertaining value. The death to baby rebirth is not unique, but not overdone. The world, civilization and growth are complex and interesting. I like the hero and his family and friends. I want more! Thank you Keleros for sharing! I can't help myself in adding that I only speak one language and always give my respect to those who achieve more.
The book was entertaining, but definitely needs another editing pass or two. The story is presented in the first person present tense, but starting with the first chapter doesn’t seem to stick to it. The narrative constantly shifts from present to past tense even in the same sentence though this settles somewhat as the book goes on, and later in the book even shifts from first to third person in the same sentence. This at times leads to some confusion about who or what is actually being mentioned.
Good story line but really needs a proofreader. Lots of places where there were missing words as well as wrong tenses of words. Threw me for a loop at first until I figured out what was happening.
This book wasn't good. Its comfy, more slice of life than anything else.
My main issue with this story, isn't really plot itself. Ajax, reborn without his special gift; which is totally weird, starts a life of family, slice of life, and adventure. Great we follow ajax as he learns about the world, and the world building is great.... But then we have this alternative point of views, that show absolutely nothing other than how 'amazing Ajax is'. This is great once or twice, especially after some really huge build up. However, it's just done every chapter or so. It's like listening to a parent praise their kid over, and over, and over. Like great I get it your kid is amazing.
The war that Ajax gets conscripted for, is fake. It's all a fake setting and has absolutely no meaningful... anything. Authors should avoid "fake scenes" it really just detracts from anyone caring about it at all. Why should the main character or anyone actually care about the war? They absolutely shouldn't unless you're in it for resource gain. People don't die, it's just straight boring.
The world building is interesting, the system is also an interesting and mysterious thing. That's the only real hook this book has.
An enjoyable read, enough for me to start the second straight away................but...........the constant switching between first and third person naration, even multiple times within the same sentence was intensely annoying. Multiple spelling mistakes and wrong words as well as the switching of the gender of the cat from female to male and back again constantly also detracted from the experience.
One final point, and all LitRPG books should include this not just this series. When doing a stat table, make sure to include the increases to the MC's stats within the table to show their growth (ie, Strength 45 -> 47), this stops the reader having to go back umpteen chapters to the last stat block to compare how much has changed, and while the author did include some of this half way through the book, it could have been more condensed for clarity (and should have been from the begining as the MC showed that the system screen could be modified), this would also have made the stat blocks shorter and more reader friendly.
Overall very enjoyable but could use even a basic read through by a proof reader or reviewer to improve it immeasurably.
At moments it felt like in a movie, where a character's identity is hidden by a mask or other means and it makes sense in-world; then, the audience is shown the "secret identity" and the mysterious character suddenly stops hiding their identity (even though it would still make sense in-world for them to continue to do so). That's what secrets in this world felt like, only there for the purposes of the reader and not really important in the world past their immediate use to move the story in a given direction.
There's also story elements where it felt that, rather than event A led to B, led to C, led to D, the author started with event D and worked their way backwards to get that to happen.
Usually, all this is a quick nope for me, but I actually enjoyed the book anyway. Weird.
Anyway, I'll be reading the next book and hope it continues to be entertaining.
I really hope the author etc never take up any occupations wherein errors are more than harmful to themselves.
The audio narration is also suboptimal. Both the male and female VA's have some bad tendencies. Male voice: Pronunciation. - shapters Female voice: Stilted flow of voices. - Ro bo tic f'low of...
- The MC.. Well he is rather shallow.. personality wise. Also the author has him doing excessively irrational/stupid things for plot point additions. Things that invalidate his background, which are followed by very lame/limp excuses for why. Usually summed up with 'Damn what an idiot I am!' -mc mental thought.
I do not know if in a future book we will see any hint of the mc's retention of his prior life memories. A life in which he was a just graduating Engineer of some kind if memory serves.. Thing being that there was nothing of the kind in this book save for a few "accidental" uses of English.🙄
A good idea, poorly executed - get it edited and it'd be great!
This is a nice spin on the usual reincarnation with a system story, with solid worldbuilding and a nicely deep system that has some new twists, such as Punishments to balance out Achievements.
Unfortunately, the author has either used some type of software to "assist" in writing this, and then tried to make changes to keep it in their own voice; or else they are the most pronoun-blind idiot I've ever read. Seriously "I resigned himself"?!? Who writes like that?
Get it edited by a person who understands that once you assign a gender to an animal, said animal can no longer be an 'it' - especially in the same bloody sentence - and you might have a good novel here.
The book seemed to start out kind of fun and homey. Later I thought it would speed up and be more action and less munitia. It never quite got there until the very last part. So, I am not sure it is worth reading. I guess if you like character conversation with family and friends this is a book that does an average job at it and you will be held to read and maybe pleased. but if you were in it for some sword VS bad guy action you will be rather miffed you read the whole of it and found it was rather dearth of death and victorious violent struggle. I give it 2 stars but then I would have to admit I read sub par pulp fiction. In my defense I did start speed/skim reading...
Okay but extremely generic isekai story with a lot of spelling errors
This book is retty much just that formulaic isekai series that airs every single anime season - MC gets reborn into a world with stats, - Gets an overpowered "trait" from the start that makes everything easier - Everyone is impressed every time he breathes - No stakes or hardship at any point - Every character is extremely 1 dimensional
There's also a lot of POV chapters that awkwardly swap the story from third person to first person and just feel painful to read.
It's fine as popcorn literature, but I expected more
Love the concept and the story is unique and engaging. Quite different from other books I've read so far. I can't in all honesty give it 5 stars though ..the spelling and grammar errors all throughout the book were so distracting. It wasn't just one or two, they were right the way through the book. Swapping from first person to third person in a single sentence was disconcerting as well. You can tell the author had decided to change perspective in the story at some point and hadn't corrected everything to reflect that. Apart from that, I enjoyed it and look forward to reading the next one.
Overall it is a good series. Worth the read with five stars for first two books. The character development could use more definition and the author gets lost in the details sometimes. What will bother most are the frequent errors. Not sure if some are translation issues or the author switched from third to first person but clearly the author has never read their own work. The misspelling of character names is quite telling. Also the mc’s supposed life on Earth is not well integrated into the story.
After having consumed a wide variety of Reincarnation/system apocalypse books, I can say this is one of the best. The slight variations to how the system handles Skills, achievements, punishments and stats is well done. The numbers don't start getting absurd after what is considered immense power-ups. Scaling in these types of books tend to be an issue, but not here! The only complaint I have is that it isn't longer! More seriously, this book needs to have been proofread, the amount of typos is shocking for a published work.
this book really needs an editor (or one that knows what they are doing). There are a lot of inconsistencies, like characters changing genders, the switch between 1st and 3rd person, word flow/clarity and developmental edits so the arc of the story makes sense. At first the switch between 1st and 3rd was mostly confined to Ajex versus everyone else, but that slipped by the end of the book. The world building in ths story is interesting but needs a bit more something to make it pop. Overall, interesting book but there are better out there to read.
Thoroughly mediocre. Far from the top of litrpg series, it's technically fine, if this came out 8 years ago, it'd be a solid 4. My biggest gripe with it is the constant and jarring pov swaps, even the writing tense changes in places from third to first...Chemistry is non existent, the characters are tropy and few feel distinct. There are relationships between characters, but only insight into these is the author hitting us on the head with a 'they went into the bushes' hard cut...continue like nothing happened, very unsubtle.
Pretty good storyline. About halfway through the book though, author keeps changing grammar around to write from other peoples perspectives, and forgets to have the correct grammar. If it was only just a few times, I wouldn’t have thought much of it. Had to put it as a four star due to the excessive mistakes cause it confused the heck out of me on which character point of view it was in the book.
A decent read, but the didn’t enjoy the first person POV. And the book definitely needs another run through by an editor. But the MC was decent, not super OP(definitely still powerful but not world altering yet). And the world and story have lots of room to expand so the future might be better. If you need something to read this won’t make you regret it while you wait on your favorite series to drop a new book.