I was given this book in return for an honest review.
Audio Edition: 1 Star.
When the narrator started doing the voices of the other characters, I turned it off. (Namely, the little girl in the prologue.) I didn't finish listening to the first two chapters. That turned me off completely. I'm not a big fan of audiobooks (I'm hard of hearing) but NO PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF HUMANITY DO NOT DO CHARACTER VOICES. YOU ARE NOT MEL BLANC!
Book Edition: 2 Stars.
I don't rate cover art, as I'm colourblind and can't really tell. I start with blurb and first chapter, then go from there.
The blurb sucked me in, and the beginning pages, but then going through the book was a case of WTH, I felt like I was duped with a bait and switch. I slogged through this book. It was hard for me.
The preface was cool, setting up the story. I was expecting a dystopian futuristic techno-thriller.
But then I got to the prologue. It was a strange change of pace, with clunky dialogue and narration, as if the author had a hard time writing third limited. I figured, okay, maybe this story will be about the father and his adventure about throwing the government.
Then I got to chapter one. Okay, I'm assuming we're in the father's head. But then, "Good morning, RACHEL."
WTF WHO IS RACHEL AND WHY AM I GETTING HER STORY? So I figured, this must be the little girl in the story then I started thinking WHY AM I READING ABOUT HER? DAFUQ?
So I kept going, hoping something might improve.
Despite the detailed cool tech and stiff action scenes, it doesn't.
I don't need to know every little instance of her day, her breakfast or her going to the academy, or every damn thought in this dude's head (my bad, *girl*, she doesn't sound like a girl at all.) It seems like the author hadn't studied females and they seem so weird and distant.
The drunk dude scene seemed wooden and unrealistic. Rachel just stands there like a deer in headlights and lets this drunk punk fondle her boob. She doesn't freak out, she just stands there. Her friend Brianna rescues her by giving the dude a swift groin stomp. Major eye roll, slow clap. I keep reading.
When I get to Blue Hawk's section, I'm jarred. I had no idea there was a change (aside from another Chapter 1, evident in the TOC, but still) and this suffers from major author voice problems. I can't tell the difference between the two. They have no unique features.
AV bleeds through the characters. I don't want to hear the author's thoughts and feelings. I want Rachel's and Blue Hawk's! Sadly, I don't get it, and I feel like I'm in the author's head with his weird dream of this perfectly imperfect universe and his musings about his place in it. This starts to feel Gary Stu-ish.
I continued on with the story, from Rachel's training to be a cop, and David's (later find he's code-named Blue Hawk) missions to disrupt the government takeover. I didn't care about the life of Rachel, or the sections of Blue Hawk when it jarringly showed up. I also hated David, because he's so mysterious and perfect in every way, so rich, so badass and cool (he wears black leather and drives a motorcycle, squee!), so handsome and all the girls wanna jump his bones and I realized OMFG THIS IS THE GARY STU I'VE DREADED. (same first name as author, same letter as last name! DAFUQ!!) Of course, Rachel falls for this dude HARD, which comes out of nowhere. I thought the girl was gay or something.
I started glazing over after this point. I hated the romance between Rachel and David. It felt forced and I felt like this was a wangsty wet dream of the author's perfect girl. There was no instance that they truly liked each other, or that there was any time for them to know each other (between fighting nasties and trying not to die). Rachel just swoons for the dude. By David's reactions, he's enjoying the attention, but I don't believe for one bit he actually likes this chick. Ugh…
This book was difficult for me to finish. It started with a slow pace after awesome world building, but doesn't pick up the pace until near the end, and leaves on a cliffhanger at that! It's like the author read The Hunger Games and Divergent and felt he could do one better. I hated the characters. They tended to overact, overreact, or were stereotypical at best and trope-filled at worst. The supporting cast were just slumming for parts, there to advance the story, and they all sounded the same. Wooden, cardboard cutouts with names and assigned a role they play badly in. Also, though Brianna and Brian were interesting supporting castmates, they were too similar, (one the friend of Rachel and the other David). I wanted to know more about them.
I don't remember getting to the end of the book, or what happened to the characters after the second (or third?) cut in of Blue Hawk/David's POV. All I recall at the end that David has to kill some bitch that whacked his mom. Once I got to the end, my loathing of the characters and the universe made it such I don't want to know more about them. Yet, the universe with so much potential (Evil government! Honorable Rebels! Freaky Science!) somehow suffered poor execution when told from first person of the main characters. If this story were written in third omniscient, it would've covered a lot more ground, instead of being stuck with the extremely limited viewpoints of David and Rachel.
Technical Stuff:
To the editor who edited this book, please fix this! If this is the mobile edition, then I won't hate it too hard, as not even TP can get their mobile book editions formatted correctly. But if this is in print, I'm cringing, because after seeing the title/copyright page, the way it's formatted makes it scream 'self published'. The editing could be more polished - there were large blocks of text that made it difficult to read that could've been broken into smaller paragraphs. There were quite a bit of grammar issues, and the occasional odd sentence placement.
Final Thoughts:
I don't know if I'm just out of the target audience to enjoy this book (is this YA?). But your mileage may vary from mine.