I really wanted to love this. I picked it up after I saw the advert online, read the blurb, had a small chat with the author. He seemed like a cool guy.
And the set up for the premise was good. The first 40% I knew what we were working with. Secret pining for best friend to come good in the final act, old friendships altering as the action continues, new friend making an impact in the MC (Lucas)'s life, the mother's book having an impact in all relationships.
And then the first date with Lucas and Grayson happened, and it went all over the place. Firstly, I do get bored of this penchant other UK YA contemporary authors have for the slapstick. Things can go wrong without the MC being a total clutz. Holly Smale is perhaps the only author I can see do that and get away with it because Harriet was just a ball of chaos. But Holly Bourne is a much better example of a YA author who can write twists without it being so ... look, Lucas and Grayson could have had a terrible date. It didn't need the stoic father who avoids love to suddenly ask all the other employees to pander to his son. It didn't need the candles being knocked over, sprinklers going off. It would have been perfectly fine with them being awkward, not knowing what to talk about, Lucas continually going to the bathroom and phone call faux pas. Then the next day "oh, maybe it was too stuffy, maybe we do something more our speed, what about Lamberti's next time?"
After that, the characterisation was awful. Was the dad absent, or angry? Some of the arguments were so small and in lowercase so it completely swept me by, others had Lucas swearing and coming across as a total brat. At the end, our MC was so unlikeable, I didn't root for him to get the guy at all. Soph was inconsistent, Vicky was far too forgiving (and also went off the book? She struck me as the type to realise Max loved Lucas and would have helped Max use the tips to get Lucas instead of just saying "actually, let's ignore your mum's advice now after I made you take it"), Jasmine had no redeeming qualities, what was the point of Krish? As for Grayson ... how is the guy who saved Lucas before the novel and friends with his friends suddenly a terrible guy who uses his friends? A much better conclusion would have been Grayson saying Lucas and the book left him confused, and Dylan had never made him feel that way, and wait ... Dylan? Then Grayson and Dylan got a HEA, and Lucas and Max could have confessed their feelings, and been open to moving forward together.
I also, as soon as I heard the premise of the movie they watched (twice, in the cinema) and the conclusion of Lucas' mother's novel, I knew how the book would end. There was no conclusion, no HEA, but the hint was that Lucas would pick Max. It didn't feel good, especially as Lucas declined into fully unlikeable. It was also clear Max liked Lucas, that it was causing issues with Soph, and would have made more sense if they broke up when Soph was off school, instead of leaving me going "when was Christmas in this novel?" which is when they allegedly broke up. It just felt like it needed more working to make it a smooth and satisfying read. The bones are good, the execution ...
I also thought the mum's advice in her self-help book was terrible. Awful. Didn't seem long enough for a book, but I'm not the self-help type, so I could be wildly wrong. But even when I was growing up, at the time her book was set, it was terrible advice, cliched, straight from the movies. Glad that was acknowledged in the end, but if Vicky had read it so much and loved it, why was she either saying that, or pushing it on Lucas to begin with?
I also said in my updates as I was reading, there were strange inconsistencies with the writing group. The group comment on Lucas' first work, then the teacher says something, then she opens it to the group to feedback on. Um, why? Why the second time? There was a strange focus on how much Soph and Max missed school. They didn't turn up for half of the three or four weeks that the timeline covered, which I'm sure would carry some punishment when Lucas worries he'll be suspended for missing a half day (also inconsistency there, his dad finds him near midday on that day, they have a big emotional chat, he takes him to school ... and it's almost lunchtime. That's really bad planning) it just seems like it needed more time before this book got released.
I wish I could have liked it more. George seems like a nice guy when you talk to him. The premise is interesting, the characters start off strong and well rounded. But boy do I wish Hanna the editor took this book more in hand. The inconsistencies in the plot, in the characterisation, the lack of punctuation on one page ... no book is perfect, but this one doesn't get to shine the way it deserves.