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The Traitor's Daughter
Sometimes even the best-laid plans can be broken with a single meeting.
Grace Hawkins was a werewolf, a special werewolf, the daughter of an Alpha and Beta. Unfortunately, she lost her both of her parents in an attack on the pack and if that was not enough, the pack blamed her father for the attack. From the age of 14, either the pack ignored her existence, or as for those of her own age, she became the local walking insult. Grace learned to deal with the bullying and insults, even the rejection of her mate she takes in stride because the death of her parents left her without anyone. As the years past, Grace learns more about who her parents really were, so she makes a plan. On her 21st birthday, she will say goodbye to the pack that made her life miserable after her parents’ death. Everything changes though when a new pack arrives seeking some aid and Grace’s world turns completely around. In this pack, she will meet a man who is her mate, a mate she was not suspecting and at the same time, strange things began to happen. She starts getting late night calls that go from harassing to threatening, and if that is not enough, her once ‘best friend’ learns that the man she thought was her mate for the last six years is not, and even more, the man who marked her was the one who rejected Grace. What is Grace to do when all of this comes out into the open? What about the new man that her wolf claims as her mate? Things become even more complicated when she learns that he had another mate before and a woman who believes that he is just right for her. Well, Grace knows one thing; her life will never be the same even for the ‘traitor’s daughter’.
(Some sexual content so please be advised.)
Grace Hawkins was a werewolf, a special werewolf, the daughter of an Alpha and Beta. Unfortunately, she lost her both of her parents in an attack on the pack and if that was not enough, the pack blamed her father for the attack. From the age of 14, either the pack ignored her existence, or as for those of her own age, she became the local walking insult. Grace learned to deal with the bullying and insults, even the rejection of her mate she takes in stride because the death of her parents left her without anyone. As the years past, Grace learns more about who her parents really were, so she makes a plan. On her 21st birthday, she will say goodbye to the pack that made her life miserable after her parents’ death. Everything changes though when a new pack arrives seeking some aid and Grace’s world turns completely around. In this pack, she will meet a man who is her mate, a mate she was not suspecting and at the same time, strange things began to happen. She starts getting late night calls that go from harassing to threatening, and if that is not enough, her once ‘best friend’ learns that the man she thought was her mate for the last six years is not, and even more, the man who marked her was the one who rejected Grace. What is Grace to do when all of this comes out into the open? What about the new man that her wolf claims as her mate? Things become even more complicated when she learns that he had another mate before and a woman who believes that he is just right for her. Well, Grace knows one thing; her life will never be the same even for the ‘traitor’s daughter’.
(Some sexual content so please be advised.)
240 pages, Kindle Edition
First published February 11, 2013
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September 22, 2013
I totally agree with the bad editing.
The strong heroine carried the whole book for me. I see her, I feel her emotions, and I understand her actions. She is as alive a character for me and I was rooting for her victory from page one. What a great character. It make sense that the rest of the character are as alive for me and that they are an interesting group of people to watch.
Unfortunately, the hero and the plotting of the book just ruined the reading experience for me.
To add my 2 cents...when a character is supposed to be a beta (second most strongest of the group) and you keep watching him being mauled by a weak female of the group's hierarchy - REPEATEDLY - and just standing there and doing nothing - JUST TO MOVE THE PLOT - is a total bull for me. Add that to the whole cast of character picking apart the mauler's actions and psychology and lecturing the readers in order to convince said reader of the writer's mind/reasoning just screams manipulation for me.
Weak hero ruined the chemistry with the strong heroine - for me.
The strong heroine carried the whole book for me. I see her, I feel her emotions, and I understand her actions. She is as alive a character for me and I was rooting for her victory from page one. What a great character. It make sense that the rest of the character are as alive for me and that they are an interesting group of people to watch.
Unfortunately, the hero and the plotting of the book just ruined the reading experience for me.
To add my 2 cents...when a character is supposed to be a beta (second most strongest of the group) and you keep watching him being mauled by a weak female of the group's hierarchy - REPEATEDLY - and just standing there and doing nothing - JUST TO MOVE THE PLOT - is a total bull for me. Add that to the whole cast of character picking apart the mauler's actions and psychology and lecturing the readers in order to convince said reader of the writer's mind/reasoning just screams manipulation for me.
Weak hero ruined the chemistry with the strong heroine - for me.
February 5, 2020
I found this free on KU; it didn't have awesome reviews (people who actually take the time to provide feedback, but I figured it was free so there wasn't much to lose.
Let's get the easy stuff out of the way first...
Grammar Yes, as the reviews state, there are ALOT of grammar/typo/wrong words used numerous times throughout the book. I am typically not super sensitive to this if I know going in.... my brain typical fills in the correct words, but even I got tripped up a few times. Specifically when the author used the incorrect pronoun so you're tripped when Grace is referred to as his or him.
Characters The book has a ton of them, and the story jumps around telling you bits of details or conversations of each. The character's individual stories trip all over each other and gets confusing. Like the book summary says, Amy's True mate is different from the mate who marked her who happens to be who rejected Grace (??) It's like a bad soap opera...
Grace Hawkins-h, is the traitors daughter
Artur Johnson- H, visiting beta and Grace's mate
Ted Jacobs-friend of Grace's parents and father figure to her
Bryan Shivers-beta's son, Grace's second mate...mated to Amy
Amy Waters-Grace's former BFF
Steve Davidson-visiting pack Alpha
Shane Silvers-beta (Bryan's dad)
Ashley & Kale
Susan & Ace
Confused?? yeah me to, throw in a couple of OW, Artur's old mate plus a sprinkle of additional characters and it's a bit of shit stew.
Plot The book teaser is all over the place, and a bit of a mess. It rambles on, and teases several random things. It's confusing and feels like the author didn't plan it out (or make a rough draft) to organize her thoughts. That's pretty much how the plot goes, the bones of the story are good, but there is little character development (like couples just magically have relationships after ignoring each other) and it's super unorganized. Which makes is really long because we are given info we don't need, not given backstory or development that we do need. Overall, is a bit juvenile, the argument over the pizza for instance, or the entire Sara/Artur situation was ridiculous, the over explanation of the baby bath...not to mention Grace's "violet Eyes" are mentioned 90 times...yes I counted:)
Spoilers ahead... Now my rants because I did just muscle through hours of frustration....
Let's get the easy stuff out of the way first...
Grammar Yes, as the reviews state, there are ALOT of grammar/typo/wrong words used numerous times throughout the book. I am typically not super sensitive to this if I know going in.... my brain typical fills in the correct words, but even I got tripped up a few times. Specifically when the author used the incorrect pronoun so you're tripped when Grace is referred to as his or him.
Characters The book has a ton of them, and the story jumps around telling you bits of details or conversations of each. The character's individual stories trip all over each other and gets confusing. Like the book summary says, Amy's True mate is different from the mate who marked her who happens to be who rejected Grace (??) It's like a bad soap opera...
Grace Hawkins-h, is the traitors daughter
Artur Johnson- H, visiting beta and Grace's mate
Ted Jacobs-friend of Grace's parents and father figure to her
Bryan Shivers-beta's son, Grace's second mate...mated to Amy
Amy Waters-Grace's former BFF
Steve Davidson-visiting pack Alpha
Shane Silvers-beta (Bryan's dad)
Ashley & Kale
Susan & Ace
Confused?? yeah me to, throw in a couple of OW, Artur's old mate plus a sprinkle of additional characters and it's a bit of shit stew.
Plot The book teaser is all over the place, and a bit of a mess. It rambles on, and teases several random things. It's confusing and feels like the author didn't plan it out (or make a rough draft) to organize her thoughts. That's pretty much how the plot goes, the bones of the story are good, but there is little character development (like couples just magically have relationships after ignoring each other) and it's super unorganized. Which makes is really long because we are given info we don't need, not given backstory or development that we do need. Overall, is a bit juvenile, the argument over the pizza for instance, or the entire Sara/Artur situation was ridiculous, the over explanation of the baby bath...not to mention Grace's "violet Eyes" are mentioned 90 times...yes I counted:)
Spoilers ahead... Now my rants because I did just muscle through hours of frustration....
July 5, 2019
This books is awful. First of all, it is filled with grammatical mistakes and wrong word choices. Also, there are no contractions so everyone sounds like a robot talking. Also, the author has moments where it sounds like an odd formal medieval play that I was reading. Now....the plot. The entire book, this "hero" Artur just lets another woman kiss him. Like.....repetitively....even when the heroine is standing right there and basically he says he didnt encourage her......nonstop. The entire plot is very odd for lack of a better term.
February 25, 2013
I really enjoyed this book and the one before it (Marked in a Vision). Good characters and good plot. However, I believe both books would benefit from a Beta reader or an editor, just someone to look over each as there were missing words, extra words, and the wrong placement of words. Sometimes "are" was used for "our" and things like that and it did detract from the book when extra words were there or some were missing, as you had to pause and try to realize the correct placement.
May 22, 2022
First off this needs a grammar check.
The storyline was good but tbh there were too many POV I got confused alot reading it not sure who was talking to who. I think it would of been alot better with just Grace and Arturs POV.
The story just didn't flow right as it kept jumping from person to person. Made me re read some places twice to check I understood what was happening
The storyline was good but tbh there were too many POV I got confused alot reading it not sure who was talking to who. I think it would of been alot better with just Grace and Arturs POV.
The story just didn't flow right as it kept jumping from person to person. Made me re read some places twice to check I understood what was happening
August 17, 2019
I could not finish this book. The grammar and spelling mistakes were just too much to overlook. It amazes me how some books are published nowadays. Please hire a proofreader. I won't read anything else by this author.
November 10, 2025
Boring,needs a lot of editing, all over the places, a lot of characters, no plot whatsoever, some things doesn'take sense. I really tried. Dnf at 25%
September 25, 2020
Grace & Artur..
And no, I didn’t spell the guy’s name wrong. ;)
It threw me off the whole book, as I wanted to call him Arthur.
Anyway- I liked the story. Somehow, it felt different then the usual were/shifter stories. So kudos to the author. I loved Artur’s pack and the good people in Grace’s life. I enjoyed the issues that caused tense moments and problems for everyone. I also loved that Steve and Artur found their mates from Grace’s pack.
Thank heavens Grace was not a doormat! She was a kick butt chick who wasn’t full of herself, nor over the top sassy with a stupid “I’m woman, hear me roar” personality, nor an over the top attitude. I thought she had a great balance and an assurance of who she is. She was perfect.
What bothered me were:
1. I didn’t get a few things ... like when Trace looks at Grace and is talking about a mate from the council. He gets a sad look to him. Nor when Grace receives a call because Trace is hurt ... like what can she do to help!? And it wasn’t clear as to why he got hurt - but you can pretty much guess the reason, since it’s a problem theme all book.
2. Sara is a chick who wants Artur. She’s all over him in front of Grace and his pack. But he’s too “nice” to say or do anything. Grace sometimes lets it go - holding herself back except once. But Sara also manages quite a few passionate lip lock kisses with him when he’s not expecting it or really completely with it. Grace finds out and once said he better never let it happen again- to which of course it did. So why didn’t Grace rip to pieces sooner? Why didn’t Artur do something or make it to where she would back off!? He waited too long before he has words with her. It was dumb and ridiculous and made me mad. Why didn’t anyone do more, say more, throw her out sooner??? This part let me down about the whole alpha and mate type of wolves to help make this not happen more than once.
3. When Artur is being sweet and reassuring his feelings to Grace about her. He says she isn’t beautiful. It didn’t sit right the way it was said ... and made me think I missed something, like maybe she didn’t think she was... but then why did he say that at all?
4. Artur didn’t really love his first mate like he thought. And she was awful, sleeping around with other pack members- which he knew and was part of their deal to mark her. So why does he keep a photograph of her in his drawer in his house with Grace and his child!? And why does he look at it and think she’s beautiful and how he still has feelings for her - even those from when he lusted after her ... because basically they were mostly just into the intimacy part of their relationship, like a lot! And then go upstairs and get it on with Grace. It bothered me a whole darn lot!
5. Editing issues- like names (Lindsay instead of Lana...), typos, punctuation placement or missing... and so on.
And no, I didn’t spell the guy’s name wrong. ;)
It threw me off the whole book, as I wanted to call him Arthur.
Anyway- I liked the story. Somehow, it felt different then the usual were/shifter stories. So kudos to the author. I loved Artur’s pack and the good people in Grace’s life. I enjoyed the issues that caused tense moments and problems for everyone. I also loved that Steve and Artur found their mates from Grace’s pack.
Thank heavens Grace was not a doormat! She was a kick butt chick who wasn’t full of herself, nor over the top sassy with a stupid “I’m woman, hear me roar” personality, nor an over the top attitude. I thought she had a great balance and an assurance of who she is. She was perfect.
What bothered me were:
1. I didn’t get a few things ... like when Trace looks at Grace and is talking about a mate from the council. He gets a sad look to him. Nor when Grace receives a call because Trace is hurt ... like what can she do to help!? And it wasn’t clear as to why he got hurt - but you can pretty much guess the reason, since it’s a problem theme all book.
2. Sara is a chick who wants Artur. She’s all over him in front of Grace and his pack. But he’s too “nice” to say or do anything. Grace sometimes lets it go - holding herself back except once. But Sara also manages quite a few passionate lip lock kisses with him when he’s not expecting it or really completely with it. Grace finds out and once said he better never let it happen again- to which of course it did. So why didn’t Grace rip to pieces sooner? Why didn’t Artur do something or make it to where she would back off!? He waited too long before he has words with her. It was dumb and ridiculous and made me mad. Why didn’t anyone do more, say more, throw her out sooner??? This part let me down about the whole alpha and mate type of wolves to help make this not happen more than once.
3. When Artur is being sweet and reassuring his feelings to Grace about her. He says she isn’t beautiful. It didn’t sit right the way it was said ... and made me think I missed something, like maybe she didn’t think she was... but then why did he say that at all?
4. Artur didn’t really love his first mate like he thought. And she was awful, sleeping around with other pack members- which he knew and was part of their deal to mark her. So why does he keep a photograph of her in his drawer in his house with Grace and his child!? And why does he look at it and think she’s beautiful and how he still has feelings for her - even those from when he lusted after her ... because basically they were mostly just into the intimacy part of their relationship, like a lot! And then go upstairs and get it on with Grace. It bothered me a whole darn lot!
5. Editing issues- like names (Lindsay instead of Lana...), typos, punctuation placement or missing... and so on.
May 23, 2024
Traitor’s Daughter…
Once past the truly terrible errors, the story is actually very good! Our h is the daughter of two lovely people, with her father being an alpha. However, they’ve been killed by rogues several years ago, so she has been living on her own, ostracized by the pack. Members of that pack have decided that her parents caused the attack of the rogues, so have treated her poorly.
Then this other pack that was also attacked by rogues show up looking for a temporary home. And the fun really starts!
I liked this story a lot but it desperately needs editing. I’m currently working through this author’s backlog, so hopefully her writing improves.
KU read, not too bad.
Once past the truly terrible errors, the story is actually very good! Our h is the daughter of two lovely people, with her father being an alpha. However, they’ve been killed by rogues several years ago, so she has been living on her own, ostracized by the pack. Members of that pack have decided that her parents caused the attack of the rogues, so have treated her poorly.
Then this other pack that was also attacked by rogues show up looking for a temporary home. And the fun really starts!
I liked this story a lot but it desperately needs editing. I’m currently working through this author’s backlog, so hopefully her writing improves.
KU read, not too bad.
March 17, 2025
everyone got an HEA or their comeuppance
I usually don’t like third person narrative. This story could’ve used more editing in parts but honestly, I really enjoyed this story.
Read in one sitting, and it sucked me in immediately. Everyone’s POV is observed and if you’re not paying attention, you could easily get lost. Pretty sure Alpha Tomas is the only one whose POV we never got.
Love Uncle Ted and Uncle Sean! So glad that everyone got an HEA or their comeuppance. It really was a fun story.
Adding-
I will say if you’re gonna make a big deal about the FMC’s superior hearing and make it some sort of supernatural gift… THEN SOME SUBPAR WOLVES SHOULDNT BE GETTING THE DROP ON HER TWICE!!!
I usually don’t like third person narrative. This story could’ve used more editing in parts but honestly, I really enjoyed this story.
Read in one sitting, and it sucked me in immediately. Everyone’s POV is observed and if you’re not paying attention, you could easily get lost. Pretty sure Alpha Tomas is the only one whose POV we never got.
Love Uncle Ted and Uncle Sean! So glad that everyone got an HEA or their comeuppance. It really was a fun story.
Adding-
I will say if you’re gonna make a big deal about the FMC’s superior hearing and make it some sort of supernatural gift… THEN SOME SUBPAR WOLVES SHOULDNT BE GETTING THE DROP ON HER TWICE!!!
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
February 4, 2021
Disappointed
I loved the beginning of the story and I got 45% into the book and was completely frustrated with how easy Grace gives in to misunderstandings. I still read the rest and I liked the characters but Arturs past and his situation with females just is soooo weak of a man. So I didn't like pairing and I gave up on the book after she found out Artur kissed some girl on accident. So it would of been good if Grace didn't give in and stood up for herself more. But all in all it was ok.
I loved the beginning of the story and I got 45% into the book and was completely frustrated with how easy Grace gives in to misunderstandings. I still read the rest and I liked the characters but Arturs past and his situation with females just is soooo weak of a man. So I didn't like pairing and I gave up on the book after she found out Artur kissed some girl on accident. So it would of been good if Grace didn't give in and stood up for herself more. But all in all it was ok.
June 14, 2021
Good story concept…grammatical errors and all over the place
I actually decided to read another book from this author!! Why!?! This story was like her other book…good concept but the story jumps from character to character with no real, clear transition. There were moments in the story where I was completely lost and wondered when the author was going to fully explain the main character’s gifts. I don’t know if I will read another book from this author but the story overall was good.
I actually decided to read another book from this author!! Why!?! This story was like her other book…good concept but the story jumps from character to character with no real, clear transition. There were moments in the story where I was completely lost and wondered when the author was going to fully explain the main character’s gifts. I don’t know if I will read another book from this author but the story overall was good.
March 10, 2018
Good read but needs edited
Good read but needs edited. I really enjoy this story and have actually read it a couple times. Quite a few missing words or grammatical errors but I would recommend this book to everyone anyway. I would definitely give 5 stars when it gets updated and corrected!!!
Good read but needs edited. I really enjoy this story and have actually read it a couple times. Quite a few missing words or grammatical errors but I would recommend this book to everyone anyway. I would definitely give 5 stars when it gets updated and corrected!!!
April 17, 2019
Good story line / needs additional editing
The plot the author was portraying was very thought out and executed with almost perfection. It kept me guessing until the end, and I was still wrong. I wanted to give more stars but the editing needs to be revisited as the sentence structure is not at the level of should be.
The plot the author was portraying was very thought out and executed with almost perfection. It kept me guessing until the end, and I was still wrong. I wanted to give more stars but the editing needs to be revisited as the sentence structure is not at the level of should be.
April 21, 2020
Give it a try
I read some reviews and was hesitant to give this book a chance. However I am glad I did have perspective from different characters was great gave a better insight on what was happening. There were a few grammar errors but did not effect the story much. Wasn't like other mate books.
I read some reviews and was hesitant to give this book a chance. However I am glad I did have perspective from different characters was great gave a better insight on what was happening. There were a few grammar errors but did not effect the story much. Wasn't like other mate books.
August 6, 2020
Re-Read
Having read the original I was worried the update wouldn't be the same. Thankfully the updated book was even better. The story was the same but more fleshed out and some of the jumpy parts were smoothed out. I love this book and would absolutely recommend it to anyone who likes a story that pulls on your heartstrings.
Having read the original I was worried the update wouldn't be the same. Thankfully the updated book was even better. The story was the same but more fleshed out and some of the jumpy parts were smoothed out. I love this book and would absolutely recommend it to anyone who likes a story that pulls on your heartstrings.
September 18, 2024
Take a chance on a great book
First I want to let the author know that I LOVED this book.and story!!! You knocked it out of the park. I couldn't put this book down. I was so hooked by the characters and the story. Mary you are a amazing writer and I look forward to any books you have written and/or will write.
First I want to let the author know that I LOVED this book.and story!!! You knocked it out of the park. I couldn't put this book down. I was so hooked by the characters and the story. Mary you are a amazing writer and I look forward to any books you have written and/or will write.
August 19, 2019
Wow, this needs an editor. It feels like something a person would jot down as the story came to them, rather than a finished product. The ideas were good and the MC was good. This could have been a good read, but the lack of editing really detracted from the enjoyment factor.
May 9, 2020
Really liking this author
This author has great story telling abilities, she is in need of a editor very badly but if you can get over it and correct things in your mind while still staying with the story than you will enjoy it.
This author has great story telling abilities, she is in need of a editor very badly but if you can get over it and correct things in your mind while still staying with the story than you will enjoy it.
June 16, 2020
All over the place
The book had good bones but goodness the story was everywhere. Poor grammar was difficult to read around. Half of the time I didn’t know who was speaking. With some polish it could be a really good book.
The book had good bones but goodness the story was everywhere. Poor grammar was difficult to read around. Half of the time I didn’t know who was speaking. With some polish it could be a really good book.
July 9, 2020
Amazing
I love this storyline and plot. Its full of emotions and the characters all get their hea. This is a very long book with several characters that get their hea along with a couple different plots that roll into an 1 Amazing book
I love this storyline and plot. Its full of emotions and the characters all get their hea. This is a very long book with several characters that get their hea along with a couple different plots that roll into an 1 Amazing book
September 1, 2020
Good but need an editor
I have read a few of your books. This had the best depth to the story. However, like all your books, you frequently use the wrong word, misspell, and have huge grammatical errors. You need to hire an editor if you continue to sell your books.
I have read a few of your books. This had the best depth to the story. However, like all your books, you frequently use the wrong word, misspell, and have huge grammatical errors. You need to hire an editor if you continue to sell your books.
October 14, 2020
Loved it
I absolutely adored this book, yes there were a few types, but not so many that it was horrible as some of the other reviews have stated. It was a good story and I cant wait to read more by this author!
I absolutely adored this book, yes there were a few types, but not so many that it was horrible as some of the other reviews have stated. It was a good story and I cant wait to read more by this author!
December 27, 2020
Desperately needs an editor!
Story line is interesting but the grammatical errors are ridiculous. Even a cursory reading would have caught many of the mistakes. I would have been angry to have paid money for this book instead of reading it through Kindle Unlimited.
Story line is interesting but the grammatical errors are ridiculous. Even a cursory reading would have caught many of the mistakes. I would have been angry to have paid money for this book instead of reading it through Kindle Unlimited.
March 5, 2021
Good story concept
This was a good story idea but could definitely use some tlc with editing. There are quite a few grammar and word choice issues but if you can look past it the story has solid foundation. 🤗
This was a good story idea but could definitely use some tlc with editing. There are quite a few grammar and word choice issues but if you can look past it the story has solid foundation. 🤗
June 18, 2021
The grammar mistakes!
I really had a hard time reading this due to all the grammar mistakes. Missing commas, run on sentences, and wrong words used are just a few of the things that made reading this book difficult.
I really had a hard time reading this due to all the grammar mistakes. Missing commas, run on sentences, and wrong words used are just a few of the things that made reading this book difficult.
July 25, 2025
3.5 stars
It was a good story. However, it is in desperate need of a good editor to correct all the grammar issues that took away from the enjoyment of the storyline. I found myself stopping constantly to make sense of the sentences.
It was a good story. However, it is in desperate need of a good editor to correct all the grammar issues that took away from the enjoyment of the storyline. I found myself stopping constantly to make sense of the sentences.
February 7, 2017
Love the storyI
Other than some editing problems, I love the book! It was great not to see the "F" word on every page.
Other than some editing problems, I love the book! It was great not to see the "F" word on every page.
November 5, 2018
I really liked the story and the characters, but the writing and editing were not great. I think if the editing would have been better, I would have enjoyed the much more.
March 10, 2019
Ermm
Ok,the story is ok but the grammar is awful! One of the worse I have read,sorry!
This book really needs a good proof reading and edits!
Ok,the story is ok but the grammar is awful! One of the worse I have read,sorry!
This book really needs a good proof reading and edits!
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