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The Golden Apples of the Sun: A Variation on Jane Austen's Pride and Prejudice
The Golden Apples of the Sun - A Pride and Prejudice Variation
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Elizabeth ground her teeth. “Mr. Darcy, who are you to dictate? My sister is twenty-one years old: therefore an adult. I will guarantee nothing on her behalf! Of course, you may treat Mr. Bingley as a child if you choose. It would be quite in keeping with the rest of your arrogant behavior. And now, I bid you a very good day, sir.”
Angry tears pricked behind her eyelids and she turned to walk away. But Darcy reached out and placed a heavy hand on her arm. “Not so fast, Miss Elizabeth…” he began to say, when a shrill voice called out behind them.
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A QUEST FOR A LIFE OF MEANING.
Elizabeth Bennet, a young woman possessed of a keen intellect and sharp wit has spent most of her young life in forced seclusion in the small rural village of Meryton. But with the arrival of two wealthy young gentlemen, things look set to change for the Bennet family, especially when Elizabeth encounters and clashes with the arrogant and controlling Fitzwilliam Darcy, never dreaming that he will come to admire her or that the social barriers between them can ever be surmounted.
Darcy, despite being born to power and privilege, has always been discontented with his lot – not least because family obligations make marriage to his sickly cousin, Anne, unavoidable. Until he visits the small town of Meryton his attitude is characteristically contemptuous and bitter and it is only when he has to contend with Elizabeth Bennet and her disturbing ability to pinpoint his faults while mocking him at every turn that he is compelled to examine his own behaviour more closely.
Slowly, Darcy travels the path to self-knowledge and in the process over comes his cynicism and begins to yearn for a life of purpose, passion and real fulfilment.
BUT CAN DARCY HONOUR HIS OBLIGATIONS TO HIS FAMILY AND RESIST HIS DESIRE FOR ELIZABETH AND THE PROMISE SHE HOLDS FOR ENDING HIS LIFE OF LONELINESS?
AND CAN ELIZABETH OVERCOME A FAMILY SCANDAL AND HER ABSORPTION IN THE WORLD OF IDEAS, TO SEE PAST DARCY’S ARROGANT EXTERIOR TO THE MAN WHO IS ON A QUEST FOR THE MOST PROFOUND FORM OF LOVE?
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Elizabeth ground her teeth. “Mr. Darcy, who are you to dictate? My sister is twenty-one years old: therefore an adult. I will guarantee nothing on her behalf! Of course, you may treat Mr. Bingley as a child if you choose. It would be quite in keeping with the rest of your arrogant behavior. And now, I bid you a very good day, sir.”
Angry tears pricked behind her eyelids and she turned to walk away. But Darcy reached out and placed a heavy hand on her arm. “Not so fast, Miss Elizabeth…” he began to say, when a shrill voice called out behind them.
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A QUEST FOR A LIFE OF MEANING.
Elizabeth Bennet, a young woman possessed of a keen intellect and sharp wit has spent most of her young life in forced seclusion in the small rural village of Meryton. But with the arrival of two wealthy young gentlemen, things look set to change for the Bennet family, especially when Elizabeth encounters and clashes with the arrogant and controlling Fitzwilliam Darcy, never dreaming that he will come to admire her or that the social barriers between them can ever be surmounted.
Darcy, despite being born to power and privilege, has always been discontented with his lot – not least because family obligations make marriage to his sickly cousin, Anne, unavoidable. Until he visits the small town of Meryton his attitude is characteristically contemptuous and bitter and it is only when he has to contend with Elizabeth Bennet and her disturbing ability to pinpoint his faults while mocking him at every turn that he is compelled to examine his own behaviour more closely.
Slowly, Darcy travels the path to self-knowledge and in the process over comes his cynicism and begins to yearn for a life of purpose, passion and real fulfilment.
BUT CAN DARCY HONOUR HIS OBLIGATIONS TO HIS FAMILY AND RESIST HIS DESIRE FOR ELIZABETH AND THE PROMISE SHE HOLDS FOR ENDING HIS LIFE OF LONELINESS?
AND CAN ELIZABETH OVERCOME A FAMILY SCANDAL AND HER ABSORPTION IN THE WORLD OF IDEAS, TO SEE PAST DARCY’S ARROGANT EXTERIOR TO THE MAN WHO IS ON A QUEST FOR THE MOST PROFOUND FORM OF LOVE?
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September 12, 2018
“Virtue consists, not in abstaining from vice, but in not desiring it.” ~ George Bernard Shaw
This story is a different than the usual JAFF variation.
Jane is different: more observant; less trusting; not fooled for a minute by Miss Bingley (quote: “You haven’t met her yet, Lizzy, but she is an absolute pill.”)
Bingley is different: willing to crack down on his shrewish sister’s bad behavior; making his own decision about marriage to Jane Bennet.
Darcy is different: more willing to abide by the wishes of his Fitzwilliam family; suffering from the lack of love and esteem from his parents; able to love Georgiana but as unable to love others as his parents had been.
Elizabeth is different: able to see similarities to her Father but in denial about qualities she has in common with her Mother; even more outspoken and protective of her family.
“It is a curious sensation: the sort of pain that goes mercifully beyond our powers of feeling. When your heart is broken, your boats are burned: nothing matters any more. It is the end of happiness and the beginning of peace.” ~ George Bernard Shaw
The Bennet family situation is the most different of all.
The story begins in 1812 – two years after a fourteen-year-old Lydia ran away with George Wickham. Her family is unable to find her but she manages to contact the Gardiners after Wickham abandons her in London. She is pregnant and dies in a miscarriage. Wickham is never found.
The remaining Bennets are shunned by most of Meryton.
Mr. Bennet has at last learned to be cautious and seldom allows his daughters to attend any local gatherings. After two years, Mrs. Bennet still keeps mainly to her bedchamber.
“I gave myself to none, but held myself apart, individual, indissoluble, a mirror of polished steel” ~ W. B. Yeats
Darcy visits Netherfield with Bingley. The friends know the Bennets are isolated and Darcy is determined to discover the reason. He is attracted to Elizabeth but both know there is no future together.
After leaving Hertfordshire, Darcy realizes his values are changing. He examines his views of women in the Regency world. He considers Lydia Bennet: dead and unavenged; unprotected from a scoundrel. Wickham enters and quickly exits the story. His appearance is significant only in the way if affects the Bennet family.
“It takes more courage to examine the dark corners of your own soul than it does for a soldier to fight on a battlefield.” ~ W. B. Yeats
Quote from the book: Darcy now saw that when he had refused to join his cousin as he dallied with his opera dancer, he had already begun to feel the stirring of his natural morality. He had always viewed the callous way in which women were treated with some distaste and yet, until recently, had unthinkingly done as others did and indulged his senses - taking advantage of feminine weakness and their lowly position in society. He would do it no longer.
Darcy has a journey to discover his real self. He had been a similar sort of Regency man as his cousin Colonel Fitzwilliam is usually described: having dalliances with willing widows and courtesans but stopping short of approaching innocent young women.
For I would ride with you upon the wind, Run on the top of the dishevelled tide, And dance upon the mountains like a flame. ~ W.B. Yeats
Quote from the Book: His parents had been incapable of real love; but together, he was certain that he and Elizabeth would find it.
The story spans more than five years – a skip of three years between Part 1 and Part 2; and another skip of a year before the end. Darcy is married and widowed during that time. Elizabeth has a “courtship” lasting more than two years.
I appreciated the quotes at the beginning of each chapter – a sampling of those quotes is included here – all well-chosen and adding meaning to the chapter.
I loved this book. Don’t read it if you dislike a Darcy who isn’t a virgin or if you hate for either Darcy or Elizabeth to have another relationship.
“Conversation about weather is the last refuge of the unimaginative” ~ Oscar Wilde
This story is a different than the usual JAFF variation.
Jane is different: more observant; less trusting; not fooled for a minute by Miss Bingley (quote: “You haven’t met her yet, Lizzy, but she is an absolute pill.”)
Bingley is different: willing to crack down on his shrewish sister’s bad behavior; making his own decision about marriage to Jane Bennet.
Darcy is different: more willing to abide by the wishes of his Fitzwilliam family; suffering from the lack of love and esteem from his parents; able to love Georgiana but as unable to love others as his parents had been.
Elizabeth is different: able to see similarities to her Father but in denial about qualities she has in common with her Mother; even more outspoken and protective of her family.
“It is a curious sensation: the sort of pain that goes mercifully beyond our powers of feeling. When your heart is broken, your boats are burned: nothing matters any more. It is the end of happiness and the beginning of peace.” ~ George Bernard Shaw
The Bennet family situation is the most different of all.
The story begins in 1812 – two years after a fourteen-year-old Lydia ran away with George Wickham. Her family is unable to find her but she manages to contact the Gardiners after Wickham abandons her in London. She is pregnant and dies in a miscarriage. Wickham is never found.
The remaining Bennets are shunned by most of Meryton.
Mr. Bennet has at last learned to be cautious and seldom allows his daughters to attend any local gatherings. After two years, Mrs. Bennet still keeps mainly to her bedchamber.
“I gave myself to none, but held myself apart, individual, indissoluble, a mirror of polished steel” ~ W. B. Yeats
Darcy visits Netherfield with Bingley. The friends know the Bennets are isolated and Darcy is determined to discover the reason. He is attracted to Elizabeth but both know there is no future together.
After leaving Hertfordshire, Darcy realizes his values are changing. He examines his views of women in the Regency world. He considers Lydia Bennet: dead and unavenged; unprotected from a scoundrel. Wickham enters and quickly exits the story. His appearance is significant only in the way if affects the Bennet family.
“It takes more courage to examine the dark corners of your own soul than it does for a soldier to fight on a battlefield.” ~ W. B. Yeats
Quote from the book: Darcy now saw that when he had refused to join his cousin as he dallied with his opera dancer, he had already begun to feel the stirring of his natural morality. He had always viewed the callous way in which women were treated with some distaste and yet, until recently, had unthinkingly done as others did and indulged his senses - taking advantage of feminine weakness and their lowly position in society. He would do it no longer.
Darcy has a journey to discover his real self. He had been a similar sort of Regency man as his cousin Colonel Fitzwilliam is usually described: having dalliances with willing widows and courtesans but stopping short of approaching innocent young women.
For I would ride with you upon the wind, Run on the top of the dishevelled tide, And dance upon the mountains like a flame. ~ W.B. Yeats
Quote from the Book: His parents had been incapable of real love; but together, he was certain that he and Elizabeth would find it.
The story spans more than five years – a skip of three years between Part 1 and Part 2; and another skip of a year before the end. Darcy is married and widowed during that time. Elizabeth has a “courtship” lasting more than two years.
I appreciated the quotes at the beginning of each chapter – a sampling of those quotes is included here – all well-chosen and adding meaning to the chapter.
I loved this book. Don’t read it if you dislike a Darcy who isn’t a virgin or if you hate for either Darcy or Elizabeth to have another relationship.
“Conversation about weather is the last refuge of the unimaginative” ~ Oscar Wilde
April 13, 2022
Two people trying to understand their changing selfs
Darcy was an intelligent man who never learned that love can be real. He dominates Pemberley and the people associated with it, in a benevolent way.
Lizzie was an intelligent woman who has never learned that love can be real without the woman being dominated.
They both have a long road self change to travel and come together now and then and are small causes for each other to keep changing.
Two trains on parallel tracks going in the same direction. Sometime he is a little ahead, sometimes she is a little ahead.
Yeats and years go by but they never fly totally apart from each other.
They both must take a leap of faith to finally come together.
A well written story that ends in a HEA but with no help and much hindrance from their parents and their families. Two worshippers of nature fall in love.
Recommended for those who don’t mind getting glimpses into ODC minds as they change and grow, instead of a normal variation with a standard plot.
Darcy was an intelligent man who never learned that love can be real. He dominates Pemberley and the people associated with it, in a benevolent way.
Lizzie was an intelligent woman who has never learned that love can be real without the woman being dominated.
They both have a long road self change to travel and come together now and then and are small causes for each other to keep changing.
Two trains on parallel tracks going in the same direction. Sometime he is a little ahead, sometimes she is a little ahead.
Yeats and years go by but they never fly totally apart from each other.
They both must take a leap of faith to finally come together.
A well written story that ends in a HEA but with no help and much hindrance from their parents and their families. Two worshippers of nature fall in love.
Recommended for those who don’t mind getting glimpses into ODC minds as they change and grow, instead of a normal variation with a standard plot.
June 4, 2021
This story was a slow burn, with much reflection and retrospection for both Darcy and Elizabeth. Most of their personal growth was down independent of each other, or rather due to each other, but separately.
Each chapter began with a quote, usually Yeats and GB Shaw. From the beginning we are made aware that the Bennet's are in a state of ruin following Lydia's behavior and consequent death. Mr. Bennet aside from keeping his girls close is as indolent as ever regarding Longbourn. Into this Bingley and Darcy arrive, with Bingley falling for Jane quickly, if somewhat secretly. Meanwhile ODC spark, quarrel and misunderstand one another. Probably to hide from potential deep and passionate emotions and feelings.
Collins makes an appearance, which ends up leading to a marriage with Mary. Much to both Elizabeth and Jane's relief.
I find that this is not a happy Elizabeth, she is witty and teases, but does not seem to have the same confidence and cynicism as in canon. There is almost a murky pall of sadness overshadowing her. She doesn't seem to expect much for herself out of life.
Darcy does not really struggle with his feelings for her. As he is adamant to honor his family wishes, there is no conflict (or very little) and he leaves Hertfordshire early on.
The story continues and the layers are slowly peeled away, both by the story progression and by each character slowly developing as individuals. Darcy had his eyes opened by several experiences while in Meryton and makes changes to himself and his life and those around him.
Elizabeth wanting to find purpose for her life and to make a difference in the world ends up in a courtship with the new parson. Then while traveling meets up with Darcy again.
Again I am left the impression that Elizabeth, for all her confidence and intelligence is in desperate need of love. Only towards the end of the book are even more layers removed and it's clear she never really had her mother's love. This could be the reason she protected herself from being vulnerable to love.
The writing was good, but I felt a lack of flow, especially in between scenes. At times the transitions came across as disjointed and stilted. However, overall this story gives the reader much to think about.
Each chapter began with a quote, usually Yeats and GB Shaw. From the beginning we are made aware that the Bennet's are in a state of ruin following Lydia's behavior and consequent death. Mr. Bennet aside from keeping his girls close is as indolent as ever regarding Longbourn. Into this Bingley and Darcy arrive, with Bingley falling for Jane quickly, if somewhat secretly. Meanwhile ODC spark, quarrel and misunderstand one another. Probably to hide from potential deep and passionate emotions and feelings.
Collins makes an appearance, which ends up leading to a marriage with Mary. Much to both Elizabeth and Jane's relief.
I find that this is not a happy Elizabeth, she is witty and teases, but does not seem to have the same confidence and cynicism as in canon. There is almost a murky pall of sadness overshadowing her. She doesn't seem to expect much for herself out of life.
Darcy does not really struggle with his feelings for her. As he is adamant to honor his family wishes, there is no conflict (or very little) and he leaves Hertfordshire early on.
The story continues and the layers are slowly peeled away, both by the story progression and by each character slowly developing as individuals. Darcy had his eyes opened by several experiences while in Meryton and makes changes to himself and his life and those around him.
Elizabeth wanting to find purpose for her life and to make a difference in the world ends up in a courtship with the new parson. Then while traveling meets up with Darcy again.
Again I am left the impression that Elizabeth, for all her confidence and intelligence is in desperate need of love. Only towards the end of the book are even more layers removed and it's clear she never really had her mother's love. This could be the reason she protected herself from being vulnerable to love.
The writing was good, but I felt a lack of flow, especially in between scenes. At times the transitions came across as disjointed and stilted. However, overall this story gives the reader much to think about.
October 2, 2018
In this story Lydia's fateful elopement with Wickham at an even younger age than canon taints the future of the entire Bennet family. All of Meryton looks down on the family. Mr. Bennet does not allow any socialization except a few dinner with the Lucas family. Mrs. Bennet has kept to her bedchamber, constantly bemoaning the family's fall from grace.
Darcy and Bingley arrive at Netherfield and the latter is anxious to meet the Bennet sisters as they have been described as beauties. But they don't show up at the Assembly. Darcy has had a glimpse of Elizabeth while on a walk but he spied upon her in secret and when he attempts to interact with her at a bookstore he is rebuffed. After several interactions between Bingley and Jane as well as Elizabeth and Darcy Elizabeth decides she must inform Darcy about why the family is shunned as she fears Bingley will only break Jane's heart when he learns the truth and abandons her.
Darcy, in this variation, has much more dedication to the demands of his family and the situation existing with his cousin, Anne. He expected to marry her which will also keep Rosings in the family. Although Elizabeth draws his attention he has no inclination to consider her as a possible candidate for wife. And for her: first, Collins shows up and Elizabeth is forced to tamp down her impudent manners and opinions as her study of the family's situation and finances convinces her that she must present herself as his bride in order to save Jane who is in a relationship of sorts with Bingley. Bingley is much stronger willed in this book and handles Caroline and doesn't desert Jane.
The story description tells us that there are separations of three years and another a year between Elizabeth and Darcy. He marries. She is being "courted" by the new vicar. Her arm is twisted to go off to visit an aunt who has connections and it is while she is there that she again meets Darcy as well as Georgiana and the Colonel.
This story has our couple looking inward much more and both have regrets as well as apologies to make. Darcy shows a temper, jealousy and again doesn't always guard his words. Elizabeth is aware of her family's station far beneath his and acts upon that as being unchangeable.
I enjoyed this story: but then, if you know me at all, you know I like angst.
This book was a loan from a friend.
Darcy and Bingley arrive at Netherfield and the latter is anxious to meet the Bennet sisters as they have been described as beauties. But they don't show up at the Assembly. Darcy has had a glimpse of Elizabeth while on a walk but he spied upon her in secret and when he attempts to interact with her at a bookstore he is rebuffed. After several interactions between Bingley and Jane as well as Elizabeth and Darcy Elizabeth decides she must inform Darcy about why the family is shunned as she fears Bingley will only break Jane's heart when he learns the truth and abandons her.
Darcy, in this variation, has much more dedication to the demands of his family and the situation existing with his cousin, Anne. He expected to marry her which will also keep Rosings in the family. Although Elizabeth draws his attention he has no inclination to consider her as a possible candidate for wife. And for her: first, Collins shows up and Elizabeth is forced to tamp down her impudent manners and opinions as her study of the family's situation and finances convinces her that she must present herself as his bride in order to save Jane who is in a relationship of sorts with Bingley. Bingley is much stronger willed in this book and handles Caroline and doesn't desert Jane.
The story description tells us that there are separations of three years and another a year between Elizabeth and Darcy. He marries. She is being "courted" by the new vicar. Her arm is twisted to go off to visit an aunt who has connections and it is while she is there that she again meets Darcy as well as Georgiana and the Colonel.
This story has our couple looking inward much more and both have regrets as well as apologies to make. Darcy shows a temper, jealousy and again doesn't always guard his words. Elizabeth is aware of her family's station far beneath his and acts upon that as being unchangeable.
I enjoyed this story: but then, if you know me at all, you know I like angst.
This book was a loan from a friend.
September 21, 2018
This might be one of the best variations I've ever read. What happens if Lydia runs away with Wickham two years before canon, and it leads to her death? How does the story play out then?
It might have the best written Bingley and Jane I've ever read. It also has beautiful insight into the very real flaws that Darcy and Elizabeth have. They aren't "fake flaws" but good soul searching ones.
Excellently written, a couple of errors here and there, but really, if it wasn't JAFF I could see it as published historical fiction. Or even a TV series.
Extremely engaging. I loved it.
It might have the best written Bingley and Jane I've ever read. It also has beautiful insight into the very real flaws that Darcy and Elizabeth have. They aren't "fake flaws" but good soul searching ones.
Excellently written, a couple of errors here and there, but really, if it wasn't JAFF I could see it as published historical fiction. Or even a TV series.
Extremely engaging. I loved it.
maybe
September 9, 2018I read the sample and was not impressed
September 5, 2018
I really enjoyed this Pride and Prejudice variation. It begins a year after Jane Austen's timeline, with some small changes. Lydia has managed to disgrace her family before Bingley and Darcy arrive at Netherfield. When we meet Darcy, he is a bit more proud and disagreeable than cannon, and here he takes seriously his family's expectation to marry Anne de Bourgh. Elizabeth is likewise a bit more headstrong and stubborn than cannon. With these variations the author creates an intriguing story.
September 7, 2018
A great read!
This was a great story! The verbal sparring between Elizabeth and Darcy was extremely entertaining. The story encompasses several years but the writer does a great job at taking the reader quickly and getting to the point. Although it took Elizabeth while to get to admit her live it was overcoming her fears that really showed her strength and courage. Darcy, who fought his attraction and gave in to his duty, was eventually freed from his family’s expectations and free to love whom he pleased. He was constant and did not give up. A great read! I loved it!!
This was a great story! The verbal sparring between Elizabeth and Darcy was extremely entertaining. The story encompasses several years but the writer does a great job at taking the reader quickly and getting to the point. Although it took Elizabeth while to get to admit her live it was overcoming her fears that really showed her strength and courage. Darcy, who fought his attraction and gave in to his duty, was eventually freed from his family’s expectations and free to love whom he pleased. He was constant and did not give up. A great read! I loved it!!
October 8, 2018
This started out with so much possibility and somewhere in the middle, fizzled out. There were great plot points early on and creative conversation, interesting and more realistic characterizations. But midway through, this talented author lost her plot amidst her prose. It felt like she changed editors midstream and decided to change direction. Yes, it's beautifully written but it doesn't move without starts and fits, none well plotted or explanatory.
January 27, 2021
Enjoyable Read
Reviewed in Canada on May 31, 2019
I quite liked this story even though the plot wasn’t too deep. I thought it was well written with pretty good dialogue. I was a bit disappointed with the ending, which I thought somewhat abrupt with no epilogue.
Reviewed in Canada on May 31, 2019
I quite liked this story even though the plot wasn’t too deep. I thought it was well written with pretty good dialogue. I was a bit disappointed with the ending, which I thought somewhat abrupt with no epilogue.
September 11, 2024
A really beautifully written book. The characters, their circumstances, thoughts, growth and emotions are well captured by the author. There are no real villains in the story except for a very brief appearance of Caroline and Wickham. But ODC manages to create enough trouble for themselves and I loved their interactions. I have to say, this story has one of the best Bingley and Jane and even Kitty.
June 22, 2020
It is hard to be drawn into the early book; Darcy’s continuous soul searching and repetitive pondering becomes extremely boring. While it may represent his thoughts, the reader doesn’t need to be given identical information in every chapter. There isn’t much action, and when something interesting happens (eg. with Bingley or Mr Collins), we don’t get to see it, just hear about it afterwards.
The writing becomes much lighter around the 48% mark but this changes the feel of the story considerably. The change to Book 2 at 60%ish feels abrupt, with the story jumping ahead and the focus becoming more narrow with few explanations of the intervening time. Both sections tend towards wordiness and repetitive passages, but Book 2 is faster moving and easier to read, though the timeline is very dragged out for no good reason. All the conversations and people from Book 1 are remembered with clarity in Book 2, which continues the feeling that nothing has happened in the interim.
There are character changes too. I felt that Jane was more critical and complaining, a little selfish. Bingley was firmer but still avoidant. Caroline Bingley is far too extreme, as often happens in JAFF, and doesn’t really have a point/role in this story. Early Darcy came across (I think unintentionally) as a little rakish. He is frequently changeable in his attentions and behaves badly towards Elizabeth throughout. He is offensive and then apologises and then does it again; he speaks of change but it’s not apparent in his actions. He is not canon Darcy who deserves love because he reforms. Lizzy changes often, and at one point seems to be a completely different person. The side storyline about Edmund seems only to be included so that she isn’t required to morally object to a man who disrespects her, as she did in canon. Here she is willing (well kind of) to marry without love and love without respect. Her overriding emotion is fear, which is sad and the opposite to the brave but flawed heroine we adore.
Darcy is obsessed with duty towards the Fitzwilliams, but I don’t totally understand the logic here about the disposal of Rosings. Why would Darcy accept a dowry and give it to his uncle? If that was the aim then surely the Viscount or the Colonel would be pressed to marry Anne? In canon, Lady C clearly wants the prestige of Pemberley, being cousins is simply a helpful persuasive tool.
Occasional phrases or actions seemed more modern than the Regency, possibly Victorian at times and very modern in others. The entire story felt to me that it would sit more comfortably in the 1910s-30s, particularly the Edmund/relationships storyline.
A pet peeve - “Lady” instead of Miss de Bourg. Taken with character changes makes me question how well the author knows the original.
Could be edited for general mistakes - eg. Lizzy says she didn’t know Anne had died because Bingley is her only source of information, then mentions she had been at Rosings repeatedly following Anne’s death (so even if Collins didn’t mention it, she would have known Lady C was in mourning during that time).
The writing becomes much lighter around the 48% mark but this changes the feel of the story considerably. The change to Book 2 at 60%ish feels abrupt, with the story jumping ahead and the focus becoming more narrow with few explanations of the intervening time. Both sections tend towards wordiness and repetitive passages, but Book 2 is faster moving and easier to read, though the timeline is very dragged out for no good reason. All the conversations and people from Book 1 are remembered with clarity in Book 2, which continues the feeling that nothing has happened in the interim.
There are character changes too. I felt that Jane was more critical and complaining, a little selfish. Bingley was firmer but still avoidant. Caroline Bingley is far too extreme, as often happens in JAFF, and doesn’t really have a point/role in this story. Early Darcy came across (I think unintentionally) as a little rakish. He is frequently changeable in his attentions and behaves badly towards Elizabeth throughout. He is offensive and then apologises and then does it again; he speaks of change but it’s not apparent in his actions. He is not canon Darcy who deserves love because he reforms. Lizzy changes often, and at one point seems to be a completely different person. The side storyline about Edmund seems only to be included so that she isn’t required to morally object to a man who disrespects her, as she did in canon. Here she is willing (well kind of) to marry without love and love without respect. Her overriding emotion is fear, which is sad and the opposite to the brave but flawed heroine we adore.
Darcy is obsessed with duty towards the Fitzwilliams, but I don’t totally understand the logic here about the disposal of Rosings. Why would Darcy accept a dowry and give it to his uncle? If that was the aim then surely the Viscount or the Colonel would be pressed to marry Anne? In canon, Lady C clearly wants the prestige of Pemberley, being cousins is simply a helpful persuasive tool.
Occasional phrases or actions seemed more modern than the Regency, possibly Victorian at times and very modern in others. The entire story felt to me that it would sit more comfortably in the 1910s-30s, particularly the Edmund/relationships storyline.
A pet peeve - “Lady” instead of Miss de Bourg. Taken with character changes makes me question how well the author knows the original.
Could be edited for general mistakes - eg. Lizzy says she didn’t know Anne had died because Bingley is her only source of information, then mentions she had been at Rosings repeatedly following Anne’s death (so even if Collins didn’t mention it, she would have known Lady C was in mourning during that time).
October 5, 2018
Avid Reader
I was very impressed with the way that this author sequences the journey that eventually brought them together. When Darcy is raised by unloving parents, he is not a nice person. His arrogance and disdain for others seems to lose through his pores. When Elizabeth has to live through Lydia's disgrace, she is even more close-minded.
I was very impressed with the way that this author sequences the journey that eventually brought them together. When Darcy is raised by unloving parents, he is not a nice person. His arrogance and disdain for others seems to lose through his pores. When Elizabeth has to live through Lydia's disgrace, she is even more close-minded.
October 15, 2018
One of the best variations yet
The best variations seem to be the ones where Darcy and Elizabeth have the most difficulty reaching any kind of understanding. This story certainly does that. The gulf between them appears insurmountable, and the reason is that they are both damaged people: Darcy because of his parent's loveless and contentious marriage, and Elizabeth because of her mother's subtle abuse of her throughout her life. It's a long, arduous journey for both of them to get to know each other and, more importantly, themselves. But this journey is the beauty of this story. We are put through the emotional wringer, and feel exquisite suspense even though we're fairly certain that all will be well in the end. Even though at times it seemed as if they would never get around to a resolution, their self discovery was critical and time well spent.
The story was very well written. Aside from punctuation mistakes, there was not much wrong with it. This is a talented author. Great storytelling.
The best variations seem to be the ones where Darcy and Elizabeth have the most difficulty reaching any kind of understanding. This story certainly does that. The gulf between them appears insurmountable, and the reason is that they are both damaged people: Darcy because of his parent's loveless and contentious marriage, and Elizabeth because of her mother's subtle abuse of her throughout her life. It's a long, arduous journey for both of them to get to know each other and, more importantly, themselves. But this journey is the beauty of this story. We are put through the emotional wringer, and feel exquisite suspense even though we're fairly certain that all will be well in the end. Even though at times it seemed as if they would never get around to a resolution, their self discovery was critical and time well spent.
The story was very well written. Aside from punctuation mistakes, there was not much wrong with it. This is a talented author. Great storytelling.
October 3, 2018
Good Story but Dragged in Places
This is a good story but it really dragged for me until Book 2. Up until then it was two or three major events with a lot of filler. By Book 2, all of the preliminaries are through and the story can proceed at a more normal pace. The story still Bob's down a bit in extensive description, but the pacing is better.
Get characters (Darcy, Elizabeth, Jane, Bingly, Fitzwilliam and Kitty) are more robust, complex, and nuanced. She does the best overall character development that I have read in a while. Her descriptive language and dialog are thorough (though at times a bit tedious for me). On the whole, a good read and enjoyable story.
This is a good story but it really dragged for me until Book 2. Up until then it was two or three major events with a lot of filler. By Book 2, all of the preliminaries are through and the story can proceed at a more normal pace. The story still Bob's down a bit in extensive description, but the pacing is better.
Get characters (Darcy, Elizabeth, Jane, Bingly, Fitzwilliam and Kitty) are more robust, complex, and nuanced. She does the best overall character development that I have read in a while. Her descriptive language and dialog are thorough (though at times a bit tedious for me). On the whole, a good read and enjoyable story.
November 17, 2025
The story has some redeeming qualities, but it's not for me. Some of the characters' essential traits are wrong for me. Moreover, the mention that Darcy married Anne after met Elizabeth and then Anne died. When he met Elizabeth again, he thought he was now "free" to pursue Elizabeth, gave me the feeling that if he still hadn't fulfilled his so-called duty, he still wouldn't have pursued Elizabeth, which made me uncomfortable.
September 10, 2018
Not to be overlooked-a subtle study in self awareness
The strength of this story is in the introspection of each of the main characters. This author remains true to the characterizations of Austen, but allows each to discover their true destiny while changing the timing of their encounters. A sweet, contemplative alternative-well worth it!
The strength of this story is in the introspection of each of the main characters. This author remains true to the characterizations of Austen, but allows each to discover their true destiny while changing the timing of their encounters. A sweet, contemplative alternative-well worth it!
May 8, 2020
One of the better P&P variations
Sometimes when reading P&P fan fiction, you wonder whether the author ever read the original. This author captures the essence of the characters and twists them into her own creations. This book was a pleasure to read. The storyline was inventive and did not falter during the second half of the book (another common complaint).
Sometimes when reading P&P fan fiction, you wonder whether the author ever read the original. This author captures the essence of the characters and twists them into her own creations. This book was a pleasure to read. The storyline was inventive and did not falter during the second half of the book (another common complaint).
February 23, 2019
Bk 1 okay, Bk 2 not so much...
All I can think, given the huge disparity of quality between the 2 ‘Books’, is that there was not enough material in either to make a stand-alone or a series. Beyond that, Book 2 is, to me, well nigh unreadable.
All I can think, given the huge disparity of quality between the 2 ‘Books’, is that there was not enough material in either to make a stand-alone or a series. Beyond that, Book 2 is, to me, well nigh unreadable.
September 19, 2018
Good read
Like it the authors first book, the insight into the psychology of E & D - how each is driven by fear and love, is what makes this book enjoyable.
Like it the authors first book, the insight into the psychology of E & D - how each is driven by fear and love, is what makes this book enjoyable.
September 23, 2018
The Sun did Shine.
This was a long book, but I enjoyed it. It was truly a variation of my favorite book of all time. Well done!
This was a long book, but I enjoyed it. It was truly a variation of my favorite book of all time. Well done!
April 30, 2020
Boring
Could not get into this book at all tried to skip chapters to see if it got better further on but it just did not. I dislike writing bad reviews
Could not get into this book at all tried to skip chapters to see if it got better further on but it just did not. I dislike writing bad reviews
October 14, 2022
worth the journey
The story takes a few twists and turns but the ending is worth it. A different story than the traditional ‘what if’ but very humanized version
The story takes a few twists and turns but the ending is worth it. A different story than the traditional ‘what if’ but very humanized version
December 25, 2022
Finely Wrought
A well written sensitive exploration of what it means to love, what it means to be a person of good character, and what it means to face change and personal growth.
A well written sensitive exploration of what it means to love, what it means to be a person of good character, and what it means to face change and personal growth.
March 8, 2023
3.5/5
February 1, 2024
Excellent JAFF. I’m truly impressed by this author’s ability to reach deep inside the souls of the characters. And on top of that her books are well written and her epigraphs well chosen.
April 21, 2021
Very well written book
Loved the story, great plots good dialog. Neither is indifferent to other throughout the story, but keep dancing around each other.
Loved the story, great plots good dialog. Neither is indifferent to other throughout the story, but keep dancing around each other.
October 31, 2021
While I enjoy Ivy’s style of writing, I just find the storyline rather sluggish. Too many deep analyses of every action taken.
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