Missed potential-
This story centers around a character called Main, who is being raised by a single mother. she moved them from Chicago to Atlanta after the death of his childhood friend. He proceeds to lead the corner boy "dream" with his crew. The story had a solid plot that was simply poorly executed.
What should have been a gritty and raw story coming of age street tale turned into a difficult to follow, chaotic diatribe filled with hardly discernible dialogue. I believe in the author's effort to draw the reader into the story by describing every single scene down and oversaturating the conversations and passages with unnecessary slang, incoherent and incomplete thoughts, he lost them.
Can this story be salvaged? Absolutely with some intense editing and an outline to clear out the chaos and add clarity.