DNF - 32%
I had a hard time with this one for so many reasons and just couldn’t finish it.
First, what adult woman you know talks to a guy online or on the phone for 2 years without EVER looking him up? Especially if they have details such as his full name, phone number, occupation, and residency. Trust me, any woman would have been looking him up inside a week or two. And her friends and brother find him in 3 days with just that information and never having talked to him?!? Come on!!
The other thing that’s preposterous is the fact that when they got to the hotel she didn’t put 2 and 2 together about where they were at. Hello!! The hotel has his last name. They’ve talked about him and that he works at a hotel. I’m sure there are signs everywhere that she could have read with the hotel name on it. You know....his name. So you mean to tell me she didn’t figure it out? This had me rolling my eyes so hard.
Second, I didn’t like the way these characters talked. Cash came across like a whiny kid sometimes for someone who was 30, had been a lawyer, and was now a business owner. Abby wasn’t any better. It didn’t feel like I was reading a book about adults at all.
Third, time was a little hard to understand. The way the book started off, I got the impression that Cash and Abby were in 2 different time zones. Later on it’s revealed that he’s in Florida and she’s in Pennsylvania. Uhm, that’s the same damn time zone. That threw me way off.
Then comes the passage of time itself. There were no pauses or breaks to demonstrate passage of time. Things are just thrown together from one sentence to the next in such a way that it made things too confusing to follow.
And lastly, the book needs a proper edit. The mistakes were getting on my nerves so much that I started editing what I read. Not exactly what you want to be doing while reading for leisure.
And let me just say, once and for all - commas matter, people. There’s a difference between:
Let’s eat grandma.
And
Let’s eat, grandma.