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After his fifth birthday, the heir of Pemberley disappears in the waters of a mighty river while the Daltons find the son they had waited for many years.
Violet and Aaron Dalton were traveling to Manchester after a pleasant family reunion in Lambton. Due to inclement weather, they had to stop at an inn in a small town. There, they found a little boy on the bank of a river. After unsuccessful efforts to find his parents, they adopted and raised the orphan boy as their son. Simultaneously, George and Anne Darcy lost their son in an unfortunate tragedy, and their lives would never be the same.
Years later, after losing the man he most admires, young William Dalton travels to London to fulfill his father's dream. There, he will find love but also a truth he is unprepared to face.
Violet and Aaron Dalton were traveling to Manchester after a pleasant family reunion in Lambton. Due to inclement weather, they had to stop at an inn in a small town. There, they found a little boy on the bank of a river. After unsuccessful efforts to find his parents, they adopted and raised the orphan boy as their son. Simultaneously, George and Anne Darcy lost their son in an unfortunate tragedy, and their lives would never be the same.
Years later, after losing the man he most admires, young William Dalton travels to London to fulfill his father's dream. There, he will find love but also a truth he is unprepared to face.
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March 27, 2024
A young Fitzwilliam Darcy is lost down a raging river and assumed dead. 20+ years later and is is a remarkable merchant with a loving adoptive family. He falls in love with Elizabeth Bennet and they must work through their young marriage and the mystery of who he really is.
March 6, 2024
A pleasant read
What I liked:
- The storyline. The main focus stayed on Darcy/Dalton and what was happening around him.
- Darcy and Elizabeth's relationship.
- A Jane and Bingley storyline that held my interest.
- An early understanding between D&E.
- Villainy did not overtake the story, nor were they over-the-top.
- A small dose of the Bennets.
-Lady Catherine makes an appearance.
- Collins is mentioned.
What I liked:
- The storyline. The main focus stayed on Darcy/Dalton and what was happening around him.
- Darcy and Elizabeth's relationship.
- A Jane and Bingley storyline that held my interest.
- An early understanding between D&E.
- Villainy did not overtake the story, nor were they over-the-top.
- A small dose of the Bennets.
-Lady Catherine makes an appearance.
- Collins is mentioned.
April 3, 2024
SPOILER ALERT: This review may contain *** SPOILERS ***
>>Rating: Mature teen: adult discussions, descriptions of injuries incurred during more than one murder attempt, and the death of a minor character. There was also treachery without and within.
>>Angst Level: Stressful due to attempts to commit murder, and to the struggles of a child caught in a fight for his life. A compromise attempt that sent the victim running for safety. The scales finally fall from the eyes of more than one deluded character. Truth won out and evil was revealed. I had to find my fainting couch after that. I thought it would never come. Gracious, it was hair-pulling and nail-biting at times, for sure.
>>Source: Borrowed from KU [2-24-24]: I volunteered to leave a review. I first read this as a WIP on the forums. I have read many of this author’s stories. There were still editing problems but the story was so engaging that I overlooked them.
>>Cover Art: The picture of the river was a good choice for the cover as it draws the eye. I could only imagine what it would look like after a series of storms had blown through the area. Many can relate to Atmospheric Rivers bringing heavy rains related to climate change. That was the prologue of the story.
>>Timeline: Pemberley had celebrated the fifth birthday of the son and heir, Fitzwilliam Darcy. A tragic event happened and the story jumped ahead twenty-two years.
>>Trope: [1] Not raised Darcy [2] NSN Jane: instead of a not-so-nice Jane, perhaps, she was a weak deluded Jane. [3] A weak, spineless, easily lead Bingley: gracious, that poor boy did not have a clue. He was out of his element on so many levels. His father wanted two things for his son… to have no connections to business [trade] and to be a landed gentleman. In other words, Bingley had no business sense or concept of paperwork or contracts and didn’t understand how to manage an estate. He was dumb as a box of rocks. Plus, he was saddled with two harpies for his sisters dragging him from pillar to post and catering to their wants.
The prologue featured Fitzwilliam Darcy as a child just after celebrating his fifth birthday. Someone attempted the unthinkable and the child was lost to his family. It would be many years before they would or could be united.
What a story. I adored the Dalton couple that raised a boy they fished out of a rain-swelled river. The poor child had been swept many miles from his home. Due to his trauma, he did not speak for some time and barely remembered part of his name.
Aaron and Violet Dalton had no children of their own. The only options for the lost child were the workhouse or being sent to an orphanage. The Daltons gladly welcomed the boy into their lives. They made every attempt to discover his identity or to find his family to no avail. They lived in Manchester and owned a fabric store. The child would be raised in the merchant class. They would live there for the next twenty-plus years. Young William would grow into a worthy and honorable young man full of industry and drive. He would make his parents proud. On his deathbed, Aaron Dalton told his son [of his heart] to continue their work of expanding their business, Dalton Import and Export, in London.
Family connections: Violet Dalton, née Watson, was aunt to Madeline Gardiner, née Watson. Dalton and Gardiner would become partners. Through Madeline, Violet met Elizabeth and Jane Bennet, who became family favorites. William and Elizabeth met when they were very young. He remembered a skinny girl who asked a lot of questions and she remembered a tall thin boy that was all legs and elbows. When they met again in London, that had all changed and it began a new journey for our dear couple.
However, this created a societal or propriety problem when William discovered that Elizabeth was the daughter of a landed gentleman whose estate had been in the family for several generations. She was too far above him to make a match. He was devastated and began to withdraw from her. That did not go over well with Miss Elizabeth and she soon expressed her sentiments on the subject. That was a turning point in the story.
Villains. Oh, my gosh! This story was full of the most conniving and evil machinations I’ve read in a while. After his mother, Wickham was front and center of the raging horde with Caroline Bingley following closely behind him. Her sister Louisa and husband Hurst were leeches perfectly willing to allow Bingley to support their extravagances. The superior sisters dragged their poor deluded brother by the nose and nearly ruined his life. While he was in Hertfordshire, he met and wed Jane Bennet. [Remember… Darcy was not there to support the sisters in their separating Bingley from his angel] From that point on, it was damage control as the sisters attempted to separate Jane from her vulgar family and connections to trade.
To add insult to injury, the weak-willed, deluded Jane followed their advice and example as she allowed them to walk all over her. I wanted to chew nails. I was furious with the silly limp-wristed ninny. She had no spine and no confidence as they turned her away from her beloved sister. If it had been Elizabeth, she would have torn them a new one. They knew Eliza’s thoughts on the matter and made sure Jane kept her distance from her sister. Jane was sure Lizzy simply misunderstood her new sisters by marriage. Life was rosy and everyone should get along. Jane would only be able to hold that thought a bit longer before her view of the world would change. This would be a psychological crisis on more than one level: Personality, confidence, and life view. She would now reevaluate her mother’s words [about her beauty] and would see her husband in a new light. Don’t even get me started on Charles Bingley—GRRR!
At some point, it all had to hit the fan. However, there was so much to expose, while delusions and misunderstandings needed to be corrected. Colonel Fitzwilliam was amazing and such a friend and cousin. Georgiana was like a leaf floating in the rapids of treachery that she could not control. Her very life, fortune, and future hung in the balance more than once. Mr. Darcy Senior was a broken man who believed in a lie and held on to the hope that his son was still alive. Lord Matlock acted out and nearly broke the family and his sister, Lady Catherine, announced her sentiments to the wrong person. She would not soon forget that experience.
Mary, Kitty, and Lydia found a new friend in Violet Dalton. She would be the making of them as the companion and de facto mother figure they needed. Even Mrs. Bennet liked her. Mr. Bennet could not be bothered to care about much of anything. Oh, he would miss his Lizzy when she married.
I enjoyed this story. Yes, there was angst, but Elizabeth and William getting together helped my nerves settle a bit. I was put out with William’s jealousy on several occasions but Elizabeth set him straight and they would be fine in the future.
It is a long story but one you can’t put down.
>>Rating: Mature teen: adult discussions, descriptions of injuries incurred during more than one murder attempt, and the death of a minor character. There was also treachery without and within.
>>Angst Level: Stressful due to attempts to commit murder, and to the struggles of a child caught in a fight for his life. A compromise attempt that sent the victim running for safety. The scales finally fall from the eyes of more than one deluded character. Truth won out and evil was revealed. I had to find my fainting couch after that. I thought it would never come. Gracious, it was hair-pulling and nail-biting at times, for sure.
>>Source: Borrowed from KU [2-24-24]: I volunteered to leave a review. I first read this as a WIP on the forums. I have read many of this author’s stories. There were still editing problems but the story was so engaging that I overlooked them.
>>Cover Art: The picture of the river was a good choice for the cover as it draws the eye. I could only imagine what it would look like after a series of storms had blown through the area. Many can relate to Atmospheric Rivers bringing heavy rains related to climate change. That was the prologue of the story.
>>Timeline: Pemberley had celebrated the fifth birthday of the son and heir, Fitzwilliam Darcy. A tragic event happened and the story jumped ahead twenty-two years.
>>Trope: [1] Not raised Darcy [2] NSN Jane: instead of a not-so-nice Jane, perhaps, she was a weak deluded Jane. [3] A weak, spineless, easily lead Bingley: gracious, that poor boy did not have a clue. He was out of his element on so many levels. His father wanted two things for his son… to have no connections to business [trade] and to be a landed gentleman. In other words, Bingley had no business sense or concept of paperwork or contracts and didn’t understand how to manage an estate. He was dumb as a box of rocks. Plus, he was saddled with two harpies for his sisters dragging him from pillar to post and catering to their wants.
The prologue featured Fitzwilliam Darcy as a child just after celebrating his fifth birthday. Someone attempted the unthinkable and the child was lost to his family. It would be many years before they would or could be united.
What a story. I adored the Dalton couple that raised a boy they fished out of a rain-swelled river. The poor child had been swept many miles from his home. Due to his trauma, he did not speak for some time and barely remembered part of his name.
Aaron and Violet Dalton had no children of their own. The only options for the lost child were the workhouse or being sent to an orphanage. The Daltons gladly welcomed the boy into their lives. They made every attempt to discover his identity or to find his family to no avail. They lived in Manchester and owned a fabric store. The child would be raised in the merchant class. They would live there for the next twenty-plus years. Young William would grow into a worthy and honorable young man full of industry and drive. He would make his parents proud. On his deathbed, Aaron Dalton told his son [of his heart] to continue their work of expanding their business, Dalton Import and Export, in London.
Family connections: Violet Dalton, née Watson, was aunt to Madeline Gardiner, née Watson. Dalton and Gardiner would become partners. Through Madeline, Violet met Elizabeth and Jane Bennet, who became family favorites. William and Elizabeth met when they were very young. He remembered a skinny girl who asked a lot of questions and she remembered a tall thin boy that was all legs and elbows. When they met again in London, that had all changed and it began a new journey for our dear couple.
However, this created a societal or propriety problem when William discovered that Elizabeth was the daughter of a landed gentleman whose estate had been in the family for several generations. She was too far above him to make a match. He was devastated and began to withdraw from her. That did not go over well with Miss Elizabeth and she soon expressed her sentiments on the subject. That was a turning point in the story.
Villains. Oh, my gosh! This story was full of the most conniving and evil machinations I’ve read in a while. After his mother, Wickham was front and center of the raging horde with Caroline Bingley following closely behind him. Her sister Louisa and husband Hurst were leeches perfectly willing to allow Bingley to support their extravagances. The superior sisters dragged their poor deluded brother by the nose and nearly ruined his life. While he was in Hertfordshire, he met and wed Jane Bennet. [Remember… Darcy was not there to support the sisters in their separating Bingley from his angel] From that point on, it was damage control as the sisters attempted to separate Jane from her vulgar family and connections to trade.
To add insult to injury, the weak-willed, deluded Jane followed their advice and example as she allowed them to walk all over her. I wanted to chew nails. I was furious with the silly limp-wristed ninny. She had no spine and no confidence as they turned her away from her beloved sister. If it had been Elizabeth, she would have torn them a new one. They knew Eliza’s thoughts on the matter and made sure Jane kept her distance from her sister. Jane was sure Lizzy simply misunderstood her new sisters by marriage. Life was rosy and everyone should get along. Jane would only be able to hold that thought a bit longer before her view of the world would change. This would be a psychological crisis on more than one level: Personality, confidence, and life view. She would now reevaluate her mother’s words [about her beauty] and would see her husband in a new light. Don’t even get me started on Charles Bingley—GRRR!
At some point, it all had to hit the fan. However, there was so much to expose, while delusions and misunderstandings needed to be corrected. Colonel Fitzwilliam was amazing and such a friend and cousin. Georgiana was like a leaf floating in the rapids of treachery that she could not control. Her very life, fortune, and future hung in the balance more than once. Mr. Darcy Senior was a broken man who believed in a lie and held on to the hope that his son was still alive. Lord Matlock acted out and nearly broke the family and his sister, Lady Catherine, announced her sentiments to the wrong person. She would not soon forget that experience.
Mary, Kitty, and Lydia found a new friend in Violet Dalton. She would be the making of them as the companion and de facto mother figure they needed. Even Mrs. Bennet liked her. Mr. Bennet could not be bothered to care about much of anything. Oh, he would miss his Lizzy when she married.
I enjoyed this story. Yes, there was angst, but Elizabeth and William getting together helped my nerves settle a bit. I was put out with William’s jealousy on several occasions but Elizabeth set him straight and they would be fine in the future.
It is a long story but one you can’t put down.
February 23, 2024
Missing
The story starts with a horrific crime being committed. Mrs. Wickham wants everything Darcy. She just has to figure out how to get rid of Lady Anne and Fitzwilliam. Well, Fitzwilliam is easy enough, but as she throws him into the rain swollen river, the five year old grabs her skirt. She is drowned, but he is washed downstream twenty miles away and found on the river bank clinging to a tree branch by Violet Dalton. Unfortunately, her degenerate son, George, learned all of her despicable behaviors of greed, manipulation , and deception. Violet and her husband, Aaron raised their adopted son, William, to be a strong man of principle. The Daltons were related to the Gardiners so when Aaron dies, William shores up his father’s business ventures in Manchester to open another branch in London. There he meets the lovely Elizabeth Bennet the Gardinders’ niece. Falls in love quickly, but pulls back when he finds out that she is the daughter of land owner and not a tradesman’s daughter. She’s hurt by his sudden withdrawal, but manages to write him a letter about her real life at Longbourn. His mother convinces him to go to Meryton and fight for Lizzy. He is wealthy tradesman, and Caroline would have jumped at the chance to snap him away from Lizzy if he was anything other than a tradesman. He wins over Mr. Bennet’s doubts, because of Mrs. Bennet’s insistence. In this story, Wickham knows the Bingleys and they have wormed their way into Darcy Sr. circle, but not quite. Dalton eventually runs into the Darcy family through his business dealings with Colonel Fitzwilliam. Dreams and nightmares begin to appear as Lizzy helps him through his childhood struggles. Violet decides to approach Mr. Darcy with the gold necklace found with William, and the rest is history. Throughout the story, Richard tries to convince his uncle of Wickham’s perfidy, but he’s blind to his godson’s true faults. Jane was engaged to Bingley in the very beginning of the story, but Caroline has manipulated her to fit her mold and she breaks with Lizzy. Jealous of
Lizzy when she finds herself betrothed to William who sets her straight more than once for speaking again this Lizzy. Jealousy continues to grow, because Bingley has no backbone and in several instances would have lost a great deal of money had he not requested Dalton’s help. Caroline convinces Jane to tell her sister to stop her husband interference with Bingley’s business, and when Dalton goes to Manchester on business Bingley asks Gardiner. Gardiner realizes that Bingley is weak and Jane is extremely unhappy with her marriage. When Dalton is finally recognized as the Darcy heir, Lord Matlock oversteps his authority and Dalton almost comes to blows. Tempers calm, but Caroline decides that he will be hers, the Earl already plans to use his money, Lady Catherine decides he’ll put his wife somewhere in Scotland and marry her daughter Anne, and George Wickham who has been basically disowned by Darcy Senior wants revenge. None of them realize what a man the Daltons raised. As I finished the book, I couldn’t get over the fact that when Wickham tries to shoot Darcy, but stopped by Lizzy who is shot instead , he’s not hung. Should have been for all he tried throughout the story. Darcy manages Pemberley and his father’s businesses perfectly. In the end, Fitzwilliam (William) Dalton Darcy had a mother and father that loved him very much, his beloved wife that was expecting their first child, a loving sister, three loving sister-in-laws, his beloved cousin Richard, a prosperous Pemberley, and two thriving businesses. Even his mother in law was accepted.
The story starts with a horrific crime being committed. Mrs. Wickham wants everything Darcy. She just has to figure out how to get rid of Lady Anne and Fitzwilliam. Well, Fitzwilliam is easy enough, but as she throws him into the rain swollen river, the five year old grabs her skirt. She is drowned, but he is washed downstream twenty miles away and found on the river bank clinging to a tree branch by Violet Dalton. Unfortunately, her degenerate son, George, learned all of her despicable behaviors of greed, manipulation , and deception. Violet and her husband, Aaron raised their adopted son, William, to be a strong man of principle. The Daltons were related to the Gardiners so when Aaron dies, William shores up his father’s business ventures in Manchester to open another branch in London. There he meets the lovely Elizabeth Bennet the Gardinders’ niece. Falls in love quickly, but pulls back when he finds out that she is the daughter of land owner and not a tradesman’s daughter. She’s hurt by his sudden withdrawal, but manages to write him a letter about her real life at Longbourn. His mother convinces him to go to Meryton and fight for Lizzy. He is wealthy tradesman, and Caroline would have jumped at the chance to snap him away from Lizzy if he was anything other than a tradesman. He wins over Mr. Bennet’s doubts, because of Mrs. Bennet’s insistence. In this story, Wickham knows the Bingleys and they have wormed their way into Darcy Sr. circle, but not quite. Dalton eventually runs into the Darcy family through his business dealings with Colonel Fitzwilliam. Dreams and nightmares begin to appear as Lizzy helps him through his childhood struggles. Violet decides to approach Mr. Darcy with the gold necklace found with William, and the rest is history. Throughout the story, Richard tries to convince his uncle of Wickham’s perfidy, but he’s blind to his godson’s true faults. Jane was engaged to Bingley in the very beginning of the story, but Caroline has manipulated her to fit her mold and she breaks with Lizzy. Jealous of
Lizzy when she finds herself betrothed to William who sets her straight more than once for speaking again this Lizzy. Jealousy continues to grow, because Bingley has no backbone and in several instances would have lost a great deal of money had he not requested Dalton’s help. Caroline convinces Jane to tell her sister to stop her husband interference with Bingley’s business, and when Dalton goes to Manchester on business Bingley asks Gardiner. Gardiner realizes that Bingley is weak and Jane is extremely unhappy with her marriage. When Dalton is finally recognized as the Darcy heir, Lord Matlock oversteps his authority and Dalton almost comes to blows. Tempers calm, but Caroline decides that he will be hers, the Earl already plans to use his money, Lady Catherine decides he’ll put his wife somewhere in Scotland and marry her daughter Anne, and George Wickham who has been basically disowned by Darcy Senior wants revenge. None of them realize what a man the Daltons raised. As I finished the book, I couldn’t get over the fact that when Wickham tries to shoot Darcy, but stopped by Lizzy who is shot instead , he’s not hung. Should have been for all he tried throughout the story. Darcy manages Pemberley and his father’s businesses perfectly. In the end, Fitzwilliam (William) Dalton Darcy had a mother and father that loved him very much, his beloved wife that was expecting their first child, a loving sister, three loving sister-in-laws, his beloved cousin Richard, a prosperous Pemberley, and two thriving businesses. Even his mother in law was accepted.
August 30, 2024
This story was very good. I did not want to put it down until I finished it. Unfortunately it still needs some serious editing as there is quite a few places where words like "not" were missing, which completely changed the meaning of the sentence and was obviously missing. They appeared enough times that it took away from my enjoyment of the book. It would have been a five star book to me had there not been editing misses.
April 28, 2025
I read this originally in spanish on FFN (through google translate...eek) - that should tell you something. Miranda Flan does know how to tell a story.
Imagine Darcy raised by a good loving genteel merchant class couple (much like the Gardiners). A Darcy who knows that *he* is below Elizabeth on the social ladder (once he learns that she is a gentlewoman). A Bingley who never met nor was mentored by Darcy, but was befriended by Wickham. Throw in a live Mr. Darcy Sr. and watch the drama unfold.
Reread 2025: But ... while the bones of the story is a 4*, the writing at best is - awkward which brought it down to a 3* on this reread for me. It needs an editor. Hard to tell that whether awkwardness comes from being ESL or if it's just awkward.
Imagine Darcy raised by a good loving genteel merchant class couple (much like the Gardiners). A Darcy who knows that *he* is below Elizabeth on the social ladder (once he learns that she is a gentlewoman). A Bingley who never met nor was mentored by Darcy, but was befriended by Wickham. Throw in a live Mr. Darcy Sr. and watch the drama unfold.
Reread 2025: But ... while the bones of the story is a 4*, the writing at best is - awkward which brought it down to a 3* on this reread for me. It needs an editor. Hard to tell that whether awkwardness comes from being ESL or if it's just awkward.
April 14, 2024
An emotional tale
I enjoyed this book and the twists in it. Interesting new characters and a most imaginative plot. Lovely relationship between our beloved couple.
I enjoyed this book and the twists in it. Interesting new characters and a most imaginative plot. Lovely relationship between our beloved couple.
March 26, 2024
Difficult to be kind
It takes a great deal of effort and courage to publish a story. The author rather needed to put more into the effort before using her courage to publish.
Plot, dialog, pacing, viewpoint, and characterizations are all inconsistent in terms of consistency in the quality of execution.
The premise is interesting and does hook one's interest. But poor grammar, particularly in regards to word choice (saw/seen, was/wasn't, impudent/imprudent, week/weak, exclusive/extensive, importune/importunate, inherited/bequested, pose/poise) is the dominant feature. There are many sentences where context implies the opposite of what has been written. There are even sentences, particularly in the wrapping up, that make no sense at all, ie one has absolutely no idea what the author is trying to say as the words do not convey a coherent thought. Wrong gendered pronouns or incorrect names of subject show clear loss of viewpoint.
Yes, I stuck through to the end. Yes, there is good storytelling scattered amidst the problems. But overall, it is a very unsatisfying experience.
It takes a great deal of effort and courage to publish a story. The author rather needed to put more into the effort before using her courage to publish.
Plot, dialog, pacing, viewpoint, and characterizations are all inconsistent in terms of consistency in the quality of execution.
The premise is interesting and does hook one's interest. But poor grammar, particularly in regards to word choice (saw/seen, was/wasn't, impudent/imprudent, week/weak, exclusive/extensive, importune/importunate, inherited/bequested, pose/poise) is the dominant feature. There are many sentences where context implies the opposite of what has been written. There are even sentences, particularly in the wrapping up, that make no sense at all, ie one has absolutely no idea what the author is trying to say as the words do not convey a coherent thought. Wrong gendered pronouns or incorrect names of subject show clear loss of viewpoint.
Yes, I stuck through to the end. Yes, there is good storytelling scattered amidst the problems. But overall, it is a very unsatisfying experience.
August 8, 2024
William and Elizabeth’s love for each other
This is the first story I have read by this author. I enjoyed the premise and the story. There were some things that a good editor could have tightened up the story and helped with a few grammar errors. It is a long story, but actually read fairly quickly. I absolutely love Violet Dalton. She is an amazing lady who just is loving and wants to help everyone around her. Those that are truly exposed to her can see her for the wonderful lady she is and just the subtle things that she says and does makes an immense difference in this story compared to Canon. Overall, this is a love story between William and Elizabeth. They do have their bumps in the road, especially as they both learn to communicate with each other but thankfully, these are not major hindrances in their life. This story is different than Canon right out of the gate as Fitzwilliam Darcy is lost down a river and presumed dead. Thankfully, he is adopted by a family who loves and cherishes him, helping him to grow up with excellent morals and character. Darcy‘s father is still alive, Georgiana, even more sheltered and protected. Bingley is even more of a puppy following others, and that causes its own issues as he and Jane struggle with those around them who manipulate for their own selfish needs. There is much growth in this story, some realistic, some not. William has many insecurities that he deals with as the story progresses, but thankfully his love for Elizabeth and his mother Violet shine through.
This is the first story I have read by this author. I enjoyed the premise and the story. There were some things that a good editor could have tightened up the story and helped with a few grammar errors. It is a long story, but actually read fairly quickly. I absolutely love Violet Dalton. She is an amazing lady who just is loving and wants to help everyone around her. Those that are truly exposed to her can see her for the wonderful lady she is and just the subtle things that she says and does makes an immense difference in this story compared to Canon. Overall, this is a love story between William and Elizabeth. They do have their bumps in the road, especially as they both learn to communicate with each other but thankfully, these are not major hindrances in their life. This story is different than Canon right out of the gate as Fitzwilliam Darcy is lost down a river and presumed dead. Thankfully, he is adopted by a family who loves and cherishes him, helping him to grow up with excellent morals and character. Darcy‘s father is still alive, Georgiana, even more sheltered and protected. Bingley is even more of a puppy following others, and that causes its own issues as he and Jane struggle with those around them who manipulate for their own selfish needs. There is much growth in this story, some realistic, some not. William has many insecurities that he deals with as the story progresses, but thankfully his love for Elizabeth and his mother Violet shine through.
March 13, 2024
5* story with 1* editing! Beautiful story, but the editing is SO VERY BAD!!! Missed words, added words, words that just make no since....wrong pronouns and for the love of GOD, PLEASE learn the difference between Woman and Women!!!!! I never write negative review, but this story was too good to be saddled with the atrocious editing! If I sound too harsh, it because this story deserved better.
Note to author: if you paid someone to edit this book, you need to seek a refund. No way could a good (even slightly good) editor miss all the errors.
Note to author: if you paid someone to edit this book, you need to seek a refund. No way could a good (even slightly good) editor miss all the errors.
May 21, 2024
Didn't get past page 4.
A non word on page 4, "imponent", was used. I thought at that point, first chapter, we're just starting here. Did no one proofread? Or even spell check? You'd think at least a few people would have read it, if not multiple times, prio to publishing! This is when I look at the number of pages, as well as read some of the reviews. I really wonder how it got so many high ratings. I don't expect perfection, but there's no way I'm going to slog through 500+ pages when all of the reviews say it requires proofreading.
A non word on page 4, "imponent", was used. I thought at that point, first chapter, we're just starting here. Did no one proofread? Or even spell check? You'd think at least a few people would have read it, if not multiple times, prio to publishing! This is when I look at the number of pages, as well as read some of the reviews. I really wonder how it got so many high ratings. I don't expect perfection, but there's no way I'm going to slog through 500+ pages when all of the reviews say it requires proofreading.
March 26, 2024
Entertaining read
Interesting variation with a good concept of the lost Darcy heir. I enjoyed the story, but ...
The being said, the typos are numerous and in need of a proof reader or at the least for the author to edit and republish. First, if you are using Word, turn on grammar and spelling; have Word read it to you and you can find numerous errors that way; or get someone to proof it for you by perhaps joining a writes group, then republish it.
Interesting variation with a good concept of the lost Darcy heir. I enjoyed the story, but ...
The being said, the typos are numerous and in need of a proof reader or at the least for the author to edit and republish. First, if you are using Word, turn on grammar and spelling; have Word read it to you and you can find numerous errors that way; or get someone to proof it for you by perhaps joining a writes group, then republish it.
April 8, 2024
An utter lack of editing
Good plot kept me struggling through the dreadful lack of editing until the end but it was a near thing. I almost gave up on it several times. The pronouns are a mess and some sentences were difficult to unravel. I'm sure this is a translation from another language. It contains many phrases that are too modern for the time yet too outdated for English readers.
Good plot kept me struggling through the dreadful lack of editing until the end but it was a near thing. I almost gave up on it several times. The pronouns are a mess and some sentences were difficult to unravel. I'm sure this is a translation from another language. It contains many phrases that are too modern for the time yet too outdated for English readers.
April 18, 2024
A soap opera needing a good edit and proofreader!
This book reads like a soap opera That could use a good edit. If you want to Erase your time Waiting through the book, well, it's your life. The premise Is good, A book Through the looking glass Of A Darcy Raise In a very different environment. How does that affect ODC's relationship? Somewhere in this book as you wade through the redundancy and the poor proofreading of the story you will find the author's answer.
This book reads like a soap opera That could use a good edit. If you want to Erase your time Waiting through the book, well, it's your life. The premise Is good, A book Through the looking glass Of A Darcy Raise In a very different environment. How does that affect ODC's relationship? Somewhere in this book as you wade through the redundancy and the poor proofreading of the story you will find the author's answer.
February 22, 2024
needs a lot of editing and a rewrite
The plot of the book is sound enough, but the way it’s written is not good - grammar, sentence structure, spelling and many other items need to be addressed. If this was given to an editor it would benefit greatly, and reissue an updated version. Not worth buying if you can get it through your kindle membership
The plot of the book is sound enough, but the way it’s written is not good - grammar, sentence structure, spelling and many other items need to be addressed. If this was given to an editor it would benefit greatly, and reissue an updated version. Not worth buying if you can get it through your kindle membership
March 8, 2024
Five Stars….with one proviso.
I enjoyed this story very much.
However, there are an inordinate number of errors which never should have made it through editing or proofreaders. Errors in grammar as well as the misnaming of characters alluded to in dialog.
I hope future endeavors to correct this off putting problem are successful.
I enjoyed this story very much.
However, there are an inordinate number of errors which never should have made it through editing or proofreaders. Errors in grammar as well as the misnaming of characters alluded to in dialog.
I hope future endeavors to correct this off putting problem are successful.
February 13, 2024
Interesting storyline
I enjoyed this story, the "missing Fitzwilliam Darcy" trope. It had some interesting twists, a really awful Wickham, horrible Bingley sisters and several new characters. I took a star off because there is a serious need of an editor.
I enjoyed this story, the "missing Fitzwilliam Darcy" trope. It had some interesting twists, a really awful Wickham, horrible Bingley sisters and several new characters. I took a star off because there is a serious need of an editor.
March 24, 2024
I am reader not a writer.
This the best book I have reading a long time. It was. Moving an never boring. Any p&p fan will love this book. It took me 2 days to read this book, I couldn't put down. Your ending wasn't to long, but full of details. Wow wow wow good job. D.Cooper.
This the best book I have reading a long time. It was. Moving an never boring. Any p&p fan will love this book. It took me 2 days to read this book, I couldn't put down. Your ending wasn't to long, but full of details. Wow wow wow good job. D.Cooper.
March 29, 2024
Hopefully an unprovoked version
Released in error. Spelling, tense, pronoun agreement, etymological inaccuracies, and much, much, much, much repetition. Did I mention that the author repeats and repeats? The story is intriguing but too long.
Released in error. Spelling, tense, pronoun agreement, etymological inaccuracies, and much, much, much, much repetition. Did I mention that the author repeats and repeats? The story is intriguing but too long.
April 2, 2024
Heartbreak
Very heartbreaking for Darcy to go missing at the age of 5. It is a wonder he remembers anything.
Fortunate that his mom is related to the Gardeners.
What a road they had to travel.
Very heartbreaking for Darcy to go missing at the age of 5. It is a wonder he remembers anything.
Fortunate that his mom is related to the Gardeners.
What a road they had to travel.
April 8, 2024
Great Story
Great book. A page Turner for sure. I really enjoy a Pride and Prejudice variation that is outside the box! This is a story I would definitely read again. Thank you Ms. Flan for the wonderful entertainment.
Great book. A page Turner for sure. I really enjoy a Pride and Prejudice variation that is outside the box! This is a story I would definitely read again. Thank you Ms. Flan for the wonderful entertainment.
June 10, 2024
should be finding Darcy
Very interesting twist to our normal P&P version. Really hated Caroline in this one.
Kept me wondering what was gonna happen next. Will read again sometime.
Very interesting twist to our normal P&P version. Really hated Caroline in this one.
Kept me wondering what was gonna happen next. Will read again sometime.
July 7, 2024
Enjoyable plot but too difficult to read with all of the grammatical errors.
Jane and Bingley were hopeless in this variation. I nearly hoped he made a bad decision that led to financial ruin.
Jane and Bingley were hopeless in this variation. I nearly hoped he made a bad decision that led to financial ruin.
December 6, 2024
3.5 stars rounded to 4. This is a great story with well-developed characters. The writing is very good at telling a story. Unfortunately the errors in grammar are distracting. At times the writing is a bit stilted which means the story isn't quite as absorbing as it could be.
I recommend this both for the general reader of Regency era fiction and JAFF lovers.
I recommend this both for the general reader of Regency era fiction and JAFF lovers.
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