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If This Is Wrong
As children, Thomas and Caleb formed an unlikely friendship, which has continued through tragedies and celebrations and into manhood. They have grown together over the years, but now their relationship is changing into something more. Can their bond survive the challenges that life will bring them? Is it wrong to risk everything for the chance of something more?
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First published October 21, 2013
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October 26, 2013
This novella follows two main characters from when they meet as children, on through to adulthood. In that time, they become friends and eventually more while facing the trials and tribulations of adolescence. Given that my rating on this one is a little harsher than I what normally give, I want to start off by emphasizing the sheer potential of this story. I love the premise, just wish the execution had been better.
I’m a nit-picky reader; it comes from the editor side of me that is always reading with an eye to catch errors. I know this and acknowledge it; I even try to put that side of me to the backburner when reading for pleasure, however, the ARC I was given in exchange for an honest review left me hoping that a much cleaner, more polished version of this story made it to print. I don’t want to harp on the negative, but the following are the issues I had with this particular piece:
• Point of view and tense slips
• Overuse of character’s FULL names; once is enough, yet it seemed like the characters were using full names (including middle) at least once a chapter. There is such thing as too much.
• Uncertain as to the setting. We are told the story takes place in the small town of Buckland Falls; I have no idea if this is a real or made up place. What I do know, is that for the majority of the story, it has an American feel, yet there are several instances of British spellings and terminology (i.e. ‘reception’ for attendance office, ‘time table’ for class schedule, ‘Form teacher’ – I think for what we know as English teachers, and the mention of tenth graders still having recess?) that tripped up my reading flow.
• The pacing of the story felt scattered to me; it was hard to keep up, and there were some major milestones in the boys’ lives that I seemed to miss. I was reading along, and suddenly time-jumped forward to a whole new dynamic. Perhaps it was just me?
• And lastly, while it may be a minor thing, it just threw me for a loop. The story closes with an exchange of endearments in Italian. Not once in the whole story is the reader ever given any reason to understand why the story would close that way, or what the importance would be. The characters aren’t from Italy, there was no mention of a fondness for all things Italian, the boys didn’t take the language in school, they weren’t raised by an Italian nanny . . . I’m just at a loss for why the foreign language was used.
Again, the idea behind the story is fantastic. I would love to see Platt take this one back to the ‘drawing board’ and flesh it out, polish it up, and really make it shine. ~R.E. Hargrave
*I was given an ARC in exchange for an honest review*
I’m a nit-picky reader; it comes from the editor side of me that is always reading with an eye to catch errors. I know this and acknowledge it; I even try to put that side of me to the backburner when reading for pleasure, however, the ARC I was given in exchange for an honest review left me hoping that a much cleaner, more polished version of this story made it to print. I don’t want to harp on the negative, but the following are the issues I had with this particular piece:
• Point of view and tense slips
• Overuse of character’s FULL names; once is enough, yet it seemed like the characters were using full names (including middle) at least once a chapter. There is such thing as too much.
• Uncertain as to the setting. We are told the story takes place in the small town of Buckland Falls; I have no idea if this is a real or made up place. What I do know, is that for the majority of the story, it has an American feel, yet there are several instances of British spellings and terminology (i.e. ‘reception’ for attendance office, ‘time table’ for class schedule, ‘Form teacher’ – I think for what we know as English teachers, and the mention of tenth graders still having recess?) that tripped up my reading flow.
• The pacing of the story felt scattered to me; it was hard to keep up, and there were some major milestones in the boys’ lives that I seemed to miss. I was reading along, and suddenly time-jumped forward to a whole new dynamic. Perhaps it was just me?
• And lastly, while it may be a minor thing, it just threw me for a loop. The story closes with an exchange of endearments in Italian. Not once in the whole story is the reader ever given any reason to understand why the story would close that way, or what the importance would be. The characters aren’t from Italy, there was no mention of a fondness for all things Italian, the boys didn’t take the language in school, they weren’t raised by an Italian nanny . . . I’m just at a loss for why the foreign language was used.
Again, the idea behind the story is fantastic. I would love to see Platt take this one back to the ‘drawing board’ and flesh it out, polish it up, and really make it shine. ~R.E. Hargrave
*I was given an ARC in exchange for an honest review*
October 23, 2013
Best friend becoming lovers, such a great story. The best kind of relationships come from friendship, we have trust, loyalty and everything needed, K. L. Platt takes us on a literacy journey to show us love though HER eyes. I'm not a fan of the third person POV for this story because it came cross a little jumbled, but all in all a good story,
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