Rivals

Evan Falls Trilogy #1

by Maggie Shaw

Willow is sent away to Evan Falls and finds that all is not what it seems.

41 pages, Kindle Edition

First published September 17, 2011

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Maggie Shaw - Fiction, Paranormal, Mystery

Reviews

[A Voracious Reader (a.k.a. Carol) · Rating 1 out of 5]

Willow Guggenheim is sent to live with her aunt, uncle and cousin because her mother hates her and wishes she was never born. Ok, I’m not sure if her mother hates her or wishes she was never born, but that’s the impression Willow gives in her bratty, woe-is-me, I’m so misunderstood and I’m entitled to the world attitude.

I’m not sure where to even start with this review. This short story is a mess. Ok, I guess I did know where to start. I’m not even sure heavy editing could save this story. Spelling, punctuation, sentence structure all need a complete overhaul. Dialogue is stilted, descriptions are half-hearted and the characters are below one-dimensional which I didn’t know was possible. The author can’t decide if the characters hate each other or if they could be friends. There is no back story, no front story, no story, period.

The main character, Willow, is the kind of teen I want to either smack upside the head or send to a military school. What little description of her there is paints her as a brat of the first order with no redeemable characteristics. I can’t stand her. All of the characters in this story are so shallow that if they were a grave no cadaver dog would be needed to find them. The abrupt ending, instead of being intriguing, was like being smacked in the face with a 2x4 giving one a sense of relief that you would be knocked unconsious for the next installment.

I can’t recommend this story to anyone except a proofreader and/or editor who can fix the errors and help fill in all the bare spots.

[Chrissy · Rating 1 out of 5]

I don't even know what to say, except that there was obviously no proofreading done on this story. And, I get that it's a series, but stopping the story in pretty much mid-sentence to say "to be continued" just doesn't work for me. The story didn't make enough sense for me to want to continue anyways, unfortunately...

[Carolyn F. · Rating 2 out of 5]

I categorized this book as a mystery because I can't figure it out. This book was chock full of spelling errors. So, Maggie, please use a program that has spell check. The scenes were choppy and very hard to understand. There is some kind of danger going on but it's hard to figure it out.