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Mr. Wrong and the Rats Reloaded: Sweet Ray, Sonya, Shuntay & Tina
Have you ever met a person and from the onset, you knew there was something absolutely wrong with them?
According to Ebony Brown’s first assessment of Raymond White, he was one such person. And his hood rat trustees, Shuntay, Sonya and Tina, she was convinced had the self esteem of a rice cake.
Truth is, some folks are ruined before they’re even old enough to take responsibility for themselves. So when they view their own lives as fucked up, they can’t find worth in the lives of others.
That was Raymond White. Not only did his mother deem him a wasted birth but from an early age, he seemed determined to prove himself to be just that.
The self proclaimed, sweet Ray was always claiming something he wasn’t and would never be. And he was always going after something he could never have. By the time he was a teenager, his warped sense of worth, paired with advice from his less then stellar followers, convinced him that he was untouchable. He wanted Ebony from first sight but she wasn’t having it. So, he started plotting on how he could have her. Willingly or not.
Raymond proves why arrogance and low self esteem combined, are a recipe for disaster. And that’s exactly what him, Shuntay, Sonya and Tina had shopped for, when they plotted an attack to ruin Miss Ebony “baby girl” Brown.
Ebony’s man was Anthony “Ajay” Jackson. The rats were infatuated highly with him and that made Raymond jealous and more determined that he should have Ajay’s girl. Though Ajay warned him not to go near her, Raymond decided to ignore those warnings. That set him on a deadly course. Raymond had harmed others in the past and gotten away with it. That made him think he was invincible. He went through with his mission to steal Ajay’s heaven. From that day on, he was living in his last days.
Some warnings should be heeded and when someone tells you they aren’t interested in you, you would be wise to adhere to those wishes. But if you’re going to fuck with Ajay’s girl, then get casket sharp. For he and his crew’s every waking moment, will be spent trying to see your last moments.
Find out what happened with Raymond before Ebony’s attack, how the crew learned of Sweet Ray’s whereabouts and what finally happened to the rats.
According to Ebony Brown’s first assessment of Raymond White, he was one such person. And his hood rat trustees, Shuntay, Sonya and Tina, she was convinced had the self esteem of a rice cake.
Truth is, some folks are ruined before they’re even old enough to take responsibility for themselves. So when they view their own lives as fucked up, they can’t find worth in the lives of others.
That was Raymond White. Not only did his mother deem him a wasted birth but from an early age, he seemed determined to prove himself to be just that.
The self proclaimed, sweet Ray was always claiming something he wasn’t and would never be. And he was always going after something he could never have. By the time he was a teenager, his warped sense of worth, paired with advice from his less then stellar followers, convinced him that he was untouchable. He wanted Ebony from first sight but she wasn’t having it. So, he started plotting on how he could have her. Willingly or not.
Raymond proves why arrogance and low self esteem combined, are a recipe for disaster. And that’s exactly what him, Shuntay, Sonya and Tina had shopped for, when they plotted an attack to ruin Miss Ebony “baby girl” Brown.
Ebony’s man was Anthony “Ajay” Jackson. The rats were infatuated highly with him and that made Raymond jealous and more determined that he should have Ajay’s girl. Though Ajay warned him not to go near her, Raymond decided to ignore those warnings. That set him on a deadly course. Raymond had harmed others in the past and gotten away with it. That made him think he was invincible. He went through with his mission to steal Ajay’s heaven. From that day on, he was living in his last days.
Some warnings should be heeded and when someone tells you they aren’t interested in you, you would be wise to adhere to those wishes. But if you’re going to fuck with Ajay’s girl, then get casket sharp. For he and his crew’s every waking moment, will be spent trying to see your last moments.
Find out what happened with Raymond before Ebony’s attack, how the crew learned of Sweet Ray’s whereabouts and what finally happened to the rats.
88 pages, Nook
First published July 26, 2011
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February 3, 2014
Hmmm . . . it’s definitely an urban fiction story. That's for sure! And I realize there is a raw and dark tone to writing this style of literary work; however, it would've helped to alert its readers of the sensitive language (from the onset). In any case, for those readers who embrace that genre set, this may be an interesting read for you. For myself, it was a bit rough reading through this tale but I stuck to it. Kept reading hoping the makeup and presentation would show improvement. I was sure there was something good (if not great) behind the story. And it was! Certainly, there is a plot running among the pages. It just needs to be elevated a bit more (for visibility). Now, with improvement on the next go around, this would make for a much deeper storyline and a greater read. And once refined, there is a finished mixture of all the things a decent story is comprised of.
In its present condition, while thumbing through the pages, it lacked characterization and scene development, contained several grammatical errors, and the keen eyes of its proofreaders. Guess thou, I was looking for more of those “show me’s” rather than the many tell me’s. Much as I was rooting for this author to give us a promising read, (between the flaws) it didn't shine. And as we know, writing period is not an easy task. Therefore, I applaud this author for her effort in presenting this particular story.
In its present condition, while thumbing through the pages, it lacked characterization and scene development, contained several grammatical errors, and the keen eyes of its proofreaders. Guess thou, I was looking for more of those “show me’s” rather than the many tell me’s. Much as I was rooting for this author to give us a promising read, (between the flaws) it didn't shine. And as we know, writing period is not an easy task. Therefore, I applaud this author for her effort in presenting this particular story.
July 15, 2012
I wanted to like it. I couldn't.
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December 28, 2014
He has done it again
I love this book as well as the others can't wait to read more from this talented great author black coffee is the best
I love this book as well as the others can't wait to read more from this talented great author black coffee is the best
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