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She keeps having her characters do things that have no baring on the plot and nothing to do with the scene. "He lifts his leg up, bends it at the knee, and starts fiddling with his sock. It's argyle, a grandpa kind of sock, and looks soft, like cashmere ... He lets go of his sock and stands on two feet again." So, he held his sock while balancing on one leg and carried on a conversation? Awkward AND pointless.
Mar 09, 2011 11:55PM
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What a load of sappy melodramatic teen horsepucky. I am ashamed that I spent even the few hours it took to read this book. Horrible characters + terrible writing + absurd plot = shittiest book I read in 2011.
Mar 12, 2011 03:01AM
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Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror)
Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror) is on page 190 of 264
Daaaang, she's just killing people left and right! But how come the way they die has to be so crazily dramatic to the point of absurdity? I probably shouldn't laugh at these parts, but there just isn't any tension or emotion in any of these scenes. And these people are dying so she can find her boyfriend, whom she's known for all of, what, a few months? This is just ... just ... dumb.
Mar 10, 2011 11:13PM
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Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror)
Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror) is on page 187 of 264
"My heart falls out along with my stomach." Yeah, see, I said you should go see a doctor! Stuff should not be falling out.
Mar 10, 2011 11:09PM
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Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror)
Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror) is on page 175 of 264
"Something in my face must show my fear, because he throws his hand and rails off the side of the couch. He staggers toward me before falling on his knees in front of me." That's not melodramatic or anything.
Mar 10, 2011 11:07PM
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Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror)
Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror) is on page 140 of 264
"'You still do not trust me?' His face is a broken branch." Um, no. I see what you were going for, but that does not work. You could say his face is like a broken branch, and even though that would still be strange, it would make more sense.
Mar 10, 2011 08:39PM
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Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror)
Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror) is on page 103 of 264
Argh. She's squeeing again. And with that, I'm done for the night.
Mar 09, 2011 11:57PM
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Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror)
Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror) is on page 83 of 264
So, someone just got eaten by a giant wolf. This was both strangely anti-climatic and comical. Samuel L. Jackson getting eaten by the shark in Deep Blue Sea comical.
Mar 09, 2011 10:48PM
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Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror)
Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror) is on page 74 of 264
So we've had chapters that started with news channel blurbs, a facebook status, a blog post, and now a tweet INCLUDING a hashtag. This is some high quality literature here.
Mar 09, 2011 10:35PM
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Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror)
Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror) is on page 71 of 264
"His eyes are soft, mushy looking, but strong." Ewwww ... mushy eyes? Not the descriptor I would have gone with.
Mar 09, 2011 10:21PM
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Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror)
Shannon (formerly The Holy Terror) is on page 38 of 264
"The thought of it makes me squee." No no no. Please don't use this word in a published book.
Mar 09, 2011 08:10PM
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