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And another:
”Mr. Saussure,” Lord Hurlingthon interrupted my mild tantrum, “Let me save you a considerable amount of energy. If you care to join me, I would gladly explain everything.”
“No! I demand to know! Why am I here?!”
And all in just the first chapter. I don’t know if I’m going to be able to make it through this book.
— Nov 09, 2018 09:34AM
”Mr. Saussure,” Lord Hurlingthon interrupted my mild tantrum, “Let me save you a considerable amount of energy. If you care to join me, I would gladly explain everything.”
“No! I demand to know! Why am I here?!”
And all in just the first chapter. I don’t know if I’m going to be able to make it through this book.
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After a little research, I don’t think the author’s native language is English, which could account for the spelling and grammar issues. However, there are also two editors listed, and whatever the author paid for their services, it was too much. The errors are very distracting, and make spending any time with this story a chore.
— Nov 11, 2018 10:34AM
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When metaphors, similes, and adjectives go wrong.
The entire construction was gray, matching the fainting brown of the surroundings.
The pop-up feast of lavishing furniture and exquisite textures infused into my body all the life I had lost outside.
— Nov 09, 2018 09:32AM
The entire construction was gray, matching the fainting brown of the surroundings.
The pop-up feast of lavishing furniture and exquisite textures infused into my body all the life I had lost outside.
