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On page 15 Kirk opens the car door for her and they walk into the desert. A few lines further down “she climbs out of the car”....... Also, same page, there’s this ship in the desert... a few lines down, “it sat half in and half out of the water” WTF David Wood? If you need a beta reader I’ll do it for you but to have such blatant mistakes on the very first few pages????? Come ooooonnnnn! Shame on you!