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my storys are really good and i want you 2 reand them

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message 1: by tree hugger (new)

tree hugger u will love my stories and it is nice 2 see people reading my stories!!!!!!

message 2: by [deleted user] (new)

what if I don't???
I didn't particularly enjoy it, sorry. It wasn't my kind of story. I also thought that when you're writing a story, you should spell things out. When you're just chatting, it's fine but when you're writing a story, it's annoying.

message 3: by tree hugger (new)

tree hugger thanks for the atvise

message 4: by [deleted user] (last edited Jan 25, 2009 02:09PM) (new)

sorry, I'm a stickler for stuff like that.

message 5: by [deleted user] (new)

I reread it, and I have a few more things...
The first chapter seems kind of pointless, but maybe it will become important later in the story.
But also, your first chapter has no dialogue, and then the second chapter has a little too much dialogue.

But all and all, it's good.

message 6: by tree hugger (new)

tree hugger it will, 2nd u seem cool

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