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[Keisha]

http://www.amazon.com/FAB-PLUS-MINI-S...



http://www.amazon.com/The-Other-Woman...

[Valerie]

Hi Keisha,

First let me say that I applaud you for stepping up and getting out there and getting your thoughts on paper. It must take great courage to create and then share what you have created with others.

Pros

Good story
caught my attention
didn't expect the ending

Cons

A little to short
The spelling,grammar and structure of the sentences caused a lot of confusion.
At times, I wasn't sure which character was actively speaking. A few paragraphs ran on without letting you know which character was expressing the thought.

I hope this helps.

[Keisha]

Thank You..