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message 1: by [deleted user] (new)

This is a poem I wrote.

I AM...hiding
I WONDER...what they'd think if the knew
I HEAR...their whispers
I SEE...their nasty looks
I AM...hiding.

I PRETEND...I'm someone else
I FEEL...fake
I TOUCH...my books
I CRY...in my bed
I AM...hiding

I UNDERSTAND...them all
I SAY..."can you tell?"
I DREAM...of being myself
I TRY...to blend in
I HOPE...one day they'll know the truth
I AM...hiding.


message 2: by Caroline (new)

Caroline (godwithus) Thats really creative,it brings out a inner self


message 3: by [deleted user] (new)

Thanks guys. It's about how sometimes girls conform, or pretend they're different just to fit in.
Most of my poems are written in I AM, form thought there's a few that aren't.
Here's the link to one: http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/9...


Lucy ~Graphite Wizard~ I love the one about your sistter, but I REALLY like the top one.


message 5: by [deleted user] (new)

Thanks Rue-Lu:)


message 6: by [deleted user] (last edited Aug 09, 2012 09:01PM) (new)

I push them,
They push harder.
I yell at them,
They yell louder.

Their voices echo through my head,
Words that can never be taken back,
Wounds that will never heal,
Scars that will never fade.

I trip them once,
They trip me twice.
I hit them once,
They hit me thrice.

No matter what I do they're always there,
Always trying to make me scared,
But all they're doing is
Making me stronger.

So take that!
I won't let them hurt me any longer.


message 7: by [deleted user] (new)

Here's a short story I wrote for a writing class,
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3....


message 8: by Caroline (new)

Caroline (godwithus) ;)


message 9: by [deleted user] (new)

This is a story I wrote for a writng contest on one of my groups:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...
I like and listen to all types of comments.
The good, the bad, and the ugly.


message 10: by Ingrid (new)

Ingrid Livvy [who dances in the rain] wrote: "This is a poem I wrote.

I AM...hiding
I WONDER...what they'd think if the knew
I HEAR...their whispers
I SEE...their nasty looks
I AM...hiding.

I PRETEND...I'm someone else
I FEEL...fake
I TOUCH...."


creative and cool!


message 11: by kayla (new)

kayla  (kaylacaylen) Hey Livvy whats the name of the cartoon on. Your profile pic?


message 12: by [deleted user] (last edited Jun 21, 2012 03:17PM) (new)

Um...the picture was actually on my older brothers iPod, and I thought what it said was funny. *shrugs shoulders*
I could ask him, if you want.


message 13: by [deleted user] (new)

Some people sing, or act.
I dance.
I dance in the store,
I dance in the mall,
I dance in the park,
I dance everywhere.


message 14: by Caroline (new)

Caroline (godwithus) nice!


message 15: by [deleted user] (new)

Thanks. Especially sense I actually do that (no laughing peoples!).


message 16: by ϮAʛʛⅇℛʊℵʛ {Supernatural Freak} (last edited Aug 06, 2012 11:02PM) (new)

ϮAʛʛⅇℛʊℵʛ {Supernatural Freak} (taggerung) | 7 comments Livvy [loves Leo Valdez+Primrose Everdeen] wrote: "I push them,
They push harder.
I yell at them,
They yell louder.

Their voices eco through my head,
Words that can never be taken back,
Wounds that will never heal,
Scars that will never fade.

..."


Oh. My. Josh. Livvy this is AWESOME!!! Kudos to you! *gives district 12 sign*

The only problem is an itty bitty misspell- echo, not eco. Other than that, SHEER BRILLIANCE! :D


message 17: by [deleted user] (new)

No, Josh is mine! LOL, just kidding. Thanks and I'll fix that right away.


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