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message 1: by Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (last edited Jun 04, 2012 04:17PM) (new)

Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments This months theme has been chosen by our winner of last month contest Emily. The theme is "Old Cities"! Such as London, Paris and so on but the city must be a real city. The rules are as follows.

1. Your poem must have something to do with old cities even if it is in a very obscure way. (If I don't think your poem has something to do with old cities you will have to explain it to me because I am a little dense.)

2. Your poem may be of any length but it must be a poem and not a short story.

3. Any inappropriate materiel (To be determined by me alone) will be disqualified and deleted without notice. (Although I will probably message you to chew you out later :D)

4. All poems must be posted in this thread.

5. You may only enter one poem.

6. All poems must be entered by June 25th.

7. All poems must have a title/name.

Winner will be picked by poll. Did I miss anything?

Have fun everybody, Big thanks and congratulations to Emily for picking the theme.


message 2: by [deleted user] (last edited Jun 04, 2012 04:40PM) (new)

ROME


In the country of Italy
Lies the ancient city;
The city once dominant for years
Where battles were fought
And the gladiators yelled
All for the entertainment of many.


The emperor was the great ruler;
Be he the savior or the tyrant;
He ruled the city nonetheless.


And now the ancient ruins
Can still be seen today;
The ruins of magnificent buildings
With the pillars that once supported them;
And the ruins of the great colosseum
Is still there as well.


This is why this city is famous;
The reigning of the emperor
And the battle cries of the gladiators;
This was what was once
Of Rome.


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Erin wrote: "How do we know if a city qualifies as an "old city"? Is there some requirement?"

I am going to say older then two hundred years, that sound okay?


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Veronica (Ron Paul) wrote: "In the country of Italy
Lies the ancient city;
The city once dominant for years
Where battles were fought
And the gladiators yell
All for the entertainment of many.


The emperor was the great rul..."


Ohh nice!


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments I am adding a new rule that all the poems must have a name.


message 6: by [deleted user] (new)

Thank you! And I'll add my title right now.....


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments I know it is unfair of me to make a new rule, but... I am HEAD MOD! I love Rome, did I tell you that?


message 8: by [deleted user] (new)

I love Rome, too!


♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (tabi_card) I'm going to put mine up tomorrow...:)


message 10: by [deleted user] (new)

You do that, Tabi. I'd love to see what yours is going to be about. ;)


message 11: by ♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (new)

♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (tabi_card) Its about a city after dark...


message 12: by [deleted user] (new)

Neat!


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Cool. I need to start on mine or else I will never get it done in time. My problem is I haven't ever been to an old city.


message 14: by Jennifer (new)

Jennifer (jkurdyla) Hi everyone,
I'm new to the group but am excited to post a poem for the contest. A small disclaimer: the line that begins "(But perhaps . . ." should be indented to line up with the end of the previous line, but the html doesn't allow for that formatting.

Duplicity

This face has less
character than those around it. There,
fine grooves have been etched
in a pattern that give away

an important habit. A handsome
facet of personality, worn proud
and hard to duplicate, easy
to pick out in a crowd.

And that one, there, must be young
at heart, if not in age. To embrace
modernity with polished indifference.
No creases of fret about the means

necessary to support such delicate
construction.
(But perhaps it is no
burden at all—perhaps it only
shows on the inside, which is all

that matters, after all.) You know,
living among such company would
be hard elsewhere—someplace with
far fewer faces.


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Oh I really like it. It flows smoothly and the language was beautiful. Well done.


message 16: by ♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (new)

♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (tabi_card) Here's my poem:

Nighttime

Step onto the streets
Once night has fallen
And the familiar becomes
A whole new world

Shadows grasp at your feet
Once pleasant streets
Now are dark alleys
Hiding the unknown

Even the sounds have changed
What once was normal
Now is sinister
Different and strange

As you hurry along
Coat pulled tight
Hands deep in pockets
You hope that the night
Doesn’t change you


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments I like it, it is different. Sort of creepy but completely so.


message 18: by Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (last edited Jun 07, 2012 09:54AM) (new)

Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Here is my poem, it is not about London exactly but it takes place in London.


A Night in London

A London kiss what a strange thing,
Soft upon my lips,
A London kiss what a nice dream,
Lighter than honey cream.

On the streets of London,
I verily walked alone.
When a stranger came upon me,
And kissed me on the nose.

Soft and gentle was he,
With moonlight shinning down,
He disappeared into the night
And later was seen drowned,

His eyes were blue his cheeks where red,
His hair as black as a crows.
And in the wells, where eyeballs dwell,
Was the deepest sorrow.

That tender kiss in London,
I never shall forget.
That night I walked alone
and willingly kissed the dead.


message 19: by [deleted user] (new)

Great poems, Christa and Tabi!


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Oh I love it! Did you seriously write that? Amazing.


message 21: by Luna (last edited Jun 08, 2012 05:46AM) (new)

  Luna  (lunaluss) Thanks, I'm surprised you liked it lol
to be honest I saw the contest and decided to write a poem... It took me 15 mins


message 22: by [deleted user] (new)

Very good!


message 23: by ♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (new)

♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (tabi_card) Hehe...another writer who can come up with fast ideas lol ;) I wrote mine in about fifteen too.
Great poems Christa and Laila!


message 24: by Luna (new)

  Luna  (lunaluss) Thanks Veronica and Tabi.

I prefer the peoms I come up with quickly as they seem to be more inspired than the ones I have to think about for hours lol is it the same for you?


message 25: by [deleted user] (new)

Oh Paris, you city of love ?


You broke your promise,
Shattered my dreams,
So from now on this city
Laughs at me - it seems.

This city, once home of my heart,
became the prison of my beliefs.
Even though i tried to flee,
I am trapped in my griefs.

Still, i wander this streets,
Where i find no more friends.
Only strangers walk this path,
And - oh - it leads to their ends

Oh Paris, you city of love,
How many hearts have you seen breaking ?
Oh Paris, you city of love,
How many did win one of your daughters faking ?


I am new here, too, And i am not that good in english, so i can't guarantee for corect grammar or spelling ;)


message 26: by [deleted user] (new)

Tabi, i just love your poem !


message 27: by Luna (new)

  Luna  (lunaluss) sanna, you wrote a sad but beautiful poem :)


message 28: by [deleted user] (new)

Thank you, but i admire yours, too :)
Somehow i can't write happy poems, even though i am a cheerful Person....


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Oh I likes yours Sanna, welcome by the way, it was sad but sweet at the same time. I liked how you were talking to the city instead of talking about the city.


message 30: by [deleted user] (new)

Thank you so much :)
But yours is lovely, too !
London is one of my favorite cities :)


message 31: by ♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (new)

♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (tabi_card) Sanna wrote: "Tabi, i just love your poem !"

Thank you Sanna :)


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Oh I like it. I am having a little trouble making it flow but the words are very restful.


message 33: by Natasha (new)

Natasha (inutasha) | 42 comments "Around the World when I die"

An angel came to get me when I died,
He told me it was no use to hide
I told him I would go on one condition,
To help me fulfill the American mission

Take me to Paris to see the lights
Shining bright even when it's not night
To hear the sweet nothings of young love
Before I go to the city above

Take me to London to feel the rain
to hear the whistle of the underground trains
Let's see Big Ben before it strikes Midnight
Before we have to take flight into the night

Take me to Spain to run with the Bulls
Since I'm dead, I won't end up with holes
Take the others first, I'm not done
I still want to have my share of fun

Take me to Rome to see beautiful buildings
Take me there and I will leave without screaming and kicking
Take me to Italy to ride in a gondola
I want to listen to someone playing the viola there

Okay, I'm done, Take my to Heaven to see the angles
That way, I can see the world from every Angel
Life was great, but it's time to let go
Take me death angle, to my ever lasting home


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Lovely! Absolutly stunning! Beautful and the flow was smooth as silk. I loved that you talked about all the cities, and the wish to see them as a human and as and Angle. I love it, can I put it in my poetry book?


message 35: by ♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (new)

♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (tabi_card) Christa - Ron Paul 2012 wrote: "Lovely! Absolutly stunning! Beautful and the flow was smooth as silk. I loved that you talked about all the cities, and the wish to see them as a human and as and Angle. I love it, can I put it in ..."

Amen....Christa just put my thoughts into words. I'm right with her. Gorgeous poem Natasha!


message 36: by Natasha (new)

Natasha (inutasha) | 42 comments Natasha wrote: ""Around the World when I die"

An angel came to get me when I died,
He told me it was no use to hide
I told him I would go on one condition,
To help me fulfill the American mission

Take me to Pari..."


Wow! Thank you!! Yes! Yes you can!


message 37: by Natasha (new)

Natasha (inutasha) | 42 comments Tabi (Ron Paul 2012) wrote: "Christa - Ron Paul 2012 wrote: "Lovely! Absolutly stunning! Beautful and the flow was smooth as silk. I loved that you talked about all the cities, and the wish to see them as a human and as and An..."

Thank you Guys! I'm glad you liked it! I almost didn't post it, but i felt like i might as well try!


message 38: by ♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (new)

♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (tabi_card) Hey...its AWESOME XD


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Ahh and leave it locked up in your mind! I terrible thought indeed.


message 40: by Natasha (new)

Natasha (inutasha) | 42 comments *giggles* I'm so glad you guys liked it! Thank you for the feed back!


message 41: by ♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (new)

♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (tabi_card) No prob ;)


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Anytime, I think it is my favorite one by you so far.


message 43: by Natasha (new)

Natasha (inutasha) | 42 comments ^//^ Thank you. you've read my other stuff?


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Some of it. I haven't finished reading your sties yet so I haven't left a comment.


message 45: by ♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (new)

♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (tabi_card) Yups...they're all good. :)


message 46: by Natasha (new)

Natasha (inutasha) | 42 comments *smiles* yay, thanks again for the feed back. I really liked your poem too.


message 47: by ♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (new)

♠ TABI⁷ ♠ (tabi_card) Thanks ;)


message 48: by [deleted user] (new)

I echo Tabi's and Christa's words. ;D


Christa - Ron Paul 2016 (christa-ronpaul2012) | 3184 comments Your late to the party Veronica :D


message 50: by [deleted user] (new)

Looks like, lol. ;D


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