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message 1: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Hey everybody, in the spirit of the holidays, I decided to start a contest to make everybody go crazy!

Your entry has to:
Involve a Holiday coming up
Be anywhere from 0 words to 5,000
Have under 20 mistakes (Hey, I'm in the spirit of giving!)
Involve someone in great need. (disease, poverty, you name it!)

If you're in the top 5, I'll publish your story (with your permission, of course) in my school newspaper.
Thanks to everybody that participates!


message 2: by [deleted user] (new)

wow, coolio! I think i'll go for it!


message 3: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Great! oh, and you can post the link or the story, and I've decided to judge them myself in (again, holiday spirit) Naughty or Nice lists. I'll decide if a certain element is 'naughty' or 'nice'. If you have the most 'nice's, you win!


message 4: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller Cool! Sounds awesome! when's the due date?




message 5: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Hmmmmmmmmm...January 3rd, 2009.


message 7: by Riley (last edited Dec 14, 2008 05:13PM) (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Have fun everybody, and Happy Holidays!


message 8: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
Okay, here's mine! It's called "The First and Last Chanukah."

Enjoy! ;D

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 9: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Ah Sella! That made me want to cry! But I have to score it anyway. *sniff* Man, my eyes are all teary! It was so sweet.

Okay, technical stuff.
Word Count: Nice.
Grammar/Spelling Mistakes: Only four. My Spell check didn't recognize any of the Hebrew words, so I ignored those. You're nice, no coal for you!

Alright, now:

Starting paragraph: Perfect. Intrigue, wonder, and a hint of sorrow and at the same time hope. I loved it. Nice.
Middle of the Story: Naughty and Nice. I had to read back over it to find any mistakes. The way he ran away wasn't very convincing, a bit cliche, but still very good. And that was a pretty insignificant detail, so I didn't pay much attention to it.
Ending Paragraph: A little confusing. "The flames were gone, and David's body was cold and hard next to her. Both were dead." I think that you could've changed the wording and made it much better. Something along the lines of: "The candles sat forlornly in their holders, looking much like David's cold hard and dead body lay next to Rachel when she woke." Just a suggestion. But it made quite an impact, and that's why I made it semi-Nice. You won't be getting coal, but you won't be getting that Wii you wanted either. XD
Involve a holiday coming up: Nice.
Involve someone in great need: You had two! Nice.
Overall Story: Nice. I loved it.

Computing overall score...

SCORE:6 Nices out of 7. Well done.


message 10: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
Yay, thanks, Riley! You're a good judger. Lol. XD

...And just wondering, what were my spelling mistakes? I used my spellcheck + I proofread it, but I couldn't find any...what were the four that you found?


message 11: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Stupid homynyms. They ruin everything.


message 12: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
Can you tell me which ones they were? 'Cause I can't find them now...


message 13: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Yeah, one minute...

sallowed
stickily
calender
dunno
wanna

That's it.



message 14: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (last edited Dec 21, 2008 03:55PM) (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
I fixed sallowed and stickily, and "dunno" and "wanna" are part of the language- it's the way the boy talks, it wasn't a mistake, it was on purpose, so I'm not changing it. And, my Spellcheck says that calender is the correct way to spell "calender"...


message 15: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Okie dokie. No, calender is actually spelled calendAr


message 16: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
oooh, okay...then why does my spell check have no problemo with it?? very strange...ah well, i'll change it anyways. :D BTW, since nobody else is doing this contest, are you still going to post it in your school newspaper or not?


message 17: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie | 2838 comments Sella, that's because there is an actual calender. Dictionary.com defined it as:

1. a machine in which cloth, paper, or the like, is smoothed, glazed, etc., by pressing between rotating cylinders.

2. a machine for impregnating fabric with rubber, as in the manufacture of automobile tires.



message 18: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
oooh that makes sense now. thanks!! lol XD


message 19: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie | 2838 comments I know. Quite a difference between the two. XD


message 20: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
haha XD


message 21: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Yeah. It's not the date yet, I'll wait till then.


message 22: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
Cool, thanks! Tell me before you do, so I can post the edited version on GR...


message 23: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Okie Dokie! What's GR? Sorry, I'm just kind of stupid.


message 24: by Veronica, What the neck!? (new)

Veronica (v_a_b) | 2889 comments Mod
GR stands for goodreads. took me a while to figure that one out. Just like ty stands for thank you.

But from now on, I'm just going to say merci. Because merci means thanks. Or merci beaucoup means thank you very much.


message 25: by Paige (last edited Jan 01, 2009 08:57PM) (new)

Paige Miller Stupid French-knowing people... why can't i know French???

*throws a tantrum*

sorry people... mood swings are in the air!!!!


message 26: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
hahahaha. XD


message 27: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) ha ha, funny, cause I realized that a little bit later.


message 28: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller ???????????

wait- what?


message 29: by Veronica, What the neck!? (new)

Veronica (v_a_b) | 2889 comments Mod
I think that Riley was replying to my comment... I think.


message 30: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
yes, i think so too.


message 31: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller ohhh


message 32: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Yup. Wait, which comment am I replying to now! IT'S A MYSTERY!


message 33: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) Oh no! Darn it! That three line thing is taking me over!


message 34: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller Lol. that's really funny. Hey it's happening to me too!


message 35: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
haha, it's not happening to me...MWA HA HA!!!!


message 36: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller good for you sella. I can't stop. OMG I DID IT AGAIN!


message 37: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
HAHAHAHA!! I LAUGH IN YOUR FACE!!!


message 38: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller Not funny. You're mean. HEY!!


message 39: by [deleted user] (new)

lolz. I can't believe you guys are doing it on accident. Great, now I'm focusing on doing 3 lines.


message 40: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
Yeah, I think that you guys are doing it on purpose. :P


message 41: by Riley (new)

Riley (booksarecool) We are not! At least, I wasn't then.


message 42: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
It looked like it!! Seriously. Every time!?!?!


message 43: by Paige (new)

Paige Miller I'm not. Seriously. Why would I?


message 44: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
SEE!! YOU ARE!!!!!!!!


message 45: by Veronica, What the neck!? (new)

Veronica (v_a_b) | 2889 comments Mod
Well, much of the time, three sentences can suffice. I bet that if you looked at other posts, in other discussions, many of them would have three sentences. Just go look, and feel free to tell me if I'm wrong!


message 46: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie | 2838 comments In debates you can't really use only three sentences. It takes much longer to voice an opinion and back it up. And then to defend it.


message 47: by Veronica, What the neck!? (new)

Veronica (v_a_b) | 2889 comments Mod
True, true. but I was talking about on goodreads. Not in real life!


message 48: by Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. >< (new)

Sella Malin | 4530 comments Mod
You're right Roni. Except it IS getting annoying when I look back up and see that you, Kenzie, then you again ALL USED JUST THREE LINES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


message 49: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie | 2838 comments Tee-hee. Sorry, Sella. You realize you just did as well?


message 50: by Kenzie (new)

Kenzie | 2838 comments OMGOSH! That was not on purpose! I didn't even realize it was only three lines until I posted!


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