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Holiday Contests
wow, coolio! I think i'll go for it!
Great! oh, and you can post the link or the story, and I've decided to judge them myself in (again, holiday spirit) Naughty or Nice lists. I'll decide if a certain element is 'naughty' or 'nice'. If you have the most 'nice's, you win!
Cool! Sounds awesome! when's the due date?
Have fun everybody, and Happy Holidays!
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Enjoy! ;D
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
Ah Sella! That made me want to cry! But I have to score it anyway. *sniff* Man, my eyes are all teary! It was so sweet.Okay, technical stuff.
Word Count: Nice.
Grammar/Spelling Mistakes: Only four. My Spell check didn't recognize any of the Hebrew words, so I ignored those. You're nice, no coal for you!
Alright, now:
Starting paragraph: Perfect. Intrigue, wonder, and a hint of sorrow and at the same time hope. I loved it. Nice.
Middle of the Story: Naughty and Nice. I had to read back over it to find any mistakes. The way he ran away wasn't very convincing, a bit cliche, but still very good. And that was a pretty insignificant detail, so I didn't pay much attention to it.
Ending Paragraph: A little confusing. "The flames were gone, and David's body was cold and hard next to her. Both were dead." I think that you could've changed the wording and made it much better. Something along the lines of: "The candles sat forlornly in their holders, looking much like David's cold hard and dead body lay next to Rachel when she woke." Just a suggestion. But it made quite an impact, and that's why I made it semi-Nice. You won't be getting coal, but you won't be getting that Wii you wanted either. XD
Involve a holiday coming up: Nice.
Involve someone in great need: You had two! Nice.
Overall Story: Nice. I loved it.
Computing overall score...
SCORE:6 Nices out of 7. Well done.
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...And just wondering, what were my spelling mistakes? I used my spellcheck + I proofread it, but I couldn't find any...what were the four that you found?
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Yeah, one minute...sallowed
stickily
calender
dunno
wanna
That's it.
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Sella, ov vey! i haven't checked this group in months. ><
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Okie dokie. No, calender is actually spelled calendAr
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Sella, that's because there is an actual calender. Dictionary.com defined it as: 1. a machine in which cloth, paper, or the like, is smoothed, glazed, etc., by pressing between rotating cylinders.
2. a machine for impregnating fabric with rubber, as in the manufacture of automobile tires.
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I know. Quite a difference between the two. XD
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Yeah. It's not the date yet, I'll wait till then.
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Okie Dokie! What's GR? Sorry, I'm just kind of stupid.
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But from now on, I'm just going to say merci. Because merci means thanks. Or merci beaucoup means thank you very much.
Stupid French-knowing people... why can't i know French???*throws a tantrum*
sorry people... mood swings are in the air!!!!
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ha ha, funny, cause I realized that a little bit later.
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Yup. Wait, which comment am I replying to now! IT'S A MYSTERY!
Oh no! Darn it! That three line thing is taking me over!
Lol. that's really funny. Hey it's happening to me too!
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good for you sella. I can't stop. OMG I DID IT AGAIN!
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lolz. I can't believe you guys are doing it on accident. Great, now I'm focusing on doing 3 lines.
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In debates you can't really use only three sentences. It takes much longer to voice an opinion and back it up. And then to defend it.
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Tee-hee. Sorry, Sella. You realize you just did as well?
OMGOSH! That was not on purpose! I didn't even realize it was only three lines until I posted!
Your entry has to:
Involve a Holiday coming up
Be anywhere from 0 words to 5,000
Have under 20 mistakes (Hey, I'm in the spirit of giving!)
Involve someone in great need. (disease, poverty, you name it!)
If you're in the top 5, I'll publish your story (with your permission, of course) in my school newspaper.
Thanks to everybody that participates!