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message 1: by Nyghtmare, My heart is dead and cold. I'm just truly Nyghtmare now (last edited Nov 08, 2011 10:00AM) (new)

Nyghtmare | 540 comments Mod
I am.
The invisible child.
Wondering the streets.
Alone.
Alone....
Always alone.
Never am I whole
Wandering.
Wandering.
Wandering...
I scream for her.
But then I hear nothing.
No one.
I'm alone.
I am the invisible child.
For all I never exist.
Yet I always have.
I crave attention.
But I get nothing.
I'm falling through the abyss of time.
Falling.
Falling.
Falling....
The invisible child that once was.
Yet never was.
I have never existed.
Yet I walk these streets.
Alone.....
Always alone......
Needing love.
But it's hard to come by.
Why do I live if not to lie.
I live for love.
And hate to die......
All I need is you....
You.
You....
I need to you to save me.
To save the invisible child.
To save me from hell..
Hell.
Hell.....
I need you and your love.
For you are lost to me.
Lost to the invisible child.
All I need is your love....
Love.
Love.....
I am invisible.
The invisible child.
A monster.
A savior.
A soon to be lover.


message 2: by Diane (new)

Diane (Proudtobeabookworm) | 3 comments Absolutely beautiful poem! The repetition of ideas is powerful; it's almost as if you're weaving a rhythmic yet irregular heartbeat. I also love the way you play with opposites, juxtaposed together (i.e., "For all I never exist. Yet I always have.") The crisp, staccato lines also give a sense of drama, of urgency - sort of unsettling (which mirrors the meaning of your poem)...Overall, it's creative and haunting and absolutely beautiful!


message 3: by Kennedy (new)

Kennedy (Vampspawned) | 21 comments I just.... Wow.... I'm in awe


message 4: by Nyghtmare, My heart is dead and cold. I'm just truly Nyghtmare now (new)

Nyghtmare | 540 comments Mod
You always put me in awe. This isn't THAT good.


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