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Weekly Poetry Stuffage > Week 69- (February 13th-20th) Poems --- Topic: seeing a ghost girl

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message 1: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments woooo hooo.....
great topic. will make for some interesting reading!


message 2: by Mark (last edited Feb 13, 2011 04:53PM) (new)

Mark Seeing a Ghost Girl

Her friend was gone

Dead

No return

No more happy days

Together

Picnics

Movies

Double dates

She wanted to join her

Desperate in death

In a dream

Friend came

As a ghost girl

Translucent

See through

You'd better dare not

Or I'll haunt you

Day and night

And you

Don't want that


message 3: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lyonessrampant) | 2867 comments OOoh, i Like yours al, but is is Woden, or Wooden??


message 4: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments love it Al. That rhyming scheme is cool.


message 5: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments ah, that's cool. I was wondering what Woden was. lol that was quite the alliteration...


message 6: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lyonessrampant) | 2867 comments oh okay thanks al


message 7: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11091 comments It was at the park
by Guy Duperreault
It was at the park
I saw her, a ghost forever,
my father weeping.



message 8: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments “Invisible Friend/Any other day”

By: Rachael

A busy morning,
An ordinary work week.
A mother and son, daily routine.
Today was like every other.


Mom hustles her young boy along;
Reminding him of their tardiness.
The bustle of the city outside.
Today was like any other day.


Boy turns pale white.
Sudden apprehension.
He begins to protest.
Mom hurries him along.


More than halfway through the city;
And the boy begins to vomit.
A day the same as any other?
The mom hastily turns the car around and heads for home.


Shortly after nine that morning;
The first of two airliners crashed into her place of business.
She watches in horror as the events unfold on the TV.
It could have been her.


He is playing with his matchbox cars;
When she appears once again to him.
She is six years old, just like him.
Her name is Abigail; his invisible friend.


She doesn’t speak;
But he thanks her anyway.
He has never told of her existence.
And never will.


message 9: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments wow, that was amazingly powerful Rachael.


message 10: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments ty Alex and Kristen. I am not particularly fond of this work so it makes me feel a lil better about it so thank you very much.


message 11: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11091 comments Alex (Reader, Writer, and All Smiles) wrote: "Nicely done Rachael and Guy!"
TY.


message 12: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments GUY, i like your poem also... very cool.


message 13: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lyonessrampant) | 2867 comments wow, i love it rachael!


message 14: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments ty very much Kat.
I really do appreciate it.


message 15: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments I'm still trying to think of something to go with this theme that isn't too cheesy...


message 16: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments wait, I think I just had an inspiration...


message 17: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments haha, yea, I think inspiration is a necessity for creative work...it is for me at least...


message 18: by Katrina (new)

Katrina Knight (KatrinaKnight) I think I posted my poem in the wrong spot."mental headsmack" it's called truth and lies and I posted it under stories. Check it out ok? I would love comments...


message 19: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments I read yours Katrina, very nicely done :)


message 20: by Katrina (new)

Katrina Knight (KatrinaKnight) Thank you very much. It has been many years since I wrote poetry but I think its a desent ce back. Lol


message 21: by Katrina (new)

Katrina Knight (KatrinaKnight) Comeback is the word I was going for there lol sorry


Thomas (Marimbapanda) | 328 comments I AM SOOOOOO SORRY FOR LEAVING AND NOT COMING BACK FOR MONTHS!!!!

Please forgive me.

I Saw Her

I saw her,
in the beautiful light.
I saw her,
in the wondrous night.

I saw her,
and she saw me.
I saw her,
as she danced happily.

I saw her,
as she drew near.
I saw her,
and started shaking in fear.

I saw her,
Translucent and pale.
I saw her,
and my hear set sail.

I saw her,
so fine.
I saw her,
a girl so divine.

I saw her,
as she ascended to heaven.
I saw her,
my beautiful Ellen.


message 23: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments wow, wonderful Thomas. I could definitely see this set to music, it would be an eerily gorgeous waltz...


message 24: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lyonessrampant) | 2867 comments OH good job THOMAS!


Thomas (Marimbapanda) | 328 comments Thanks guys. It means a lot... By the way, Everybody else has great poems. So many new people have joined since I last came here, so it is almost like a new group. (Except Alex) :D


message 26: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lyonessrampant) | 2867 comments hey, im still here! lol


Thomas (Marimbapanda) | 328 comments Oh yeah! New picture... and I have been gone for a long time... I'm sorry.


message 28: by Caitlan (last edited Feb 17, 2011 02:32PM) (new)

Caitlan (lyonessrampant) | 2867 comments hahaha lol, thanks for remembering me


message 29: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments ty Alex.
just so you all know - I had CHEESE issues too...lol
So far I have enjoyed everyone's poems.


message 30: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments I have an idea for mine, I just need to sit down and write it sometime. I should be able to soon, it's the end of the term here and I actually have very little going on for the next couple weeks. Just a couple finals that I'm not too worried about...


message 31: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11091 comments Rachael wrote: "GUY, i like your poem also... very cool."
Thank you Rachael.


message 32: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments Got it written! I was recently in a dance that was about modern day slavery and human trafficking. We watched a video that was really powerful and it inspired this poem.

The Ghost Inside

She was only ten
when they took her away
She still remembers when
she was abused every day

They beat and starved her
threatened her as well
While they pushed themselves on her
she was living in hell

They put her in bed
with a twisted old man
To his belt, his fingers led
the frail little girl's hand

It didn't take long
for her to surrender
It was better to go along
and do as they told her

She became mindless
a drone of a slave
Completely hopeless
No chance of being saved

But she did get away
by some sort of grace
She just ran one day
and got out of that place

Still now fifteen years later
her soul is melancholy at most
Because when she looks in the mirror
all she sees is a ghost


Thomas (Marimbapanda) | 328 comments What a sad story!!! (Poem)

Very good!


message 34: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments thank you :) If you guys get a chance ever, you should all watch the movie that inspired this. I think it's just called Human Trafficking, but it's really powerful. It's about 3 hours long though, so make sure you have plenty of time to watch it!


message 35: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments beautiful work, Thomas.
and Kristen, that was extraordinary! love it!!!


message 36: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments thank you!


message 37: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11091 comments Kristen wrote: "thank you :) If you guys get a chance ever, you should all watch the movie that inspired this. I think it's just called Human Trafficking, but it's really powerful. It's about 3 hours long thoug..."
Interesting approach to this exercise and nicely done. I have seen the movie, and it is quite good.


message 38: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments thank you :)


message 39: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lyonessrampant) | 2867 comments Title: The Ghost Inside of Me
Author: Kat



I can feel inside
That everyone has lied.
I can feel the way
People stare all day.
I can see how
My life's changing now.


I look into the mirror
Into the eyes that aren't there.
I don't feel like an ace
This just isn't my face.
The nose, the hair, the eyes
Something is different inside.

I can feel my mind
I can feel it rewind.
To that day, that awful day
When things changed all the way
From the day when I changed into a host
To the day I changed into a ghost.


Thomas (Marimbapanda) | 328 comments Wow! This one has a different perspective! Good Job!


message 41: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lyonessrampant) | 2867 comments thanks thomas :)


message 42: by Katrina (new)

Katrina Knight (KatrinaKnight) Very interesting Kat. i like that the "ghost", is seeing herself very cool!

Also Kristen, your poem actually brought tears to my eyes, we live in a very sad world. You have captured a part of it... in of the story's i once wrote.... the very last paragraph is this:

He wrote on, he wrote his story, and what he feared of the people that used to be his family. Mostly the story was of the nightmare though. How much he wished he had not dreamed it. Now though he had to write it away. For he thought, “Maybe if I write it on paper it’ll be fiction, maybe they are all ok, maybe Garrett didn’t kill himself maybe Morgan doesn’t walk alone looking for me, maybe Candy has learned to be happy, maybe I am just a writer with too much history and too much imagination and maybe the girl in the window was just another stranger walking away, maybe it will be fiction.
Exert from Old Cafe by Katrina Knight

anyway that is what your poem popped into my head, maybe if we write stuff well enough it will become fiction...Anyway the musings of Katrina are done for the day and she is retiring into the night lol
sorry this is so long ......

Good luck to all on the poll!


message 43: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments thank you Katrina!


message 44: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lyonessrampant) | 2867 comments thanks katrina :)


message 45: by Stephanie (last edited Feb 22, 2011 03:56AM) (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Sorry for being late. Couldn't get on yesterday :( The poll is up!

http://www.goodreads.com/poll/show/44...



message 46: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments lots of great stuff this week! can't wait to see how the poll turns out :)


message 47: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments darn! i am stuck b/t 2 poems...lol


message 48: by M (new)

M | 11009 comments Is this week already over? What a spectacular topic. Alex is experimenting with rhyme! Guy has submitted a poem as chiseled as anything by William Carlos Williams. Mark, Rachael, Thomas, and Kristen have turned in unsettling, at times chilling, performances. What more could anyone want than that?


message 49: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments very true, M.
I couldnt believe this week flew by so quickly. Everyone's work was great.


message 50: by Guy (new)

Guy (egajd) | 11091 comments M wrote: "Is this week already over? What a spectacular topic. Alex is experimenting with rhyme! Guy has submitted a poem as chiseled as anything by William Carlos Williams. Mark, Rachael, Thomas, and Kriste..."
M. this has been a excellent inauguration for me with this group. The quality of writing by everyone was indeed high. And thank you for the comparison.


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