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message 1: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments Fadhilah wrote: "I love making poems"

N you are really good at it


message 2: by Alya (new)

Alya  (alyaaaa) | 125 comments yepp, i agree :D


message 3: by Kara (new)

Kara (kara_writes) | 2669 comments Fadhilah wrote: "I love making poems"

me too :P


message 4: by Kara (new)

Kara (kara_writes) | 2669 comments heyy!! How are you!!?


message 5: by Kara (new)

Kara (kara_writes) | 2669 comments I'm good!
thats a really good quote


message 6: by Kara (new)

Kara (kara_writes) | 2669 comments I really like it!


message 7: by Kara (new)

Kara (kara_writes) | 2669 comments no problem


message 8: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments Fadhilah wrote: "I'm fine, thank you...

wbu???



"you can lie about love but love can't lie about you""


This is an awesome quote . so true :)


message 9: by Alya (new)

Alya  (alyaaaa) | 125 comments yaaa! trueee :D i agree!


message 10: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments :)


message 11: by Kara (last edited Feb 10, 2011 12:30AM) (new)

Kara (kara_writes) | 2669 comments http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

heres some of my poetry if anyone wants to read it.....


message 12: by Kara (new)

Kara (kara_writes) | 2669 comments Fadhilah wrote: ",,mhmmmmzzz...

You call yourself a teacher
But I call you a killer
You kill me from inside
Don't you even know
Your words aren't knowledge
They're knives and daggers
Cutting spirit and hea..."


I like it


message 13: by Kara (new)

Kara (kara_writes) | 2669 comments yeah, its good


message 14: by Kara (new)

Kara (kara_writes) | 2669 comments It doesn't matter!!! Its good!


message 15: by Kara (new)

Kara (kara_writes) | 2669 comments :)


message 16: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments Fadhilah wrote: ",,mhmmmmzzz...

You call yourself a teacher
But I call you a killer
You kill me from inside
Don't you even know
Your words aren't knowledge
They're knives and daggers
Cutting spirit and hea..."


I like it ...


message 17: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments yes Fadhilah really ... N your welcome


message 18: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments :)


message 19: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments me fine, wbu ???


message 20: by Kara (new)

Kara (kara_writes) | 2669 comments I've added some more poems to my collections :)
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 21: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments really touching and brilliant poem love it


message 22: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments NO no it's not .... I actually love the poem it's really touching ....


message 23: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments your welcome ... But I just stated a fact


message 24: by Alya (new)

Alya  (alyaaaa) | 125 comments reallyy good poem fad! :D


message 25: by Alya (new)

Alya  (alyaaaa) | 125 comments :P Np :P


message 26: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments :D


message 27: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments nothing .. you tell??


message 28: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments humph


message 29: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments Humph is to express doubt (like i don't know )


message 30: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments so?


message 31: by Eliza (new)

Eliza | 121 comments http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Please have a quick read :)

This one is a quote I wrote in 2oo9 but it has to be one of my all-time favourites:
'Life is like a river: it sometimes hits rocks but always reaches the ocean."


message 32: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments Very touching, Love it


message 33: by Eliza (new)

Eliza | 121 comments Thank you :D


message 34: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments :)


message 35: by Shwetika (new)

Shwetika | 1062 comments :D


message 36: by Ana (new)

Ana (ana-and-the-timeturners) http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Hey all, this is my first poetry collection in English I've ever written :D
I've just written the first chapter which is my very first poem in English (=
I'm conscious it is very possible it's not as good as other poems you've read [maybe from native English speakers or so] but I hope this is a good start


-Ana. <3


message 37: by Ana (new)

Ana (ana-and-the-timeturners) http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Here's my second poem. Hope you'll like it :D


message 38: by JazzyCat (new)

JazzyCat (dayandnightgirl) LOL it's long sorry. Called "My Baby":


oh, baby, it’s so cold inside my head
oh, baby, it’s so cold alone in my bed
oh, baby, just hold me and make it better
oh, baby, just say “don’t be a quitter”

oh, you never were even my baby
but who cares, I mean, ever since lately
you’re a boy who listens, you’re a boy who laughs
you’re a light through my path before I crash

so just pick me up in your strong dark arms
just hold me tight and protect me from harm
I don’t care they don’t like you, I don’t care, no
maybe you’re not right, but now you are, so

you’re a guy girls need to stay away from
a guy all parents think of as a bum
but for now it just feels like you are mine
and, oh, baby, that just feels so divine

yes, maybe it probably won’t work out
yes, I probably should just go and pout
you never were and you will never be
no matter how much I beg and I plead

so, baby, just go on and leave me
oh, baby, don’t forget to pay the fee
after all, for you this wasn’t just free
oh, baby, please just come back and hold me


message 39: by JazzyCat (last edited May 16, 2012 06:51AM) (new)

JazzyCat (dayandnightgirl) Most are either on the boy I love whose not good for me, cutting, or my parents.


message 40: by [deleted user] (new)

Have you heard summer scream
And cry and sheik her rage
As the fall winds come to blow and howl
And whisper her away
She yells for you to help her
But you're useless now
Summer love
Lust
Passion
All gone to waste
Every sign of joy has gone from your face
No one can save you
You're already in the grave
A sacrifice would be a waste
So keep your virgin daughters
There's no need to slaughter 
More than have already been slain
Hope is a daemon 
Come to steal your dreams and
Whisk your summer away

By Kaya


message 41: by JazzyCat (new)

JazzyCat (dayandnightgirl) My Baby:



oh, baby, it’s so cold inside my head
oh, baby, it’s so cold alone in my bed
oh, baby, just hold me and make it better
oh, baby, just say “don’t be a quitter”

oh, you never were even my baby
but who cares, I mean, ever since lately
you’re a boy who listens, you’re a boy who laughs
you’re a light through my path before I crash

so just pick me up in your strong dark arms
just hold me tight and protect me from harm
I don’t care they don’t like you, I don’t care, no
maybe you’re not right, but now you are, so

you’re a guy girls need to stay away from
a guy all parents think of as a bum
but for now it just feels like you are mine
and, oh, baby, that just feels so divine

yes, maybe it probably won’t work out
yes, I probably should just go and pout
you never were and you will never be
no matter how much I beg and I plead

so, baby, just go on and leave me
oh, baby, don’t forget to pay the fee
after all, for you this wasn’t just free
oh, baby, please just come back and hold me


message 42: by JazzyCat (new)

JazzyCat (dayandnightgirl) So Numb

God, I feel so numb
God, I feel so dumb
this pain just won’t go
God, I feel so slow

it’s so quiet here
it’s so cold here
I’m just so lonely
please, someone hold me

the small blade slides out
removes all my doubt
slides across my skin
I feel like I win

blade is whisper-sweet
anything it beats
couldn’t imagine life
without my small knife

crimson words pool out
knife makes me not shout
makes it go away
makes me want to stay

knife makes life worth it
I don’t want to quit
just not anymore
knife takes away bore

knife is my best friend
a hand it will lend
knife is always there
knife just seems to care

they don’t understand
don’t see the reason
think it’s disturbing
but that defines me


message 43: by JazzyCat (new)

JazzyCat (dayandnightgirl) let’s just try this one more time
let’s just go hit the rewind
I’m trying to talk to you
can’t you even see me through

you want communication
you just want conversation
you want to know what I think
don’t get why you try to tink
you’re not some goddamn fairy
stop trying to keep tarry

you say you want to talk
but you just want to yell
I simply want to just talk
but I really want to yell

what good are you anyways
you never listen, you never care
you never listen, always
and it’s more than I can bare

why won’t you just hear me out
why can’t you pay attention
can’t you see I’m trying to shout
can’t you see I’m close to the end

what kind of parents are you now
what parents watch their daughter rot
never thought you’d stoop so low
I’d never thought you’d care not

you say I’m just so perfect
you say I’m the best daughter
guess I’m pulling my own trick
‘cause I’ve never been farther

you cannot even feel some ruth
how could you believe I’m so good
I just want to tell you the truth
but I’m not really sure I could

I wish I could say it out loud
I wish I could come out to you
I wish I could come out of the crowd
I wish it will be over soon


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