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Weekly Poetry Stuffage > Week 68 (February 5th-February12th) Poems --- Topic: The Shoe Must Go On DONE!

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message 1: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments You have until February 12th to post a poem. On the 13th and 14th, we'll vote for which one we thought was best.

Please post directly into the topic and not a link. Please don't use a story previously used in this group.

The topic this week is: The Shoe Must Go On

The rules are pretty loose. You could write a story about anything that has to do with the subject. I do not care, but it must relate to the story somehow.

Have fun ye pirates!



message 2: by [deleted user] (new)

really? i mean srsly??? how am i going to do a poem! i might attempt a funny poem this time. but im more into deep poems. hm this is going to be hard for me! lol


message 3: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Haha


message 4: by [deleted user] (new)

haha ur self lol jk


message 5: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments It was going to be show instead of shoe but I changed my mind.


message 6: by Mark (last edited Feb 05, 2011 01:16PM) (new)

Mark The shoe must go on

oh sad, despondent Jessica,

now a sole sibling

not a hint of happiness

anywhere to be found

as alas

dear old

sister Regan

placed it on her foot

it adorned with

an open blister

poison now affluent

from head to toe

oh well,

sliding on the glass slipper

scalding and rampant

with a nameless poison

the shoe must go on


message 7: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Lol, I love it!


message 8: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lionesserampant) | 2869 comments lol


message 9: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lionesserampant) | 2869 comments hahaha, i love it, it reminds me of this one episode of my strange addiction, this one lady was addicted to buying shoes :)


message 10: by Kristen (last edited Feb 05, 2011 07:51PM) (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments how appropriate, we're doing Cinderella for our next dance department show! I'll have to work on a poem...


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments yea Kristen i was thinkin at Cinderella too bt srsly...STEPHANIE this is hilarious...but i dunno if i can come up wid smth...im more into dark side stuff lol


message 12: by Mark (new)

Mark Thanks Alex.


message 13: by Mark (new)

Mark Stephanie wrote: "Lol, I love it!"

Thanks Stephanie.


message 14: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments I was going to do something humorous, but it turned out more just lighthearted and fun.

Cinderella

Cinderella
ballerina
dancing on her tippy toes
the prince falls in love

Cinderella
ballerina
hears the clock strike twelve
the prince is left behind

Cinderella
ballerina
runs home to her servile chores
the prince doesn't know her name

Cinderella
ballerina
hears a knock upon the door
the prince enters grandly

Cinderella
ballerina
watches him place the slipper
"The shoe must go on!"

Cinderella
ballerina
places it upon her foot
now the shoe has gone on!

Cinderella
ballerina
whisked away by the prince
lives happily ever after.


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments kyaaaahhh soo cute really...i love it xD

btw: Mark- i like your poem especially "with a nameless poison" -love that line

Al- shopaholic for shoes LOL...<3


message 16: by Mark (new)

Mark Thanks.


message 17: by Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (last edited Feb 06, 2011 07:10AM) (new)

Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments “Love” like a pair of shoes

by Lexi(Crazy Daisy)

You can’t gamble with fate using dice-
Walking the music of life-think of it twice…
Because between ragged clothes and old school blues,
In the dumpster, my love for you is let loose.

Don’t throw it away like a small pair of shoes,
A cheap wedding ring, shattered glass beads,
Lose it in a cinema hall or a crowded place
And tape it with our memories’ lace.

Another one on my soul has stepped,
“The shoe must go on”-a voice tells me.
Because he is enticed by me-a bumble bee...
I am a new pair of shoes he encountered,
Will there be a time when he’d feel awkward?


message 18: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments Lexi, I absolutely loved your work here. Fantastic!


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments thank you Rachael :)


message 20: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments this is my first time doing this so....here it goes. :)

"The Decision"

Darkness
Nowhere to turn.
Alone in desperation.
No place to run.

Eternity ticks by ever so slowly.
Life will never be the same.
Out of hope, out of fight.
The end isn't yet in sight.

Normality was altered
it will never be the same.
A force so strong; unbreakable.
The perfect storm.

Sweltering heat; no food.
Dark nights that engulfed survivors left behind.
Every possession, every dream stolen.
Wandering through a haze of confusion.

It gets no better.
The children continue to cry.
Suffering still remains.
Hope continues to fade.

Will it ever get better?
For those who fell through the cracks?
It doesn't seem possible.
The suffering needs to end.

A mother and her two children
living in a single room apartment.
The help never comes.
The suffering needs to end.

No lights, no heat.
Food scarce.
The help never comes.
The suffering needs to end.

The choice is clear.
Continue to fight an endless battle?
There is no fight left.
The suffering needs to end.

Stop the pain?
Give in. Give up the fight?
It is a losing battle.
The suffering needs to end.

An angelic face peers at her through the darkness.
Covered in sweet pink flannel,
She nestles herself in her mother's lap.
Wiping Mommy's tears away.

Things happen for a reason.
A child's simplicity.
She knows what she has to do.
Her children are worth fighting for.

Give up the fight?
Or fight like hell?
The decision becomes clear.
And the shoe must go on.


message 21: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments Nice Rachael :) I wasn't sure how you were going to fit the theme in until the end, but I love the emotion.


message 22: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments Thank you so much Kristen. I appreciate that.


message 23: by Caitlan (last edited Feb 06, 2011 03:37PM) (new)

Caitlan (lionesserampant) | 2869 comments good poems everyone!


Title: Pioneer Girl
Author: Kat


The girl plodded on next to the covered wagon.
Her feet torn, bloodying the pathway behind her.
The father looks down sympathetically at his daughter
From his place driving the pack horses.
He stops the wagon, and jumps down from the seat.
He lifts up his little girl, and sets her on the wagon.
He takes off his shoes, and places them on her feet.
Then, he puts her on the seat, letting his wife drive.
While he walked on, his feet tearing, bloodying the path behind him.


message 24: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments ok so that just made me cry.... lol. reminds me off my dad and the sacrifices that he made for me. really enjoyed it, Kat!


message 25: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lionesserampant) | 2869 comments Thank you Rachael! :)


message 26: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Nice job guys!


message 27: by [deleted user] (new)

I know its dumb but i couldnt think of anything else lol!

The Shoe Must Go On! (how orginal, huh? hehe jk)

I have little pair of shoes,
And when I think I meet the right boy,
I'm going to tell him,
"The shoe must go on,",
And if it don't fit,
Then he just ain't right for me,
I think I might have trouble finding that boy though,
Cus those shoes, are my shoes,
But wait maybe I don't want him to wear my shoes,
Hmmm...Oh well the shoe must go on!


message 28: by [deleted user] (new)

Oh my gosh ur poem is amazing Rachael!
Love everyones else too! lol


message 29: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lionesserampant) | 2869 comments haha mclean, thats hilarious!


message 30: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments omg, ya really think so? thank you soooo very much for that.

i just read yours and it was too cute. i think when u do find the right boy he should have some BIG SHOES TO FILL though.... :)


message 31: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lionesserampant) | 2869 comments :0 yes yes he should, lol, have you read my short story for this week yet??


message 32: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments havent made it there yet...lol. trying to get the hang of this...ha. i will definately get over there tonite or in the am.


message 33: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lionesserampant) | 2869 comments sweet :) lol you'll get used to it really fast :)


Lexi (Pink Jellyfish) (blackjack13) | 66 comments OMG Rachael and Kat...i really need tissues...amazing ones

and Mclean cute one!!!!


message 35: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments thank you very much, Lexi. greatly appreciated. :)


message 36: by Stephanie (new)

Stephanie (chasmofbooks) | 2875 comments Good job, Mclean; your poem was cute.


message 37: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lionesserampant) | 2869 comments thanks lexi


message 38: by [deleted user] (new)

Thanx everyone! so happy u guys liked it, cus i wasnt sure if it was any good! lol!

I love ur poem Kat and Rachael! And everyone else of course! lol


message 39: by Jan (new)

Jan (auntyjan) | 196 comments Shoe, shoe, shoe, shoe


Shoe shoe shoe shoe
The shoe must go on
Shoo shoo shoo shoo
Time's almost gone

Shoe shoe shoe shoe
I'm standing in the rain
Choo choo choo choo
Here comes my train

Shoe shoe shoe shoe
My feet are soaking wet
Choo choo choo choo
This train I have to get

Shoe shoe shoe shoe
I take them off to dry
Choo choo choo choo
The towns are passing by

Chew chew chew chew
I eat a little snack
Choo choo choo choo
Train's running down the track

Choo choo choo choo
Getting closer now
Shoe shoe shoe shoe
Put them on quick! How?

Shoe shoe shoe shoe
One shrunken shoe now on
Shoe shoe shoe shoe
Where's the other gone?

Shoe shoe shoe shoe
The shoe must go on
Shoe shoe shoe shoe
My foot seems too long

Choo choo choo choo
Train comes to a stop
Shoe on, shoe off
Out I must hop

Shove shove shove shove
Foot into shoe
Half in and half out
That'll have to do!

Shop shop shop shop
Shopping in the rain
Queue queue queue queue
Waiting for the train

Choo choo choo choo
Go home, cook the dinner
Shoe shoe shoe shoe
You really are a winner

Many great inventions
Have come and have gone...
But one thing's for sure...
The shoe will go on........


message 40: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments oooh, so cute. Love it Jan!


message 41: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments great one, Jan!


message 42: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lionesserampant) | 2869 comments like it jan!


message 43: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments haha, nice Al. Your pets are such goofballs...


message 44: by Kristen (new)

Kristen Marincic Hiestermann | 519 comments idk, your dog is pretty weird too. I mean, it doesn't like me, so it must be messed up, lol.


message 45: by M (new)

M | 11047 comments There was nothing easy about being a pioneer. Kat really brings that home in a way that smarts. According to something I read, your feet are the way your soul connects with the earth. When the earth does nothing but cut them to pieces, as in Kat’s poem, life’s hard.

McClean’s got me scratching my head. On one level, I think: You want a clumsy boy with big feet, who’s going to grow up to be a manly man, not some dainty boy who can wear your shoes and will wind up working for an art gallery! On a deeper level, I think: You want a boy who knows what it’s like to walk in your shoes. (I hope for his sake they’re not high heels.)

I thoroughly enjoyed Jan’s “Shoe shoe shoe shoe” poem! By the time I got to the stanza “Shove shove shove shove / Foot into shoe . . .” the whole world of the poem had thoroughly materialized around me. Isn’t it funny how good shoes and rain just don’t go well together? The word repetition, the contrast of shoe and choo, and so many other things, make this a wonderful poem.


message 46: by [deleted user] (new)

LOL M, it was just something i came up with. it was suppose to be funny, but im not really good at funny stuff! :)


message 47: by M (new)

M | 11047 comments Obviously, I'm not good at it, either! Sorry, Jamie. I thought it was funny last night. Now it's the next morning, and what I wrote looks more critical (which wasn't what I intended) than witty. I really should turn off my computer after sundown.


message 48: by [deleted user] (new)

thats fine! i took it as both! lol


message 49: by Caitlan (new)

Caitlan (lionesserampant) | 2869 comments thanks m :)


message 50: by Rachael (new)

Rachael (rayle504) | 107 comments so much good work here.... having a hard time figuring what to vote for. awesome job guys!


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