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message 1: by Jen (new)

Jen | 28 comments Hi. My name is Jen and I love to write poetry! I hope you will check out my book called Collection of A broken Heart.


message 2: by Jen (last edited Dec 16, 2010 12:32PM) (new)

Jen | 28 comments **Chasing Trust**
All the pain
You threw at me,
Trickles down my face.
Now you finally see the
Hurt clouding my eyes.
And you think it is okay
To try and laugh it off,
To apologize
Not to my face,
You coward,
But in a smudgy, crumpled note
Passed between hand
And hand.
I tore the note,
On which you scribbled words
Meaningless
To me,
Like
You
Tore
My
Heart.
Before,
You and I didn’t even know of
One another’s existence,
But then gradually
I began to
Trust
You.
And you should know
It was the biggest
Mistake
Of my life.
Because not too long after
That moment
When I placed my trust in you,
You stepped behind me and
Whispered in my ear.
I turned,
Only so that my eyes
Could see the blood
Dripping
Off your hands
From the
Knife
You so ruthlessly
Stabbed
In
My
Back.
Chase
Is the game we play now.
You are running after me
Never to catch up
And I’m
Not
Going
To
Look
Back.


message 3: by Kiersten (new)

Kiersten Bree (zan5) That's amazing, very inspiring, but sad. Good job (:


message 4: by Jen (new)

Jen | 28 comments Thnx!


message 5: by Jen (new)

Jen | 28 comments Thanks so much you guys! I really appreciate getting feedback. I have tons of more poetry if you are interested. This is the link:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...


message 6: by Jen (new)

Jen | 28 comments **Letting Go of You**
Desperately, I try
To stop going
To find you.
For the lights,
Blinding and sparkling,
Threaten
To expose
My feelings.
And the music,
Loud and bubbling,
Make me want to
Grasp your hand
And grip it
Tight
So you cannot let go
Of me
Again.
But I know
I will never stop
Because your
Power
Over me
Is too strong.
Every night
My aching heart
Suffers more
Unbearable pain.
Always
You are
Alone.
And always
Your eyes
Glaze
Over me.
But you
Never
Notice me
For I am
Invisible.
The shadows
That I hide in
Engulf me
And take over
My heart
And fill it with
Darkness.
Looking at
And thinking of
You
Only breaks me more.
And I
Wish
Harder and harder
That
My mind
Would let go
Of you.
Just
Like
You
Let
Go
Of
Me.
I want to stop trying to
Capture your heart.
Since you
Dropped mine
And just
Watched
It
Fall.


message 7: by Jen (new)

Jen | 28 comments **Accident**
If only
You had seen
The stoplight,
Seen the
Red
Emanating from it.
If only
You had
Cared about people
Other than yourself
When rushing past
The stoplight
At sixty-five miles an hour
Without
Looking.
If only
The mother
Had Not
Been looking in the
Backseat, at her
Smiling,
Laughing,
Little
Six year old
Daughter.
If only
The mother
Had Not
Been so Carefree
As she stepped
On the pedal when
The light
Went
Green.
If only
That six year old girl
Had Not
Been sitting next to
The car door on
The right.
If only
Your perfect,
Brand new,
Black,
Sports car
Had Not
Rammed into
The right
Side of that
Misty
Blue
Minivan.
If only
That Little girl
Had Not
Fallen
Victim to your
Selfishness.
If only
You
Had Not
Seen the face of the
Little girl
Gazing out
The window at
The raindrops as you
Tried too
Late
To
Stop.
If only
That single mother
Got to say
Goodbye to her
Only child
Before your
Destruction
Tore
Her
Life
Apart.
If only
You really had a
Second chance
At everything
So you could
Prevent all that
You Have made
Happen.
If only
That little girl
Could
Rise from
The smoke
And be okay,
Still laughing,
Running,
To hug
Her crying,
Distraught mother.
If only
The impact on
The right side of that
Misty
Blue minivan
Had Not
Instantly taken
The Life of that
Laughing,
Innocent,
Six year old girl.
If only
The mother
Could stop
Blaming herself
For what she
Was Not
The cause of.
If only
You
Had
Seen that Red
Stoplight.
If only
Accidents
Did Not
Happen.
If only
The medics
Had
Come in time to
Drag you out of your
Wrecked vehicle and
Save
Your
Life.
If only.
If only.


message 8: by Jen (new)

Jen | 28 comments My Child
Hold still child
As I kiss you goodbye.
Hold still child
And please do not cry.

Do not speak child
As I pray before our demise.
Do not speak child
For we shall wait in silence as the waters rise.

Keep your eyes closed child
As the house violently quakes.
Keep your eyes closed child
And ask God to forgive your mistakes.

Do not wail child
Though our home is now a mess.
Do not wail child
For our deaths are sure to come nonetheless.

Do be patient child
As our time together continues to lessen.
Do be patient child
For the time when we join line in front of the gates of heaven.

Do not be afraid child
That you will lose me forever.
Do not be afraid child
For in heaven we will once again be together.

Take my hand now child
The water is at our door.
Take my hand now child
To heaven we soar.


message 9: by Jen (new)

Jen | 28 comments Okay so since I am so nice I have decided to let you guys have a little sneak peek at a new project I'm working on:) So plz tell me what you think!

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He hurts me. Yet still, still, I cannot leave him. Why should I? I have nothing left to lose. Shattered, is my heart now because of him. Everything I held close to my heart has crumbled. My heart will no longer beat quickly at the sight of his once beautiful face as now I am terrified of him. Terrified of the monster which lurks inside the shadows of his black heart. Now I lay still with glistening red shards sprinkling the ground around me. Slightly, I pick my pounding head off the floor and take in the damage to my body. Covering my white porcelain skin are gruesome black and blue bruises. Dark red blood trickles overtop all my bruises and flows in tiny rivers onto the floor.
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So should I continue?


message 10: by Hannah (new)

Hannah (Forever_Alone_Wolf) Hey. Jen, that's epic!! I've got a small request for you. Can you maybe teach me how to write poetry like that? I can never write poetry well. I would like to learn from someone as great as you. Teachers don't do much help for me.


message 11: by Hannah (new)

Hannah (Forever_Alone_Wolf) Jen*Jello Monster* wrote: "**Chasing Trust**
All the pain
You threw at me,
Trickles down my face.
Now you finally see the
Hurt clouding my eyes.
And you think it is okay
To try and laugh it off,
To apologize
Not t..."


Awesome. It reminds me of someone I lost.


message 12: by Jen (new)

Jen | 28 comments Hi Amaya! Thnx so much for the compliments! The one above ur first comment actually isn't a poem but i can try to help u. do you happen to have any poems here on GRs. u could post a link for me to read so i can get a feel for how you write. also if i disappear for a while it is cuz i have 9 days left of school so i've been busy and crazy the past few weeks so just b patient with me. :D thnx again!


message 13: by Hannah (new)

Hannah (Forever_Alone_Wolf) Okay, that's fine with me. I don't have any poems to tell you the truth. I really wanted to learn how to one is all.... I mean, ways to write them... Or uh. >.< Grrr. Depressing and love poems are the main type of poems that I like to read and would hope to learn.


message 14: by Jen (new)

Jen | 28 comments okay:P Mainly that is what i write though i really have no idea why. I'll be sure to help you starting on the weekend cuz i am super busy BYE!


message 15: by Hannah (new)

Hannah (Forever_Alone_Wolf) Okay.


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