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message 1: by Jen (new)

Jen This is my favorite poem that i have written so far. i hope you enjoy!

I Loved You, Then

I know what I need is rescue
As I plunge farther and farther away from you.
I tumble down this cascading wall
As everything around me seems to fall.
My heart is slowly crumbling apart
For the time has come for our paths to part.
My smile is now forever gone
And the same goes for my liking of dawn.
Because the sun that would rise
Only reminds me of the endless blue sky.
But now darkness is all that I can see
As the pain you have brought engulfs me
And no I cannot see the twinkling stars
I only trace my terrible scars.
Crystal tears well in my eyes
As my buried feelings for you begin to arise.
And when I think of you I feel a pang
Where my love for you once desperately clang.
My mind is still trying to understand,
Why hurting me was your demand.
How do you not see that you impair
Confusion and hurt with your love and care?
Are you waiting for me to explain
Why loving you brought me pain?
Can you not see it all has to do
With the undying love I have for you?
Your shining eyes and smile are so sweet
They make my drumming heart go offbeat.
But the last time I saw your face
My heart did not begin to race.
For what you told me then
Is what will now repeat in my mind again and again.
My heart bleeds with the love I have lost
As I learn what true love costs.
I thought we had feelings to share
But I was the only one with care.
Why did you wish for me to leave?
For I really once did believe
That you loved me as much as I did you
But I guess it just wasn’t true.
I also must ask before goodbye
Did I ever once tell you a lie?
Was I the reason you ran away?
Were you afraid, or too scared to stay?
As you walk in the opposite direction
My heart fills with unbearable rejection.
For now it is written across my heart in pen
I loved you deeply then.

message 2: by [deleted user] (new)

Why must you make me cry? =') My computer may go bzzt, with all these happy tears descending onto it.

message 3: by Jen (new)

Jen thank you, thank you! *takes bow*
there hopefully will be more tears in the future from reading my poetry? (i like to think of it as a good thing cuz it means my poetry is powerful)
here is a haiku

skating hand in hand
gracefully gliding on ice
me and my best friend

message 4: by [deleted user] (new)

Aww, that's so cute <3

message 5: by Jen (new)

Jen Thank you, I appreciate your postive feedback.

message 6: by Jen (new)

Jen Bliizard of Warmth

A blizzard of ashes
blowing in the wind
surrounding her
as she lay on the rough terrain.
People shouting
her name
but the voices
were whipped around by the wind.
She smiled,
her eyes closed,
the warmth from the rubble
blanketed her,
a shield against the frosty night air.
and fear
were lost
in the distance
with the sirens and
steady stream of water.
Her chest
and rose,
and rose.

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message 8: by Jen (new)

Jen is that a frown? you didn't like this one?

message 9: by Jen (new)

Jen ok so here goes another one i just finished:

*Second Chance*

As I start to pick up my pace

The tracks I left behind erase.

I see someone chasing me at last

But it is only the shadow that I cast.

On the ice my feet pound and pound

But yet there is hardly a sound.

I keep going as the wind whispers,

As the cold makes the world look crisper.

Tiny pieces of white confetti celebrate

The beginning of my desperate escape.

Step by step I break apart,

As I listen to my thumping heart.

I race down the deserted streets

My feet drumming a silent beat.

By now the news should have spread,

The news about how I fled.

I continue with my eyes looking down,

My mouth not moving from its permanent frown.

After a while of the freezing breeze

And watching the dancing trees,

I take one last backward glance

But the people I left don’t deserve a second chance.

message 10: by Jen (new)

Jen What do you think?

message 11: by [deleted user] (new)

NO! Not a frown. So good a poem, made me cry. =)


message 12: by Jen (new)

Jen thanks!

message 13: by Jen (new)

Jen Ok so now for another poem:

Heart Thief

you took it
you tore it.
you loved it
you left it.
you cared for it
you crumpled it.
you starved for it
you stabbed it.
you begged for it
you broke it.
you stole my heart
you should have just asked for it.

message 14: by [deleted user] (new)

Aww, I feel for that girl.. =(

message 15: by Rosalyn (new)

Rosalyn Leigh (t-rose) fresh. to the point. nice

message 16: by Jen (last edited Oct 14, 2010 02:48PM) (new)

Jen thanks you guys, maybe i'll write something once i finish this STUPID homework!

message 17: by Jen (last edited Oct 15, 2010 12:22PM) (new)

Jen No more you plus me
Since you broke my fragile heart
We are torn apart.

message 18: by [deleted user] (new)

Niice. =) Love it!

message 19: by Jen (new)

Jen thanks! i have only written one other Haiku because I prefer free verse but I am practicing to become better.

message 20: by Jen (last edited Oct 15, 2010 03:20PM) (new)

Jen here is my poem of the day:


I thought I knew
What you were trying to do.
I can't even imagine
Why I let you be such a big distraction.
My thoughts were that you were trying to find the right words
But now that theory looks so absurd.
I bet you wonder why away I ran.
It's because I noticed your hands.
One time when I looked down they were red,
And that is all the reason I fled.
Whenever you would touch my face
Whenever you gave me a loving embrace
I would forget all that you had done.
I thought a new man you had become.
But now as I trace a bruise
I am glad I broke free of your abuse.

message 21: by [deleted user] (new)

But the correct spelling - I do believe - is glad not glab. =P

message 22: by Jen (new)

Jen Thanks I was typing fast so I didn't notice that.

message 23: by [deleted user] (new)

That's ok. I type fast too. In my opinion, at least. =/

message 24: by Jen (new)

Jen *Blind*

I see you and I call
But again you do not listen.
Why must you make me feel so small
By keeping your feelings hidden.
So when again you do not hear
When again I see you just don't care
My eye sparkles with a tear
And my heart fills with despair.
I stand there in the open
Waiting for you to finally notice
That I have called, that I have spoken.
But I give up because we are hopeless.
Then as I turn to walk away
I see you step in my direction.
So I think maybe, maybe, maybe I'll stay
Maybe, maybe we have a connection.
But then I look at your eyes peering over my shoulder,
And I look to find her standing there.
And thats when I realize we are truly over.
You will never realize the hurt you impair
On a girl that you have crushed with your lies.
Why did you tell me that you loved me
If a different girl was your prize?
I guess my feelings for you, you did not see.

message 25: by [deleted user] (new)

So deep.. Deep is good, really good. I love deep. 8)

message 26: by Jen (new)

Jen Thanks!

message 27: by [deleted user] (new)

No probbie! =]

message 28: by Jen (new)

Jen *Freedom Brings Goodbye*

"Goodbye," is a phrase that brings great pain.
But I guess we must both share the blame.
I realize everyone makes mistakes
And that sometimes our strength breaks.
But does that make what I saw
just an innocent human flaw?
You smiling, staring at her.
Did the thought just not occur
That I might see or hear what happens?
That I would find out about your actions?
You should have just said to my face
You were tired of the run, tired of the chase.
I would have stopped for you to catch me
But I guess we just weren't meant to be.
I guess that happens when you give someone your trust,
They treat it like a coating of dust.
But now we both agree
We are no longer together, we both are free.

message 29: by Nyghtmare (new)

Nyghtmare | 54 comments I love that first one a lot. It has a lot of feeling to it.

message 30: by Jen (new)

Jen Thanks it is my fav.

message 31: by Nyghtmare (new)

Nyghtmare | 54 comments My favorite that I wrote would have to be Dark America. I love the poems that pack a lot of feeling.

message 32: by Jen (new)

Jen Yeah I read that one and it was really good.Great job:)

message 33: by Nyghtmare (new)

Nyghtmare | 54 comments Thanks. Sent you a firend request.

message 34: by Jen (new)

Jen *The End*

My tearing eyes do not compare
To my empty heart, in despair.
The pride I felt, no longer there,
Only a cold, harsh, chill that fills the air.
The laughter that once kept me sane
Dissappeared inside this endless rain.
The smile once spread across my lips
No longer there in this dark eclipse.
I sit here waiting in the gloom that has come,
No longer awaiting the long lost sun.
But in that while I choose to wait
The world begins to harshly quake.
I look up and to my dismay
I see the sun sway and sway.
I settle down
On the broken ground.
I look at the sea that was once a mirror
But all I can see is that it is no clearer,
Than the swaying sun
Or the sound of my heart that can bearly drum.
Or the dark gloomy clouds.
Or this terribly broken ground.
And in that moment I start to rest
Because I know the ending is not the best.

message 35: by Jen (new)

Jen Thanks!

message 36: by [deleted user] (new)

I love all your work, amazing.

message 37: by Nyghtmare (new)

Nyghtmare | 54 comments That one isnt as good as that first one, but I like that one too. It's got an awesome beat to it.

message 38: by Jen (new)

Jen Yeah I know. THE END was the first poem I wrote, but I Loved You, Then is more recent.

message 39: by Nyghtmare (new)

Nyghtmare | 54 comments Ic.

message 40: by Jen (new)

Jen Here is another poem I wrote awhile back:

*The Storm

Rumbling black clouds,
swallow the once blue sky.
The sky, now engulfed in sooty clouds,
lights up with spindly lightning.
As I look up into what seems like nothingness
Tiny tears pour down from the sky.
And when I ask my mom
"Why is the sky crying?"
Fog starts to roll into the dark street.
The street lights flicker off and I stand there in darkness
waiting, waiting, waiting
for an answer, but it never comes.
I stand there, questioning myself
"Why? Why is the sky crying when it has done nothing wrong?
It gives us sommething to drink,
it gives our plants something to thrive on,
it flurries snow upon us bringing joy to boys and girls.
And this thunder and lightning,
now grumbling and sparking,
it may not seem pretty to you and me
but we wouldn't have understood electricity without it.
So why is the sky breaking apart and falling on me?"
I must know the answer,so
I sit
in the wet grass and wait
until I understand WHY?
Then I wake up
and notice I am still on the grass.
I look up and see
a rainbow and now I know.
I finally realize its not breaking apart
or crying
it was simply having a moment of destruction
in order to create something BEAUTIFUL.
So I go inside and I now know why there is so much
horror in the world and yet infinte amounts of beauty.

message 41: by Nyghtmare (new)

Nyghtmare | 54 comments That one has a lot of meaning.
I actually should make one like this. But giving a different meaning.

message 42: by Jen (new)

Jen Thanks! here is the link to all of my poetry:


message 43: by Nyghtmare (new)

Nyghtmare | 54 comments Kay

message 44: by Jen (new)

Jen *Ocean*
I take a breath and plunge
Down into the freezing abyss.
I do not struggle against the pull
I do not try to keep the water from rushing into my lungs.
Slowly, leisurely, I float down,
Down into the seemingly endless blackness.
The effect the current has is almost calming
As it soothes me lower and lower into its stomach.
Despite my fearlessness I keep my eyes closed
To the murky, moonlit water slowly enveloping me.
As I continue to sink it becomes harder to stay aware
Of what is happening around me.
This I know means it is working.
In the dark I take one peek and notice the small sliver of light reaching me.
My body is still and motionless as I am pulled further into the black whole.
I grow wearier and wearier the longer I am submerged
And I know I will not be awake for the time I touch the bottom.
And I know I will never awaken from this eternal slumber.

message 45: by [deleted user] (new)


message 46: by Jen (new)

Jen thanks:)

message 47: by Jen (new)

Jen *Entwined*
As you walk toward me
My heart fills with joy.
Then your arms encircle me,
In a warm embrace.
Next, your lips meet mine
And sparks begin to fly.
You entwine your hand with mine
And walk with me through the crowds.
I look at you with shining eyes,
As your face lights up in a magnificent smile.
Walking with you,
Laughing, smiling with you
Is a moment I will always remember,
Always relive.

message 48: by Annabelle (new)

Annabelle (mrs-varen-nethers) | 19 comments Love!

message 49: by Jen (new)

Jen Thanks! i wasn't sure how i felt about it, but i like now:)

message 50: by Annabelle (new)

Annabelle (mrs-varen-nethers) | 19 comments That's good, because it's totally amazing!

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