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message 1: by [deleted user] (new)

Add your work here if you want us to read it and give our opinions. :)


message 3: by Andy (new)

Andy I dislike my writing, but i love writing.... so i wrote a 17 chapter book..... sooo i think i'll post the first chapter and see what you guys think..

Please comment..... nicely... but criticism would be nice!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 4: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
I read it andy, and....I hate it! :) Just kidding, it's great. Ok. I didn't actually click the link, I just hope it's the story I'm thinking about...


message 5: by Sam (new)

Sam http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/1...

There's my stuff. Can't garantee it's good, though they say it is. Sometimes I think they're just being nice.... Please rate and comment and give the truth and nothing but the truth!


message 6: by sydney (last edited Jul 19, 2010 08:57PM) (new)

sydney Here's my story, sorry but I suck at writing the beginning of stories... :P

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Even though it probably sucks please leave nice critism... :D Thanks ya'll!


message 7: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
I have some poetry. It's kind of silly though. Here's the link: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 8: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
I also have a short story:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

and a couple chapters of my one story...:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/3...

Tell me what you think! Okay? :P


message 9: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Sydney, I read your story and thought it was great! I want you to keep writing. You left it off in a very exciting place. I also think you should post something here when/if you add more to it, so I'll be able to check it out. :P


message 10: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Sam, I read yours too. They're both good! I really liked the one that was just he prologue. It sounded like such a good premis for a story. Post when you write more of it. I would love to see how it turns out.


message 11: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Sisi **Daughter of Hebe** luvs goth lolita!! wrote: "http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/1...
Here's my crap ^^"


I don't think it was crap Sisi. I actually really liked it. You're poem about Goodbye...I couldn't come up with any suggestions, but I thought it was really good despite it's lack of ending. Keep writing!


message 12: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Andy. Email me the chapters from book 2 okay? I want to stay caught up. Because at Becca's birthday, I wasn't sure what we were talking about some of the time.


message 13: by Andy (new)

Andy Well, i haven't got a chapter written yet.


message 14: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
You still haven't finished it? But you were on like page 19 out of 20... and halfway done the page too...


message 15: by Andy (new)

Andy well i got that one, but thats on the computer, the next chapter hasn't started.


message 16: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Oh. Stop slacking! :)


message 17: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
There really is no need to say that I've written a grand total of about 7 pages since school let out. And they were for a bunch of different stories too... :(


message 18: by Andy (new)

Andy Haha


message 19: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Yeah I know. I sent you a message in your inbox. You should check it.


message 20: by Andy (new)

Andy otay


message 21: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Yay.


message 22: by siyao (new)

siyao (siyaoi) | 300 comments Thanks for the comments, guys! ^^


message 23: by Sam (new)

Sam Laurena wrote: "Sam, I read yours too. They're both good! I really liked the one that was just he prologue. It sounded like such a good premis for a story. Post when you write more of it. I would love to see how i..."

Thank you!


message 24: by [deleted user] (new)

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2... randomness.


And im about to read all of y'alls. :)


message 25: by Locé (new)

Locé Styx this makes me mad :( im writting a story but i left it on the school computer and i cant write with it until september... also its on that computer so i cant show anybody. :( im reading your people's right now but: ANDY SHUT UP! STOP SAYING YOURE NOT A GOOD WRITER CUZ YOU ARE!.... sheesh.


message 26: by Andy (new)

Andy Ok Winnie......... you cannot get your work in September...... its gone.


message 27: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
http://www.goodreads.com/story/list/1...

I just realized that I could post one link to all of my writing, instead of one for each individual one. So this has all of my writing, which includes the ones I posted about earlier, as well as some others. Enjoy :P Also, leave some constructive critisism. I need to know the truth, so I can make it better.


message 28: by Locé (last edited Jul 26, 2010 12:33AM) (new)

Locé Styx Andy wrote: "Ok Winnie......... you cannot get your work in September...... its gone."

AHHHHHHHHH!!!! nooooooooooooo!!!!!!!
nononononononono.
(sigh)
really???
that was the longest thing i ever wrote :( i know it was only like.... 20 pages buuut i cant write long things so it'll take me forever to redo :(
>8O!!!!!!!!!!


message 29: by Locé (new)

Locé Styx ok so.... unfortunately my storys gone, poof! dissapeared forever according to andy so all i have thats worth showing is an example of the kind of stuff that goes through my mind when my head is too tired to think rationally and logically.... so:
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
so, im really depressed right now at my stupitity at leaving my story on the school computer so please dont say anything bad about this.... :(


message 30: by sydney (new)

sydney Thanks to whoever read mine! I'm slowly adding more...


message 31: by Sam (new)

Sam Yes thanks to the people who read mine! For those who only read the Prologue of The Light is Failing, the first chapter, The Mysterious Visitor has been posted up. :D


message 32: by sydney (new)

sydney I have a question.

TO ALL OF YOU WHO HAVE READ ELEMENTALS by me!

Should Allie end up with Gabe or Talamar?
Honestly I haven't even chosen yet.. Because the typical chose would be her friend, but I have no idea! :D
HELP!


message 33: by siyao (new)

siyao (siyaoi) | 300 comments I have no idea! I like them both!


message 34: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
I read it Sam, and it's great!

Sydney, personally, I like Gabe better, but the choice is up to you.


message 35: by Sam (new)

Sam Really? Thanks!


message 36: by Locé (last edited Jul 29, 2010 09:19PM) (new)

Locé Styx i know it's really bad writting but i havent edited it or anything cuz i just did chapter one like an hour ago so ya...
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 37: by Sam (new)

Sam Wow... that's great descriptive work, Winnie.

Yay! I can't believe how fast I'm writing! Chapter 2 for The Light is Failing is complete and posted!


message 38: by Locé (new)

Locé Styx really?? i didnt think mine was that good but thanks! :)


message 39: by Locé (new)

Locé Styx Your's is really good too by the way! :D


message 40: by Locé (new)

Locé Styx okay, so im done chapter two, here it is: http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...
and im not too sure about this one... is it too boring? repetetive? please be truthful, and comment please! i need help! my grammar and spelling part of my brain gets swept away when im writting something.. sooooooo.... point out any mistakes you find, please and thanks...


message 41: by Sam (new)

Sam Winnie wrote: "Your's is really good too by the way! :D"

Thank you.


message 42: by Locé (new)

Locé Styx um, so i need help with a scene from my book...
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...


message 43: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Sam, I read it, and let me just say that it ended epic-ly. I love it!


message 44: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Winnie, I'm going to read yours now...


message 45: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
It was so good! And funny....and a little bit creepy...but mostly funny!


message 46: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Winnie wrote: "um, so i need help with a scene from my book...
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2..."


I read it. And I commented on the story page, so check there.


message 47: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Sydney, thanks for reading Kara Morphix! I really should write more of it...


message 48: by Locé (new)

Locé Styx Laurena wrote: "Winnie wrote: "um, so i need help with a scene from my book...
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2..."

I read it. And I commented on the story page, so check there."


thanks :P i'll look, but he needs an unusual name though... cuz later on she (me) is going to find out he can magic and all that bibbity bobbity boo stuff, soooooooooooo... if you have any ideas let me know...


message 49: by Laurena, Silly boy's sister :P (new)

Laurena | 431 comments Mod
Bibidi, Babidi and Buu... hehe...


message 50: by Locé (new)

Locé Styx um... i-kay, ... does it matter how you spell it i guess buuuuuuut thanks...


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