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Weekly Poetry Stuffage > Week 35 (March 8th-15th) Poems---Topic: Betrayal DONE!!!

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message 1: by Hanzleberry (new)

Hanzleberry (Doughboyissweet) | 1065 comments This topic makes me think of the Phantom...

message 2: by ♥ Rachel♥ (new)

♥ Rachel♥   (I_got_a_jar_of_dirt) Betrayal by Rachel

Cry me a river of tears
And engage my most broken of souls
Apologize for such blistering betrayal
And then just turn and go

Walk away and do not look back
For fear my heart will turn to stone
Yesterday is gone forever my foe
And I am truly alone

The truth it came
Rather anonymously
Driven through a concrete wall
But bored itself with Steel Wings
To at last reveal it all

ESTHER *I Hate Being Bipolar, It's Awesome!* (essie7198) i think im actually going to try poetry this time... i tried poetry before once... epic fail... hey can it be a hiku however you spell it??/ you know first like 5, 7, 5 i think it's words but i don't know

Betrayal by Esther

Stabbed me in the back
Heartless enough to be my best friend
and then leave me broken

message 4: by Summer (new)

Summer This may be a bit creepy however you interpret it. Sometimes I don't know where these come from sometimes haha.

Error of Betrayal by Summer Crane

You said meet me there.
But you never showed.
I'm left here to stand,
A fool in the dust!
So I go it alone,
Trek the trail we marked,
Dangers not only for you and me.
Our plot will be fulfilled,
But you!
You'll receive no credit,
For what I will do.
They'll sweep me through the crowds,
Before they lock me up in jail.
You will learn to fear me,
My followers will strike with my hand.


You betrayed me to a failed plan,
Maybe you possess foresight,
But I possessed a dream.
And it failed.
With out you.

Thomas (Marimbapanda) | 328 comments Esther, Haikus have 5, 7,5 Syllables

message 6: by Aysha (last edited Mar 09, 2010 01:23PM) (new)

Aysha (ayshabkhan) lemon

you kissed me
and you killed me.
the life of men is not
for me to dissect, but in
five words: you took
my breath away.

message 7: by Aysha (new)

Aysha (ayshabkhan) I know I haven't been on
in a longlonglonglong time
but, apparently I'm back.
Rachel and Summer, your
poems were so nice.

ESTHER *I Hate Being Bipolar, It's Awesome!* (essie7198) Thomas wrote: "Esther, Haikus have 5, 7,5 Syllables"

ohhhhhh syllables... i forgot which one it was...

message 9: by Summer (last edited Mar 09, 2010 11:21PM) (new)

Summer I luv all your poems!!!

Thomas (Marimbapanda) | 328 comments Esther, your poem was awesome anyways

Thomas (Marimbapanda) | 328 comments Gone is my Faith

Gone is my faith,
for when told a lie,
you said we were friends,
but left me to die.

Gone is my trust,
for when you departed,
you said we would meet again,
but now we are forever parted.

Gone is my love,
for your heart once lied,
to me and yourself,
marraige was never tried.

Gone is my hope,
for when you have betrayal,
nobody to trust,
you can only fail.

message 12: by Aysha (last edited Mar 10, 2010 12:23PM) (new)

Aysha (ayshabkhan) Oh, I really liked yours, Thomas. And thank you, Alex!

message 13: by Maggie (new)

Maggie (Magfly) | 87 comments Love it Thomas

message 14: by Maggie (new)

Maggie (Magfly) | 87 comments Slap

It's a slap
from the one you trust
You gave them more
More than enough

when they turned their backs
You lost many
Many thing you gave

You'll may never
get it back
So you'll never give more

You lose it all
for that one turned friend
They betrayed you

Thomas (Marimbapanda) | 328 comments Thanks to everyone who commented on my poem.
Maggie, yours was very good.

message 16: by Hanzleberry (new)

Hanzleberry (Doughboyissweet) | 1065 comments Wow, these are terrific.... can I possibly write something that could even come close to the excellence? I shall try. ;]

message 17: by Hanzleberry (new)

Hanzleberry (Doughboyissweet) | 1065 comments Thanks for having faith in me, dear sister. ;]

message 18: by Hanzleberry (new)

Hanzleberry (Doughboyissweet) | 1065 comments :D
Who's that in your profile picture?

message 19: by Hanzleberry (new)

Hanzleberry (Doughboyissweet) | 1065 comments .......

message 20: by Hanzleberry (new)

Hanzleberry (Doughboyissweet) | 1065 comments Joan Crawford maybe?

message 21: by Hanzleberry (new)

Hanzleberry (Doughboyissweet) | 1065 comments I do!!! :D Give me one!

message 22: by mic (last edited Mar 13, 2010 06:39PM) (new)

mic | 82 comments rogue

I knew you couldn’t stay put
never satisfied with one lipstick flavor
with only two adoring eyes
like a vagabond skipping town
so why am I surprised
why did I think I could hold down a bum
but I saw beauty through your eyes
felt warmth in that touch
which I now slap away
only to wonder where it went
you lean down one last time
I want to turn my face
you kiss my lips
breathe life into me
just enough to keep me alive
just enough to keep me tormented
and you are gone
but those 30 pieces of silver
will only buy a tired harlot
not a lover

message 23: by mic (new)

mic | 82 comments ET TU, BRUTE?

had to do it.

message 24: by Hanzleberry (new)

Hanzleberry (Doughboyissweet) | 1065 comments Wow, Mic! Interesting topic... haha. No, I really love it. One thing though... it should be "breathe life into me." :) Excellent work!

message 25: by Hanzleberry (new)

Hanzleberry (Doughboyissweet) | 1065 comments The Farthest
by Hanzle

Not a care in the world for either of us,
all the happiness on the earth for each of us,
soaking in the joys of the world,
as we soaked in ultraviolet rays,
cavorting through the starlight, moonbeam, and rain,

I'd meet you at the park,
and we'd race to the swings,
we'd grope and shove to avoid the squeakiest,
I'd reach for the heavens,
and you'd reach for the clouds,
as we tried to make out bunnies and turtles
among other things.

Propelling our fragile limbs to get the biggest launch
was our grandiose and ambitious goal in our sparkly, untarnished lives,
Bruises and blisters expelled laughter and mirth,
and overlooked along with the bigger picture of existence.

Time was suspended,
and realization kicked in at the peak of that fearless jump,
a moment of thought was all that was needed,
As I laughed with you,
I fiercely tried to conquer you,
as you tried to conquer me.

I got the squeakiest, you jumped the farthest,
you fortified your sandcastle and devastated mine.
Vanquished by your plastic soldiers, as I watched them rule our made-up kingdom.
Pushed off the slide when you knew I hated heights.

Ten years from then,
nothing will have changed,
but of course there would be bigger things,
monstrous feats,
to vie in bigger competitions.
There would be wars in a real kingdom,
and hearts unmercifully broken instead of sandcastles.

And you thought that day as we landed,
after we flung from our swings,
that I cried because you had won.

message 26: by Hanzleberry (new)

Hanzleberry (Doughboyissweet) | 1065 comments Haha. Thanks, Al. It's nice to know that my poetry inspires amazement and awe to some people who read it. :)

message 27: by Maggie (new)

Maggie (Magfly) | 87 comments Great job Mic and hanzle I loved both of them.thanks Thomas, Alex, and Hanzle.

message 28: by mic (new)

mic | 82 comments oops, thanks for the correction hanzle

message 29: by Hanzleberry (new)

Hanzleberry (Doughboyissweet) | 1065 comments I like the picture, too. Very nifty. ;]

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