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message 1: by [deleted user] (new)

Kind of self-explanatory. But this is where we can post what our characters say before they kiss in a story, or come up with a totally random one. I thought it would be fun to have a topic for this because these lines are usually quirky, adorable, or just plain cheesy. =D


message 2: by Baxter, butts butts butts (new)

Baxter (julietrocksmysocks) | 2455 comments Mod
"God dang Beth, those braces are attractive"


message 3: by [deleted user] (new)

Haha. I have a friend Beth with braces.

"Listen, I... See, um... Oh, to heck with it." *kisses her*


message 4: by →Destiny (new)

→Destiny | 7 comments Baxter wrote: ""God dang Beth, those braces are attractive""

Haha that's hilarious!


message 5: by Jayda (new)

Jayda | 2761 comments Well, in the kiss scene I already have written for Rebel, here are the two lines said before the two kisses:

"Shh."

and

"Yes."

xD Hahaha. Not very creative, but it makes sense when the whole thing is read!


message 6: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments "Are you sure? It could happen." Blaze to Shadow

it's worse if you know what she said to him first..and even worse once you know what happens next.


message 7: by [deleted user] (new)

Kennyninja (the ninja is silent) wrote: ""Are you sure? It could happen." Blaze to Shadow

it's worse if you know what she said to him first..and even worse once you know what happens next."


AH! NO! *weeps*

Here's another one from Vigil. It's the only one, really:

"Don't make me regret this."


message 8: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments *sad smile*

Oooh, I like that one Maxy!


message 9: by [deleted user] (new)

Thanks. It's horrible, though. I'm so mean to poor Fate.


message 10: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments Fate. I know, but he is so cool!


message 11: by [deleted user] (new)

He is. But he's also a jerk. And he has the social skills of a hermit. Who can blame him? He hasn't spoken with anyone for thousands of years.

Another one that's pretty cheesy, but I don't care:

"Then how do you suppose I feel?"
"Evangeline, I hope you feel exactly the way I do."


message 12: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments Yah, but somehow the quality is still great...prob 'cause of the awesome author.


message 13: by [deleted user] (new)

*grins stupidly*


message 14: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments *grins*

"Come on..promise you wont cry this time." Ellis to Shadow/Salem (after a certain thing happens to Blaze)


message 15: by [deleted user] (new)

*weeps more*

Um, I know there are more...

"Ben, I need you to do one thing for me."
"What?"
"Shut up."


message 16: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments *looks sorry* Don't be sad..

I like that one best so far!


message 17: by [deleted user] (new)

Hehe. Merci.

I think I'm out... already... *grins stupidly again*


message 18: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments Yah..I made up the one from Ellis..but I want to do it now.


message 19: by [deleted user] (new)

Haha. I made up the "To heck with it" one. Sort of. I was really hyper last night and wrote a kissing scene that will never really happen, even though I wish it would. *smiles sadly*


message 20: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments Nice! And aww..don't you hate that?


message 21: by [deleted user] (new)

I know. Stupid junior SBOs that look amazing in pirate costumes...


message 22: by [deleted user] (new)

ok this is really lame but it makes sense if you have read the whole story

"do you have a cell phone I can borrow"

"why do you ask"

"someone nedds to tell god an angel is missing right"


message 23: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments Anna (Maxy) wrote: "I know. Stupid junior SBOs that look amazing in pirate costumes..."

*chuckles*


message 24: by [deleted user] (new)

Kennyninja (the ninja is silent) wrote: "Anna (Maxy) wrote: "I know. Stupid junior SBOs that look amazing in pirate costumes..."

*chuckles*"


*chuckles and weeps at the same time*


message 25: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments *looks sad*


message 26: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
THis is what Jeremiah says in the first kissing scene from The Seventh Dimension: "Dae, look at me."

Second one: "I don't know."

Third one: “Alright . . .”

And then here's the one from Fallen... heh... Yay for cheesiness! : "I'm afraid of losing you."


message 27: by Daisy (new)

Daisy | 149 comments "Hey...uh....can I-?"

"Go ahead."


message 28: by [deleted user] (new)

this one is kinda lame


"hey you want to makeout"

"no"

"please"

"no"

"please"

"yes"

"really"

"no"

"please"

"of course"


message 29: by Mandy (new)

Mandy  Harmon (mandyharmon) | 10724 comments Anna (Maxy) wrote: "He is. But he's also a jerk. And he has the social skills of a hermit. Who can blame him? He hasn't spoken with anyone for thousands of years.

Another one that's pretty cheesy, but I don't care:..."


CUTE!!!!


message 30: by [deleted user] (new)

My pre-kiss lines are all cheesy. XD
My first one from Two Sparrows:

Sean: "I don't want you to go."
Lizzie: "I have to leave."
Sean kisses Lizzie, and what's funny is after, when she says "No more kissing." XD

My first from Finding my Inner Happiness:
(Another cheesy one)
"Open your eyes."


message 31: by Kim (new)

Kim Crowley (kimcrow) | 1893 comments Baxter wrote: ""God dang Beth, those braces are attractive""

please tell me you dont have a girlfriend.
if you do i feel sorry for her :L


message 32: by Laura (new)

Laura  | 911 comments I haven't even written any kiss scenes because I kill off my characters who are in love!!!! *headdesk* *headwall* *headteamug* *headbook* *headache*


message 33: by [deleted user] (new)

ok...not one


message 34: by Kim (new)

Kim Crowley (kimcrow) | 1893 comments haha laura


message 35: by Hannah (last edited Feb 27, 2010 09:13AM) (new)

Hannah | 954 comments I haven't written any kissing scenes (yet) but I have some planned...

I think it would be like this:

"But... you're betrothed."

"Honestly Rayne, do you think I care?"

*kiss*

"I hate you."

"I know."

*end of chapter*

I know, it's way cheesy and weird and stuff.


message 36: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments that's awesome!


message 37: by Ellen (last edited Feb 27, 2010 08:26PM) (new)

Ellen | 870 comments Well, the last talking line before the kissing scene is this:

From: Now It's Gone

"I..."

Not much. But the actual line is this:


I began to notice ever little thing about him. I noticed the gold flecks in his _____ eyes. I noticed how soft his hands felt when they were scarred from survival, how when our knees bumped together a tingle sparked inside of me.

And how, when our lips met, it was like fireworks exploding in my head.


I removed the eye colour because I don't want it to give anything away.


message 38: by [deleted user] (new)

haha... these are great!

"I hate you!"
*kisses her*
"I still hate you."


message 39: by Audrey (last edited Feb 28, 2010 07:58PM) (new)

Audrey (AudreyMarie13) | 15 comments "Well umm, I guess I'll see you later then"
"Wait"
kiss

(the real thing)
Jayden stood awkwardly on the step in front of the door. Is really this ready to leave I think. after such a fun evening, does he really hate me this much?
"Well umm, I guess I'll see you later then" I said as I started to open the front door to my house.
"wait" he says. I turn and, like we rehearsed it, we leaned our faces close together, and finally I'm not the only sixteen year old girls who has never kissed anyone.


message 40: by [deleted user] (new)

thats really good


message 41: by [deleted user] (new)

at that point i had no idea what was happening, all i new at that moment was that i loved him, and than it happend


message 42: by Ky (last edited Mar 05, 2010 04:43PM) (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments I ran my fingers along her cheek,soft and supple, coming to rest at her hairline with a soft, silver ringlet held gently in my pianist hands. She sighed, almost with angst it seemed and that was when I knew what had to be done. *kiss*


message 43: by RedPath (new)

RedPath | 853 comments "What's that supposed to mean?"
"Nothing. Just that you can be a big chicken sometimes, that's all."
"I bet you five dollars that I could"
"Go on, I dare you to" *smirk*
*kiss* *cocky boy is shocked*


message 44: by RedPath (new)

RedPath | 853 comments ~Hannah~ wrote: "I haven't written any kissing scenes (yet) but I have some planned...

I think it would be like this:

"But... you're betrothed."

"Honestly Rayne, do you think I care?"

*kiss*

"I hate you."

"I ..."


Grrrrrrrr, Hannah!!! It makes me want to read more of Revived.............


♫♥Selena♥♫ (wertyiu102) | 338 comments Mandy♥ wrote: "haha... these are great!

"I hate you!"
*kisses her*
"I still hate you.""


haha, that's so funny.


message 46: by Acacia (new)

Acacia (acaciaa) Let's see here...I think I have a grand total of 4 kisses. Should I just put them all? :P

"Me too."
- Guinea Pigs

"Not so fast."
- Same book, same people, later. This is not as creepy as the dialogue alone makes it sound...

"You know what else? I think you're really pretty too."
- Letters to Ryan. The kid is eight here.

"Bend down so your face is right next to my face."
- Same story, same kids. I love it because the kid who's being told this is afraid he's about to get slapped or something.


message 47: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
The last one makes me laugh.


message 48: by Acacia (new)

Acacia (acaciaa) Haha. :D


message 49: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
:D


message 50: by SQUEAK! (Lisa) (last edited Mar 21, 2010 08:26AM) (new)

SQUEAK! (Lisa) (fictionheart) This one is so stupid in my opinion and I wrote it to be that way:

"I hate you."*angry*
"I loathe you."*grumpy*
"I love you?"
"That's not what I -"
*kiss*
"Now I really do loave you."


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