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message 1: by Kim (new)

Kim Crowley (kimcrow) | 1893 comments Post a link to your writing here if you want feedback :)


message 2: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5...

So..some people said I should make this into something bigger...I need more feeback...*smiles*

Thank-you!


message 3: by Madeline (new)

Madeline http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5...

i am not currently working on this but i'd like hear some thoughts...


message 4: by Laura (new)

Laura (xmagical) | 405 comments http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5...

Same as Madeline, I'm not currently working on this, but I'd really appreciate feedback...I'll get around to workin gon it after I finish up a few other stories, probably. (:


message 5: by Madeline (new)

Madeline ♥Cal♥ wrote:
Same as Madeline, I'm not currently working on this, but I'd really appreciate feedback...I'll get around to workin gon it after I finish up a fe..."


yeah, i'm working on finishing hte first one i started before i work on others


message 6: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin | 3094 comments I posted Chapter Seventeen and Chapter Eighteen of Life in D Minor. Read, you fools! Just kidding, you're not fools. But you ARE a fool if you don't read and comment on both chapters. Hehehehee.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...


Maria [the clockwork creeps on useless lives] (mariachhile) | 8772 comments Mod
um... *tries not to look her in the eyes* i haven't even started Life in D Minor, so.. um... it would be weird if i just read those 2 chapters...


message 8: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin | 3094 comments I wrote and posted Chapter Nineteen and Chapter Twenty of Life in D Minor. CASEY AND JONAH FINALLY MEET!! FINALLY!! YAY!! I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS PART SINCE THE BEGINNING!!

OH AND LIFE IN D MINOR REACHED PAGE 100!! YAY YAY YAY!!

Please read and comment on both chapters! XD

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...


message 9: by Ellen (new)

Ellen | 870 comments http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5...

Chapter Two of Now It's Gone. In Cayden's POV!! :D Please read and comment!! :D


message 10: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
Here's chapter four to Wayward Dreams... Some really sucky lyrics in this chapter, but I needed to put them into it because of something that happens later. Anyhoo, please read and tell me what you think :P

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...


message 11: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
Everyone! Guess what? I've got a nice, lovely new chapter for The Seventh Dimension that I stayed up extra-late to write. You all know you want to read it. I swear things are about to get interesting :P Please read and leave a comment:

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...


message 12: by Ky (new)

Ky (poeticshark) | 10786 comments AHHHH! Thankya Kriss! I shall read it as soon as I get home from shopping.

I love you for writing more!


message 13: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
And I wrote some 2000+ words from twelveish towards two... I don't even know where I got the insperation from either o.o I think it was watching from watching a Head-Slinger movie called Breaveheart that's depressing and about Scotts fighting for their freedom against the Irish, or something like that... Hmm.


message 14: by [deleted user] (new)

I'd like some feedback on my new book, I Love My Enemy. Here's a link to the first chapter. Thanks!

www.goodreads.com/story/show/61283-i-...


message 15: by Annemarie, hi (new)

Annemarie Carlson (annielawlz) | 3393 comments Mod
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...

Um yeah, this is my new story, some feedback would be nice. XD


message 16: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin | 3094 comments I posted three chapters of Crescendo - Chapter Three, Four, and Five! :D Please read and comment on all three! Thanks. XD New character introduced and all that jazz. Oh and the next chapter that I'm going to write is going to have a BIG SECRET. YAAAAY!!! XD So read these ones. Yay!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...


message 17: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
Chapter thirty four is up for The Seventh Dimension. Please read and leave a comment:

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...


message 18: by RedPath (new)

RedPath | 853 comments Juliet wrote: "http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...

Um yeah, this is my new story, some feedback would be nice. XD"


I'll read it :)

btw the intro and first chapter of my new story In Between:

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...


message 19: by Brigid ✩, No tears in the writer, no tears in the reader. (new)

Brigid ✩ | 11973 comments Mod
Chapter 8 of Unraveling. :)

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5...


message 20: by Daisy (new)

Daisy (datdaisy) http://www.daisydevil13.350.com/Immor...
send me a message to comment plz. I kinda forget where I post stuff on here. XD


message 21: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin | 3094 comments Chapter Six of Crescendo is up. THE BIG SECRET ABOUT DILLON IS REVEALED!!!!! READ IT TO FIND OUT!!! YAY!!!! :D This story is starting to get REALLY fun. Tehehe. XD Read and comment, please! Yay! XD

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...


message 22: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
I had a really weird insperation moment earlier today and I came up with this story... Currently it's called Macabre, but that's probably going to change later on. I don't know for sure... I actually kinda like Macabre... Anyhoo, enough of my rambling. Just read it, and leave a comment please. You know you want to :P

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...


message 23: by Ellen (new)

Ellen | 870 comments So I decided to post the fourth chapter up of Lure.
I've only written about ten chapters of this story because I don't know where to take it (and I'm semi editing it) so it may be a while until the next chapter gets posted!
Please read and leave a comment! :D

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5...


message 24: by Mandy (new)

Mandy  Harmon (mandyharmon) | 10724 comments umm....why do we need this topic if we have personal writer topics and review my story topic...?


message 25: by Annemarie, hi (new)

Annemarie Carlson (annielawlz) | 3393 comments Mod
Probably because more people check then your own personal topics, and the review my story seems like it would take longer, and is more detailed feedback. This seems to be a way to easily update people on your writing.


message 26: by Mandy (new)

Mandy  Harmon (mandyharmon) | 10724 comments true. ok. sounds good.


message 27: by Mandy (last edited Feb 22, 2010 09:39AM) (new)

Mandy  Harmon (mandyharmon) | 10724 comments then i might as well take a shot at it:

summary:

A day in London 1834 started ordinary and foggy. But when a six year old girl appears on the doorstep of Lady Tareen, this ordinary day turns out not so ordinary at all.

Marie and Joshua are six year kids who live in Washington D.C. in the modern world. Like any other six year old kids, they love to explore. When they discover a dusty old globe in the attic of the White House, they are transported to the past of London-on a train track. Marie hits her head and ends up on a Lady Tareen's front doorstep, with amnesia.
Joshua gets split up from Marie and becomes a servant. Will Marie and Joshua ever get back together again? Will they find a way to their real home?

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5...

PLEASE GIVE FEEDBACK!!!!


message 28: by Mandy (new)

Mandy  Harmon (mandyharmon) | 10724 comments what do you all think of this idea, i just thought of it 2 minutes ago, seriously. this would be the beginning:

My food is wanted all over the world. My chef’s hat has started its own line hats in China. My cooking spoons are made into currency in Russia. My last weeks apron sold on eBay for 100 grand.

My name is Chef Gustav Finnegan.



message 29: by Madeline (last edited Feb 22, 2010 03:35PM) (new)

Madeline Is that a real person?

but it sounds good anyway, i was just curious


message 30: by [deleted user] (new)

Yeah, that sounds pretty interesting. :) Tell me what you think of this. I just started the story yesterday, but have had the idea for a while.




I hate winter. It's not because of the cold or how the snow freezes over every night. It's because winter is when the wolves run most often. When the most car accidents take place and hardly any tourists come through.
My name is Lizabeth Kay Lanith, but I go by Lizzy. I live in the small, no, tiny town of Sycress, Massachusetts on the coast. The only reason our town exists is because of all the old Victorian houses still standing on cracked foundations that bring in tourists.


message 31: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
Sounds like a cool idea o.o


message 32: by [deleted user] (new)

Mine? Thanks. :)


message 33: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
You're welcome.


message 34: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
Hmm... Here's chapter one for Macabre Grin. Please read it and leave a comment :/ It isn't very long:

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...


message 35: by Jayda (new)

Jayda | 2761 comments CHAPTER SIXTEEN OF REBEL!!!
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5...

Okay, SO sorry it's been so long! Busy busy busy.
Anyway, this is shorter then I thought it would be, BUT the next couple of chapters should be longer :) This one is around 3-4k and the next ones (hopefully) will be around 5-6k!

Anyway, READ AND COMMENT/LIKE PLEASE! :)
You know you want to!

Hopefully the next chapter will be up quicker then this one was!


message 36: by [deleted user] (new)

Butterfly Fly... Please read!!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5...


message 37: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin | 3094 comments I posted Chapter Nine of Crescendo! Apollo's getting really awesome. I think I've developed a crush on him, which is crazy, because I planned on NOT getting a crush on this guy. O_O hehe. Read it peoples! And leave me awesome long, juicy comments! Or you are not cool. Just kidding. Actually, I'm not. READ AND COMMENT. XD

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...


message 38: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
Looky! Chapter thirty-five for The Seventh Dimension... I'm only 5-7 chapters away from finishing now... Maybe less XD. Please read and leave a comment... hehe... I've got some nice things planned for the second chapter:

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...


message 39: by Sella (new)

Sella Malin | 3094 comments Chapter Ten of Crescendo is up! :D Read and comment please. Oh, and I won't be able to write until Monday because I'm leaving for Tahoe right after school tomorrow. :( So bye till Monday!

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/6...


message 40: by Ellen (new)

Ellen | 870 comments Tahoe??? O_o what's that?? Have fun though Sella! :D


message 41: by Mandy (new)

Mandy  Harmon (mandyharmon) | 10724 comments Madeline wrote: "Is that a real person?

but it sounds good anyway, i was just curious"


lol. the last name Finnegan is after a teacher i had. but the rest is a joke. :)


message 42: by Mandy (new)

Mandy  Harmon (mandyharmon) | 10724 comments Death by Fire wrote: "Yeah, that sounds pretty interesting. :) Tell me what you think of this. I just started the story yesterday, but have had the idea for a while.




I hate winter. It's not because of the cold or ho..."


SOUNDS REALLY GOOD!!! PLEASE WRITE!!!


message 43: by Leonard (new)

Leonard Santos | 5 comments I agree with Mandy!


message 44: by Jayda (last edited Feb 26, 2010 07:16PM) (new)

Jayda | 2761 comments CHAPTER SEVENTEEN OF REBEL!!!
http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5...

READ IT! NOW! :)
This one is a bit longer then the last few - 4k+ words! Yay! The next chapter will be great :) You guys will love it, for sure.

Please like and/or comment and let me know what you think! Thanks!


message 45: by Jayda (new)

Jayda | 2761 comments Yay! Thanks! :)


message 46: by Jayda (new)

Jayda | 2761 comments Oh, I did? Do you know where?


message 47: by Jayda (new)

Jayda | 2761 comments Oh, nevermind, I found it! Thanks for pointing that out for me! :)


message 48: by Kriss (new)

Kriss (krisslee) | 5015 comments Mod
Here's chapter thirty six for The Seventh Dimension. Please read and leave a comment... Things are starting to get good :P

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...


message 49: by [deleted user] (new)

Plese tell me what you think..

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/4...


message 50: by Aviva (new)

Aviva (newtimelord) I finished typing up the first chapter and will try to get more in. Please read and comment: The World's Fate


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