Take two : Potential Blurb for querying.

[Anisha]

Few lovely people had taken the efforts to correct my first blurb and I look forward for more,


Theodrek, King of Frinzia possesses the military might to conquer all kingdoms, but has long held back, believing in the sovereignty of each realm. Consumed by guilt over the devastating wars his bloodline initiated, he devotes to peace. And no King dares to poke his reluctance to fight. Now, as famine ravages his kingdom, he believes the land itself is exacting revenge for the sins of his ancestors.

Driven by determination to redeem his family's past, Theodrek becomes fixated on finding a cure for the blighted crops, seeing it as a crucial step towards atonement of his Kingship.
While walking among his people in disguise as Fain, Theodrek falls deeply in love with Areen, a simple girl of the bakers. But when he catches her stealing the sacred crown of his late mother, the most revered artifact in Frinzia, Theodrek's worlds collide. Areen escapes, leaving Theodrek no choice but to issue a death sentence and hunt her down himself, forcing him to confront the cruel irony of pursuing the woman he loves.

As Theodrek begins his journey to his antipodean Kingdom for a cure and possibly a place where Areen hides, his brother Ewan secretly plots massacres to exploit the kingdom's weaklings, using the very famine itself. He would go to any extent to justify the brutal measures against those he deems "impure". With tensions rising to choke, Theodrek must decide whether to protect the vulnerable, including the immigrants who have made Frinzia their home, or to succumb to the dark legacy of his own bloodline. Will the King find salvation or the ghosts of his past destroy everything he holds dear?

All kinds of feedback are waited upon.

[Anisha]

Okay, I've decreased the word count,


Theodrek, King of Frinzia possesses the might to conquer all kingdoms, but has long held back, believing in the sovereignty of realms. Consumed by guilt over the devastating wars his bloodline initiated, he devotes to peace. And no King dares to poke his reluctance to fight. Now, famine ravages his kingdom, showing the land itself is exacting revenge for his ancestors’ sins.

While amongst his people in disguise as Fain, Theodrek falls for Areen, a simple girl of the bakers. But when he catches her stealing the sacred crown of his late mother, Theodrek's worlds collide. Areen escapes, leaving Theodrek no choice but to hunt down the woman he loves ruthlessly.

As Theodrek begins his journey to his antipodean Kingdom for a cure and the place where Areen hides, his brother Ewan plots massacres eliminating the kingdom's weaklings, using the very famine itself. Rules are erased clean to justify the atrocities against those he deems "impure".

With a war looming closer, Theodrek must decide whether to protect the vulnerable, including the immigrants who have made Frinzia their home, or to succumb to the dark legacy of his own bloodline. Will the King find salvation or the ghosts of his past destroy everything he holds dear?

[Anisha]

An even shorter one,

King Theodrek of Frinzia has renounced conquest, haunted by the devastating wars of his ancestors. And when famine strikes, he sees it as punishment for his family's sins.

In disguise, Theodrek falls for Areen, a baker's daughter who steals his mother's sacred crown. He must hunt her down, but his journey takes him to the antipodean Kingdom, where he hopes to find a cure for the famine and reunite with Areen.

Meanwhile, Theodrek's brother Ewan plots massacres, targeting the most vulnerable, particularly the immigrants who have fled to Frinzia seeking livelihood. Theodrek must choose between protecting them and succumbing to his dark legacy. Will he find redemption, or will his past destroy everything?

[hiiii]

does redemtion mean being with Areen or does she get killed. i feel the if it is an enemies to lovers he should do smthing like " Will he find redemtion and love, or will his past destroy everything?

[hiiii]

other then that it is so freking good😍😍😍😍