Opening chapter of a young adult coming-of-age story

[Tom]

The first chapter of "An Obscure Desire of Love" is in strong need of feedback.

If you enjoy reading Young Adult novels written in the form of letters that is...

⦁ set in rural Scotland
⦁ written through the eyes of an introverted teenager
⦁ involves an unexpected and secret love story
⦁ has themes of self-discovery and complex relationships
⦁ and more...

... then I'd love to send you the first chapter (2500 words) for your feedback

[Cait]

Hi Tom,

I have read only one book in form of letters and I actually really enjoyed it. I would be happy to read the first chapter.

[Tom]

Hi Cait. Thank you so much for agreeing to read it.

What's your email so I can send it over?

[John]

Hi Tom. Sounds very intriguing. I’ve been reading a lot of UK authors lately and love the rural settings particularly. I’d love to give it a go.

John