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message 1: by Margaret (new)

Margaret Anscombe | 4 comments I'm just not sure how to flesh this out:

Laura Buckley thought she was done with love for good, but when she meets Professor David Morgan, everything changes. He sticks by her through all the turmoil of her father’s terminal illness and her ex-boyfriend’s attacks. But will they overcome the differences in their beliefs? And even if they do, will Ethan allow Laura to survive?


message 2: by Dwayne, Head of Lettuce (new)

Dwayne Fry | 4356 comments Mod
Who is Ethan? The ex-boyfriend?

Why is the ex-boyfriend allowed to keep attacking her? Why is David Morgan "sticking by" instead of stopping the attacks? Why isn't Laura fighting the guy off?

Difference in what beliefs? Religious / non-religious? Liberal / conservative? Flat-earther vs. roundie earther? Toilet paper goes over / under?

The first sentence is really cliched, too. [So-and-so] thought they were done with love until they met [so-and-so]. Try a fresh approach.


message 3: by Margaret (new)

Margaret Anscombe | 4 comments Thanks for the feedback. It would be helpful if people who are more familiar with romance could give feedback though.


message 4: by M.L. (new)

M.L. | 1126 comments Let's see, you could add a little more about Laura:

Laura Buckley has her share of hardship: a terminally ill father and a failed romance that left an abusive boyfriend stalking her. But when she meets Professor David Morgan everything changes. David is by her side through her fathers setbacks, he encourages her to get a restraining order against her boyfriend Ethan, and even the fact that he is a ____and she a staunch _____ does not deter him.

You could also add just a sentence about how bad the boyfriend is, i.e., she is afraid to report him because he has already done ___ and she is afraid not only for herself but for David as well.


message 5: by Dwayne, Head of Lettuce (new)

Dwayne Fry | 4356 comments Mod
Margaret wrote: "Thanks for the feedback. It would be helpful if people who are more familiar with romance could give feedback though."

Not sure what difference it should make.


message 6: by Margaret (new)

Margaret Anscombe | 4 comments Romance has different conventions from other fiction and the blurbs are different from the blurbs in other genres too.


message 7: by Margaret (new)

Margaret Anscombe | 4 comments M.L. wrote: "Let's see, you could add a little more about Laura:

Laura Buckley has her share of hardship: a terminally ill father and a failed romance that left an abusive boyfriend stalking her. But when she ..."


Thank you. That is helpful. I will try to incorporate some of your suggestions.


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