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Week 224 (August 4-11). Poems. Topic: Getting Away With Murder.
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Wow! Extremely well written, J Liana! Living across from a cemetery probably gives you tons of ideas! I am about to post my submission but it is going to pale in comparison -- terribly! You are an excellent writer!!
Here is my poetry submission for the topic: Getting Away With Murder. Feedback is ALWAYS welcome!
Eyes of a Doe
Big deep brown eyes
And lashes that fluttered
Grandpa grumbled
Frowned and muttered.
White baking powder
And Kool-aid galore
Chocolate fingerprints
All over the door.
The toddler was covered
From head to toe
A toothless grin
And the eyes of a doe.
"Gettin' away with murder
Is what you're lettin' him do,"
The old man laughed loudly
As he looked at the goo.
"There's no possible way
You can get mad at this,"
Granny waved her hand
And blew a nice kiss.
Standing unsteadily
On legs made of chunk
The aspiring chef
Dropped his spoon with a clunk.
Granny didn't care
If the room was a mess
'Cause of her grandson
She truly felt blessed.
Eyes of a Doe
Big deep brown eyes
And lashes that fluttered
Grandpa grumbled
Frowned and muttered.
White baking powder
And Kool-aid galore
Chocolate fingerprints
All over the door.
The toddler was covered
From head to toe
A toothless grin
And the eyes of a doe.
"Gettin' away with murder
Is what you're lettin' him do,"
The old man laughed loudly
As he looked at the goo.
"There's no possible way
You can get mad at this,"
Granny waved her hand
And blew a nice kiss.
Standing unsteadily
On legs made of chunk
The aspiring chef
Dropped his spoon with a clunk.
Granny didn't care
If the room was a mess
'Cause of her grandson
She truly felt blessed.
You're very welcome, J Liana!
I always try to run things by my husband before posting (if he will sit still long enough to listen!) and he said that I surprised him with this poem. He thought I was going to do something dark and sinister! Just wait til I post my story! Haha! I am glad you enjoyed it!
I always try to run things by my husband before posting (if he will sit still long enough to listen!) and he said that I surprised him with this poem. He thought I was going to do something dark and sinister! Just wait til I post my story! Haha! I am glad you enjoyed it!
Eternal VerdictThe end of the line was finally near
Now doctors and nurses his only friends
Almost blind and could barely hear
He was not compelled to make amends
Fifty years, he had been so very clever
Frightened young eyes that saw him last
He once thought he would live forever
Cruelly a marriage he ended horribly fast
Even now it made him grin
Her whole estate became his to run
He hissed venom at talk of sin
All he wanted was to have his fun
How the rap was all his to beat
He believed everything could be bought
Until the burning chaff seperated from the wheat
I'm found guily after all, became his eternal thought
Obviously, I'm not much of a poet; but this week's topic was making me feel kind of Poe-ish. Anyway, here goes... -- Suggestions to improve very much welcomed.Title: Trapped
Author: Anne
He ran so fast
He ran so far
Yet couldn’t make the drumming stop.
He knew he’d heard it all before
But each new day the dawn thrust forth
And sorrow drowned him more and more
Where once his loved one gazed on him
Her ashes covered
limb to limb
As down he gazed upon her pyre
And voices raged inside him wild
His murd’rous lust condemned to ride
The wave of guilt that spares no one
But washes through like midnight tide
No human court condemned this man
Yet living out his poor life span
Makes death a favored warm embrace
To live with this no man should face.
Melissa wrote: "Here is my poetry submission for the topic: Getting Away With Murder. Feedback is ALWAYS welcome!Eyes of a Doe
Big deep brown eyes
And lashes that fluttered
Grandpa grumbled
Frowned and mutter..."
Love it Melissa! You know I'm a mommy so I'm a sucker for this one.
Robert and Anne - Both excellent poems! Man, it is going to be so tough this week when it comes to decisions on best writings! I sometimes feel so insecure with such talented people in this group!!
And, Sarah, I am really glad you liked my poem! My short story was darker but I wanted to do something a little more "light-hearted" with the poem. It was difficult with the topic! But, I think I pulled it off! :)
And, Sarah, I am really glad you liked my poem! My short story was darker but I wanted to do something a little more "light-hearted" with the poem. It was difficult with the topic! But, I think I pulled it off! :)
I agree Melissa, that it is getting tough which is a good thing. Everyone's poems this week have been a pleasure to read so far. I have really enjoyed this group since joining.
I have really enjoyed this group as well, Robert! It has done me a world of good! I have even begun a new novel but someone told me that the idea has already been done on a television show. I had no idea. I believe I have another idea now, but I'm just not quite sure. I want to be original.
Rent a Horror Movieafter watching Jon Snow’s “Unseen Gaza”
We know the science
of decent programming.
Our eyes detect the borders
of the mind, what horror
must not be allowed
to reach its shores,
what anatomical details
need to be blurred,
excised.
Take for example the body
of a baby retrieved
in a bombing lull
after the passing of a tank.
It is not necessary to reveal
the missing lower extremities
or the lifeless nodding
head, charred.
It is enough to show
a shroud
like a newly washed curtain
folded into its own whiteness.
There goes a man,
nameless as the dead.
See how he walks
so very slowly
with the bundle.
Much more pleasing
to the careful eye.
Cut. Cut. Cut.
Reality altered
in selected frames
can lead
to complete
calmness.
So if you want blood and gore,
go to your corner
video store.
January – February 2009
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not sure if this fits. an old one from Alien to Any Skin
Melissa wrote: "Robert and Anne - Both excellent poems! Man, it is going to be so tough this week when it comes to decisions on best writings! I sometimes feel so insecure with such talented people in this group..."No need to feel at all insecure, Melissa -- You're up there with the best!
Oh, thank you, Anne! What a nice thing to say! I used to be really bad with my insecurities but I have come a long way. Sometimes I slip back into that cocoon of wonder though. I am my own worst critic.
Jim - Wow! That is a great piece. It conjures up such horrible images but with the way you have written it, that is what it is supposed to do. Images are actually "shown" but left to the mind. Very well done!
Jim - Wow! That is a great piece. It conjures up such horrible images but with the way you have written it, that is what it is supposed to do. Images are actually "shown" but left to the mind. Very well done!
Melissa wrote: "Oh, thank you, Anne! What a nice thing to say! I used to be really bad with my insecurities but I have come a long way. Sometimes I slip back into that cocoon of wonder though. I am my own wors..."It's hard to keep that balance, isn't it, Melissa? I have the same problem, always feeling I'm never good enough. The same qualities that drive us to do excel also make us crazy!
Exactly! I feel like I am a decent writer but not someone who is exceptional or extraordinary. I guess as long as I don't get booed or laughed out of the group then I am doing okay! :) heehee!
Melissa wrote: "Exactly! I feel like I am a decent writer but not someone who is exceptional or extraordinary. I guess as long as I don't get booed or laughed out of the group then I am doing okay! :) heehee!"No chance of that! Actually, I feel like anyone who's managed to publish a book is pretty extraordinary.
Anne - Well, thank you very much! My book is self-published though. But, I guess that is a feat in itself. I actually have "Uncertain" posted under Creative Writing if you would like to take a look at it. It is riddled with mistakes - punctuation errors and the like but I am working on something new now and I think I can do a lot better!
And, you are welcome, Jim!
And, you are welcome, Jim!
Yes, Melissa, I knew it was self-published, but I still think getting to that stage is an awesome accomplishment. I feel like I would need another lifetime to get there. I look forward to reading it!
How nice! I do hope you enjoy it if you read it. There is some "adult content" but I don't think I will have that in future works. And you never know, you can always self-publish as well or get discovered!
A Murder of CrowsDusk is the time, all mottled
and thin, when her blank eyes rise
to stare in a way I know
they cannot. Six feet of soil
covers a secret; daisies
tell of old plots. Her grave smile
worms its way, twisting through thought;
a knife blade biting cold flesh,
slicing through the haze of years
to an olive grove in shade.
Such raucous cries, a murder
of crows circling, disguise a
demise in vines far below.
~ R ~
Ryan, you are a man of few words, but those words are mighty powerful! Wonderful job!!
Head for the polls, ye pirates! Let no blood be shed at the polling place over poems and stories. The afterdeck has been reserved for that.https://www.goodreads.com/poll/show/1...
Please post directly into the topic and not a link. Please don’t use a poem previously used in this group.
Your poem can be any length.
This week’s topic is: Getting Away With Murder.
The rules are pretty loose. You can write a poem about anything that has to do with the topic. I do not care, but the poem you post must relate to the topic somehow.
Have fun!
Thank you to Garrison for suggesting the topic!