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You have until August 3 to post a poem, and August 4-6 we’ll vote for which one we thought was best.

Please post directly into the topic and not a link. Please don’t use a poem previously used in this group.

Your poem can be any length.

This week’s topic is: Breaking News

The rules are pretty loose. You can write a poem about anything that has to do with the topic. I do not care, but the poem you post must relate to the topic somehow.

Have fun!

Thank you to Paula for suggesting the topic!


message 2: by Ryan (last edited Jul 28, 2014 07:48PM) (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Flight of the Halcyon

Perched on her chair, she rocked away days
with sunlight cajoling her hair
into thinking it was golden once more.

I saw her on Sundays, for that was the only
newspaper worth reading, she told me.
The craggy map of her life softened
when I lowered my bike and walked
the plastic-wrapped cylinder
to her lap. For my troubles: a humbug
and a story or two, from a bowl that never ran dry.

In the desert of December, her porch an oasis,
where the tang of iced lemonade lounged,
draped in the aroma of manicured soldiers;
those straight-backed men, robed in lavender
and guarding their flower pot forts.

In March, my route changed to appease
some folk whose breaking news couldn't wait idly
on memory's thick ink or thin paper boys.
A season's tales, covered my canvas,
rendered in the pastels of a halcyon youth
and shared over hours constructed of moments.

The grey shades of August set the Magpies to nesting
and swooping invaders, of which there were many.
The first was the oldest and came in the night
to steal her stories for himself. The second, a gardener
to tame the bruised ranks before the new dawn
arrived. The last, a daughter to remove
the news, still shrouded in plastic
for her mother never had learned to read.

~ R ~

any feedback welcome


message 3: by Paula Tohline (new)

Paula Tohline Calhoun (paulatohlinecalhoun) | 493 comments Well, me mateys, as it has been DAYS since I have heard from any of you (I thought with my last "Haiku Overdo" that I had broken something and no one could hear me, so I just kept screaming into the black cyber void, hoping some day someone might find my poor body and bury it), I believe I'll make you wait for my submission this go 'round. Wouldn't it be ironic if I were the only one who didn't manage to post something?

Anyway, I do hope you all enjoy the topic. I thought it a good one, because it can go in so many different directions. . .like spilled milk. . .sort of like breaking moos. . .

I know. I'll shut up. For now.

(Thanks for taking pity on me!) HAH!


message 4: by Paula Tohline (last edited Jul 28, 2014 05:55AM) (new)

Paula Tohline Calhoun (paulatohlinecalhoun) | 493 comments Ryan wrote: "Flight of the Halcyon

Perched on her chair, she rocked away days
with sunlight cajoling her hair
into thinking it was golden once more.

I saw her on Sundays, for that was the only
newspaper worth..."


Ryan: You have thrown down the gauntlet with this one, young man. I shall have to keep a much closer eye on your doin's from here on.

In all seriousness, it's a lush and beautiful poem all the way through, but I go over and over the next-to-last stanza. Exquisite. Just enough pathos, just enough restraint.


message 5: by Ryan (last edited Jul 28, 2014 06:04AM) (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Thank you, Paula.

I've been writing madly over the last week and have hardly come up for air. Imagine my surprise when your topic was posted and the ink wasn't yet dry on a poem that fit.


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Ryan, WOW! You have me unable to come up with any other words other than WOW! I love it!!


message 7: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Wow, thanks ;)


message 8: by [deleted user] (new)

You're very welcome. Very touching and evokes many emotions. Awesome!


message 9: by Nicky (new)

Nicky (soundgirl) | 1141 comments Ryan wrote: "Flight of the Halcyon

That's lovely Ryan, I love the passage of time throughout and the little snapshots in each stanza. You write differently when you tell your own story - there's a really nice feel to the writing which leaves you wanting to know more of each tale.



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Here is my poetry submission for the topic: Breaking News. Feedback is ALWAYS welcome!

Home Bound by Melissa Andres

Rubbing at her knuckles
As she sat upon her chair
She removed the lavender scarf
Tied within her hair.

Turning on the television
To watch the noon day news
She sighed rather deeply
What else could she lose?

She hadn't been in touch
With the big, wide world
It'd been two months and one day
Since her sadness had unfurled.

The children had gone on
To resume their busy lives
The girls had their children
And the boys had their wives.

Commercials droned on endlessly
Hocking their useless wares
Why had God taken him?
It was more than she could bear.

Then she heard the signal
An awful, pounding sound
There was Breaking News
Lord, now what had they found?

There was the news reporter
Filling the t.v. screen
Dressed in a suit and tie
Staring with eyes of green.

"Nothing to report today
No wrecks or plane crashes
Nary a robbery or murder
Or fires ending in ashes.

No wars in foreign lands
No kids that were molested
Absolutely nothing bad
Not anyone arrested."

A grin fell upon her wrinkled face
She realized she'd drifted off
Sitting up a little straighter
Her throat cleared with a cough.

"I'm so glad that you've arrived"
She heard his tender voice
"I've been building us a mansion
And now we can rejoice!"

She touched her husband's cheek
Looked into deep green eyes
They'd be together for eternity
Where The Good News was alive!


message 11: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Thanks so much, Nicky.


message 12: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Beautiful, Melissa! A lovely tale, skillfully told. Your rhyme is precise and effortless. I've had that thought about the news so many times, I'll make sure I don't nod off while watching! Nicely done :)


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Sarah (sbrock36) | 110 comments Ryan wrote: "Flight of the Halcyon

Perched on her chair, she rocked away days
with sunlight cajoling her hair
into thinking it was golden once more.

I saw her on Sundays, for that was the only
newspaper worth..."


I don't know what to say Ryan. It's beautiful and I count it as a favorite from you.


message 14: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Thank you, Sarah. That's really nice feedback.


message 15: by [deleted user] (new)

Thanks so much, Ryan! I am glad you enjoyed it! :) Thank you for the compliments!


message 16: by Jim (new)

Jim Agustin (jim_pascual_agustin) | 625 comments News


PHILIPPINES. Five lines of text
about earthquake and flood in
Mindoro. Children drowned and
left hanging in trees. My country
in five lines, no more.

-o-

this is a translation of an old poem i wrote.


message 17: by Jim (new)

Jim Agustin (jim_pascual_agustin) | 625 comments thanks, Alex. this one is actually a translation of one of the poems from Baha-Bahagdang Karupukan


message 18: by Mandy (new)

Mandy Blake | 1231 comments Breaking News

Breaking News
is what they called it,
when they said another had died.

She believed him when he said
they'd be together forever,
but now she felt he had lied.

She cried the day
he flew away,
and on the day he came back.

But in between
he was Breaking News,
killed in a roadside attack.

The dreams they had
died too that day
along with everything they were.

For the Breaking News
that came in that day,
was also the news that broke her.


message 19: by Robert (new)

Robert Rooney | 60 comments Broken News

A child was kicked in the face while playing in the sand
For pointing at the culprit, people slapped his little hand
Breaking news tells him the kick came from a mermaid in the waves
The child didn't understand, of a lie we've become many slaves

Across the world another child sees homes full of fire
When he nods at who set it, people call him a tiny liar.
Breaking news let's him know a unicorn set the blaze
The child could see the truth through an awful dirty haze.

On an island a child wonders why her friends disappear
The people chide her and tells her they're really all still here.
Breaking news tells her nosey little girls are to blame
She looks and looks again but the friends are gone the same

Upon a hill a little girl wonders why she's not allowed to read
People tell her she must not if she doesn't want to bleed
Breaking news announces if she reads it will cause a flood
But she sees the Emperor has no clothes holding a scimitar soaked in blood.


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Ryan | 5334 comments Hear ye! Hear ye!

Week 223 is sailing off into the sunset, please get ye to the tavern and vote. The Captain and mice will be hosting a game of Celebrity Guess Who on deck afterwards.

Story Poll: https://www.goodreads.com/poll/show/1...

Poetry Poll: https://www.goodreads.com/poll/show/1...


message 21: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Hi, Al. Thanks for dropping in :) Stunning as ever. Your writing always has a dark sense of mystery that I find so appealing. Your repetition of 'conversation' is very effective and your last three lines are so good. Beautiful stuff!


message 22: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Jim! So, you haven't improved with practice - you've just always been brilliant?! This one doesn't pull any punches whatsoever. The images are startling and straight out of a nightmare. Your words have such power.


message 23: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Mandy, wow! You've managed to personalise the feeling of a breaking news story suddenly being all about you. I love the way you've structured stanzas 2, 3 and 4 to deliver your point with great impact. I think the third stanza is particularly strong and really brings home the reality of what our soldiers and their families are faced with all-too-often. Your last line is clever and such a strong finish. Well done, this is magic.


message 24: by Ryan (new)

Ryan | 5334 comments Hi, Robert. I've read 'Broken News' through a couple of times now and it keeps getting stronger. I love the 'lie' images you've used throughout and the fresh approach you've taken. I really like this poem a lot, mate. It hits all the right notes for me.

My only suggestion would be to tweak the last line of your first stanza a little bit - 'of a lie we've become many slaves' - feels like you've forced the line a bit to get the rhyme between waves and slaves.

Such a great idea and very well conveyed.


message 25: by Jim (new)

Jim Agustin (jim_pascual_agustin) | 625 comments Ryan, hahaha you are far too generous with your words about my poem. Thank you.


message 26: by Robert (new)

Robert Rooney | 60 comments Ryan wrote: "Hi, Robert. I've read 'Broken News' through a couple of times now and it keeps getting stronger. I love the 'lie' images you've used throughout and the fresh approach you've taken. I really like t..."

Hey Ryan,

Thank you for your input and suggestions. They are always welcome.


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