Please give me some ffeedback on a proposed blurb

[Joe]

I am getting ready to self-publish my new urban adventure novel "The Walshes"
I need to come up with a cover blurb. Any comments/suggestion on the following will be appreciated:
April Walsh is a writer. She is also a suburban housewife with two adolescent children and a loving husband. Her writing career has been on hold since she started her family. When she is offered the opportunity to write a six part series for a major newspaper and possibly land a book deal, she know she has to take it. The problem is that she will have to go undercover to investigate the sex industry. As her investigation moves forward, she is pushed deeper into the world of adult entertainment. She moves from waitress to stripper and on to escorting clients. Eve Sinful emerges as a powerful alter ego. April and her family become collateral damage. She emerges from the swamp knowing that she will be a successful writer but the world she loved is gone forever.

[Annette]

Hi! The bare honest truth is that this is bad, not the worst, but not good either.

It's written like a laundry list. You use emerge twice, and it reads like a novice writer wrote the book. As exciting as the premise is you made it sound flat.

Try using action verbs instead of the passive voice.

April Walsh, housewife by day and writer in her free time. For years she's pushed aside her career for her family's needs. Her big break comes when she's offered the writing gig of her life, a six-part series for a major newspaper.

Hoping to parley this opportunity into a book deal, April throws aside her fears to go undercover to investigate the lurid sex industry. Slowly, April Walsh, boring housewife, becomes Eve Sinful, seductress and sexual goddess. With Eve pushing for more control April and her family might not survive until the publishing contract.

I used the info you gave, so you can see you used a lot of words to say not much. I'm not saying mine is good, it really can't be since I have no heart for this book, but can you see what you're doing wrong?

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[Ime]

It reads more like a summary of the book than a blurb for it. You've given away the beginning, middle, and end without giving any excitement to those things. I think Annette is right in saying it has a laundry list style to it, so part of the problem is structural.

It needs to be more active and paint the protagonist as someone who is undergoing a deep personal struggle from which she may not emerge the same person. And it needs to do that without compromising the ending.

[Joe]

Annette wrote: "Hi! The bare honest truth is that this is bad, not the worst, but not good either.

It's written like a laundry list. You use emerge twice, and it reads like a novice writer wrote the book. As exc..."
I get you point and I appreciate your comments. I have some work to do. Thanks

[Joe]

Ime wrote: "It reads more like a summary of the book than a blurb for it. You've given away the beginning, middle, and end without giving any excitement to those things. I think Annette is right in saying it h..."

Thanks