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message 1: by Ri (new)

Ri Adriana lay there, silently awaiting her fate. She could still remember the looming presence of her captor. He watched over her like a hawk stalking its prey, ready to pounce. Adriana could feel her face going pale as she lay in the barren, futuristic room. Her lips were dry as sandpaper as she lay, forced to hear him cackle and scream.

message 2: by Sandy (new)

Sandy Frediani Interesting. Is this Adriana's memory or happening "real time"? I might reword a few things, but that's me.

message 3: by Ri (new)

Ri Hm... I didn't think about that. When I was writing I wrote in real time, but a memory could be an interesting concept :)

message 4: by Sandy (new)

Sandy Frediani Riley wrote: "She could still remember the looming presence of her captor. "

This is the sentence which made me wonder.

message 5: by Ri (new)

Ri Hm thank you! I will be more attentive to those things in the future!

message 6: by Ri (new)

Ri Everyone! Sorry I didn't make this clear earlier-- you are free to comment on this :)

message 7: by Hallie (new)

Hallie (inkyhallie) Sounds interesting :)

I've delayed the other topic for you :)

message 8: by Ri (new)

Ri Thank you :)

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